Demo Feedback - Mario

2nd Nov 2017 21:38 - 8 years ago
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Description : Been working on this demo for about a couple of days... not sure what to think of it so please give me feedback. I would like to know if i'm taking the right direction.
there is a progression change about halfway through, does it make sense or does it sound like a complete different song?
Anyone welcome to collaborate!

Comments (9)

If you have time take a listen and give Mario some feedback.

BlancFroid
BlancFroid 5th Nov 2017 17:47 - 8 years ago
Cool comp - very poppy. My only suggestion would be bringing up the drums a bit - you've got some cool propulsive parts that could use that punch. Great work!
Mario
Mario replied 28th Nov 2017 - 8 years ago
Thanks for the note... i definitely have to work on the automation in order to get the song moving!
Indieground
Indieground 5th Nov 2017 13:48 - 8 years ago
Hi mate
You're track is coherent and works well so far,
You can choose to works on the structure and the editing later,
it's up to you.
Personnaly i first works on demo, let some time and return to it (days, weeks month ?) later, it's bring a "fresh listening".

You can listen to my tracks (some got guitar some not) and if you want some help i can may be replace some of your midi sounds by real guitar parts
Your track reminds me a bit of "english vibe" which i know well

My email indieground75 [@] gmail.com

More sounds here
https://soundcloud.com/indieground
Mykael
Mykael 5th Nov 2017 07:06 - 8 years ago
For a piece in progress, this song is quite brilliant. As a vocalist (singer-songwriter) I kind of dig the structure as is. Some of the great songs don't follow the norm. With that said, if you are going to tweak the structure, TA's suggestion is pretty spot on. I can totally hear this tune being rocked out at an outdoor venue! Well done!

LovePeace&Light,

Mykael
Danke
Danke 4th Nov 2017 19:00 - 8 years ago
this is very cool music...English pop/rock...it needs a singer who speaks that Liverpool accent...:-)

well done, Danke
Mario
Mario replied 5th Nov 2017 - 8 years ago
Thank you!
At first I had Julian Casablancas in mind but I think Liverpool Accent would sound better xD

Valdez
DubSmockers
DubSmockers 4th Nov 2017 18:14 - 8 years ago
j'espère que tu ne m'en voudras pas mais mon feedback je vais le faire en français :)
pour moi ton morceau, en son état actuel, il tient carrément la route! c'est une bonne petite ballade pop rock (je parle en fonction de ma sensibilité musicale et de ma perception personnelle bien sur)
Le choix des instruments est cohérent, ils fonctionnent bien ensemble, la basse je la verrai plus ronde, plus chaude pour occuper plus de place dans les basses justement. A l'écoute, d'aspect global je dirai que tu surfes en grand partie sur medium / aigus.
En tous les cas, pour moi ce morceau il marche et il marche bien! joli boulot! félicitations!
Bleep
theHumps
theHumps 3rd Nov 2017 11:16 - 8 years ago
Sounds like a song to me! I like what you've done so far, decent idea. I don't get too hung up on arrangements, I listen to hear if the idea flows right along, if there are any instruments that just sound out of place or if a change is or isn't working in a track and also if the transitions between the parts are decent. It could use a vocal track(s) but the bones are in place. I like the space in the song, the instruments all seem to be sitting in their spot nicely and the space is there to add some.

I would suggest to keep working it out till you feel more sure of it, hopefully with the response you're getting you should be feeling good about it. I think with a vocal melody you can then add, remove, change anything that might need to be adjusted to it. I often add an instrument to help compliment the vocal track in some way, like a response to the vocal in the form of a guitar lick, piano or pad... You have the guitar, piano/keys already so a singer may be able to fit the singing with what you've already have recorded. Good luck!

Wayne
crucethus
crucethus 3rd Nov 2017 04:33 - 8 years ago
reminds me of the Strokes meets Elvis Costello if that makes any sense to you. I like the progression. Work this one out mate it's worth it!
Cru
Mario
Mario replied 3rd Nov 2017 - 8 years ago
Makes complete sense! I can't believe it, I actually had just finished a strokes jam session before getting into this song. Its amazing you were able to notice that!! Thanks for the feedback cru!

-Valdez
neuromancer56
neuromancer56 3rd Nov 2017 01:32 - 8 years ago
I like it. It seems like one coherent piece to me. It sounds like a song I'd hear on the radio and that's a good thing. It could definitely use some vocals. I'd like to hear more of the guitar that comes in at 1:51, having it come in earlier. Also I would mix it up a bit, adding some sequences with more notes, you have 1234567-12. I'd do 1234567-123 maybe even 1234. Then I'd mix up the pitch of the notes with different flavors of the sequence. You could see if cranking up the intensity with a lil more distortion/fx on some of the guitars makes it better or worse. These are just some thoughts you can play around with and see what you like.
toastedavalanche
toastedavalanche 2nd Nov 2017 23:27 - 8 years ago
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