Description : Been working on this demo for about a couple of days... not sure what to think of it so please give me feedback. I would like to know if i'm taking the right direction.
there is a progression change about halfway through, does it make sense or does it sound like a complete different song?
Anyone welcome to collaborate!

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  1. BlancFroid
    BlancFroid on Sun 5th Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    Cool comp - very poppy. My only suggestion would be bringing up the drums a bit - you've got some cool propulsive parts that could use that punch. Great work!

    Mario
    Reply by Mario

    Thanks for the note... i definitely have to work on the automation in order to get the song moving!

  2. Indieground
    Indieground on Sun 5th Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    Hi mate
    You're track is coherent and works well so far,
    You can choose to works on the structure and the editing later,
    it's up to you.
    Personnaly i first works on demo, let some time and return to it (days, weeks month ?) later, it's bring a "fresh listening".

    You can listen to my tracks (some got guitar some not) and if you want some help i can may be replace some of your midi sounds by real guitar parts
    Your track reminds me a bit of "english vibe" which i know well

    My email indieground75 [@] gmail.com

    More sounds here
    https://soundcloud.com/indieground

  3. Mykael
    Mykael on Sun 5th Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    For a piece in progress, this song is quite brilliant. As a vocalist (singer-songwriter) I kind of dig the structure as is. Some of the great songs don't follow the norm. With that said, if you are going to tweak the structure, TA's suggestion is pretty spot on. I can totally hear this tune being rocked out at an outdoor venue! Well done!

    LovePeace&Light,

    Mykael

  4. danke
    danke on Sat 4th Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    this is very cool music...English pop/rock...it needs a singer who speaks that Liverpool accent...:-)

    well done, Danke

    Mario
    Reply by Mario

    Thank you!
    At first I had Julian Casablancas in mind but I think Liverpool Accent would sound better xD

    Valdez

  5. BLEEP
    BLEEP on Sat 4th Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    j'espère que tu ne m'en voudras pas mais mon feedback je vais le faire en français :)
    pour moi ton morceau, en son état actuel, il tient carrément la route! c'est une bonne petite ballade pop rock (je parle en fonction de ma sensibilité musicale et de ma perception personnelle bien sur)
    Le choix des instruments est cohérent, ils fonctionnent bien ensemble, la basse je la verrai plus ronde, plus chaude pour occuper plus de place dans les basses justement. A l'écoute, d'aspect global je dirai que tu surfes en grand partie sur medium / aigus.
    En tous les cas, pour moi ce morceau il marche et il marche bien! joli boulot! félicitations!
    Bleep

  6. theHumps
    theHumps on Fri 3rd Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    Sounds like a song to me! I like what you've done so far, decent idea. I don't get too hung up on arrangements, I listen to hear if the idea flows right along, if there are any instruments that just sound out of place or if a change is or isn't working in a track and also if the transitions between the parts are decent. It could use a vocal track(s) but the bones are in place. I like the space in the song, the instruments all seem to be sitting in their spot nicely and the space is there to add some.

    I would suggest to keep working it out till you feel more sure of it, hopefully with the response you're getting you should be feeling good about it. I think with a vocal melody you can then add, remove, change anything that might need to be adjusted to it. I often add an instrument to help compliment the vocal track in some way, like a response to the vocal in the form of a guitar lick, piano or pad... You have the guitar, piano/keys already so a singer may be able to fit the singing with what you've already have recorded. Good luck!

    Wayne

  7. crucethus
    crucethus on Fri 3rd Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    reminds me of the Strokes meets Elvis Costello if that makes any sense to you. I like the progression. Work this one out mate it's worth it!
    Cru

    Mario
    Reply by Mario

    Makes complete sense! I can't believe it, I actually had just finished a strokes jam session before getting into this song. Its amazing you were able to notice that!! Thanks for the feedback cru!

    -Valdez

  8. neuromancer56
    neuromancer56 on Fri 3rd Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    I like it. It seems like one coherent piece to me. It sounds like a song I'd hear on the radio and that's a good thing. It could definitely use some vocals. I'd like to hear more of the guitar that comes in at 1:51, having it come in earlier. Also I would mix it up a bit, adding some sequences with more notes, you have 1234567-12. I'd do 1234567-123 maybe even 1234. Then I'd mix up the pitch of the notes with different flavors of the sequence. You could see if cranking up the intensity with a lil more distortion/fx on some of the guitars makes it better or worse. These are just some thoughts you can play around with and see what you like.

  9. toastedavalanche
    toastedavalanche on Thu 2nd Nov 2017 - 1 year ago

    Hi man. I really like the track. It has a cool indie vibe that's really fun to listen to. I won't going into production it's a demo. Although I can definitely hear the sonic potential.
    What I will say is there isn't a progression change, more a refrain or middle 8 that kicks in at 1:35. This feels like it's building back to the chorus section (look back at the 0:07 mark). If it were me I'd bring that chorus hook back in at 2:05, then use the rest for an outro.
    These are just my thoughts of course. But whatever you do, don't give up on it as there's a lot of potential here.

    Regards,

    TA

    Mario
    Reply by Mario

    Thank you very much I had no idea where too take this song arrangment, but you really helped set what should be the hook of the song. I would really like to hear what you have to say about the sonic potential of this song. If you cant comment send me an email on your take of the sonic potential-

    -Valdez

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