Linemp3SAMPLE - JJIreland

you could go for a speak saw melody or you could have a singer sign the melody for the chorus, but other than that its a great start

Very nice :0)

This seems like a super solid start! Intro is really sweet. I would be curious to hear how a bigger swell leading up to the drop would sound. Even maybe trying at 52 seconds letting the first note of the piano on the one stay and then dropping out those bells (or whatever they are) until the drop. It could have a nice dramatic pause with a bigger "pay off". Just an idea. Anyway, great piece and I think it deserves some rock solid vocals on top. Will be interested to see where you wind up....after you get over your beat block! :)

This seems like a super solid start! Intro is really sweet. I would be curious to hear how a bigger swell leading up to the drop would sound. Even maybe trying at 52 seconds letting the first note of the piano on the one stay and then dropping out those bells (or whatever they are) until the drop. It could have a nice dramatic pause with a bigger "pay off". Just an idea. Anyway, great piece and I think it deserves some rock solid vocals on top. Will be interested to see where you wind up....after you get over your beat block! :)

Nice. But too short.

So you have a terrific beginning to a really, really good song. Intro, and first verse are done, now you need to work on a chorus (hook) section, a bridge, and then your outro - then glue it all together and try to keep it under 4 minutes, haha. I would also advise you to look on Looperman for one of the many vocalists on here and if you find one you really like, ask them to lay some vocals over it. I can envision a Sam Smith type voice, or a female with the chops to carry this. With the piano being the anchor on it, you could also find someone similar to a lead singer like Train's Patrick Monahan, or Imagine Dragons Dan Reynolds. One thing is for sure, keep working on it as it has serious potential. Best of luck with it. I hope all is well.

Bear

Overall intro is brilliant! The Beat kicks in with guitar, wow I say where is the rest? I think it's going to be a spectacular creation! I'll be back for sure to check on results

A lightly distorted saw pad with delay might sound pretty cool. Maybe even a frequency filter for the wahwah sound. Something a bit gritty to cut through the lighter backing music. If you wanted to keep it lighter, then developing the piano would be a good start. A slow arpeggiation in the higher register could sound nice. It sounds great so far. It'll be nice to hear the full version.