Hiromi's Call - Byizy

not bad for a first song?! it either needs to drop away into something more ambient or needs to get real dramatic, accent bits but i think its good as it is, i often try three or four parts bridge, verse, melody and a fiddle bit, you seem to sit on two max..good work

bass line.add a bass line to it...maybe a sudden drop in some where is it

I'm getting the feeling from what you wrote about your track that your fairly new to production "this isn't your first song : p' and worried about people not liking your stuff.

I have to say tho, it's really nice. You've got the right idea and obviously have a musical ear. So don't worry, just keep at it, the harder you work the better you'll get and quicker too.

Few things I'd do to improve it:

Vary your snare drum pattern a little more, throw in a couple of extra notes and push the odd note VERY slightly out of time to add feeling. Push it backwards if you want to slow the track down in feel for a second, or forwards to make it sound snappy for a second. Depending on which sounds better at the point in the beat you're working on.

Expand either the piano or the vocal with a different melody. Could just be something simple around the end or middle of the verse or wherever fits.

Try chopping the elements up a little more, cutting elements out of the beat every now and then, it can make a big difference to break up the track just cutting the odd little bit and piece out.

Keep up the good work anyway mate.

Rick.