JohnSmokey

Illenium has a voice! Never heard any of that artist, dubstep remix - is tight. This would have been in thousands of CoD montages in the 2010s.

When am I going to get any work done, if all I do is listen to this track?

Mrs. Zipbass this track is excellent.

This track, struck my ears very nicely. Did you do the vocals and the presumed digital instrumentation compilation with drum beat overlay? There will be a day down the line I can help a lot of people get their [music]artwork to more ears, and eyes. I love this track! For real, the voice is very nice on it.

This is f*cking brilliant. F*ucking: of unmotherf*ckingfathomable. So yes this unf*ckingfathomably brilliant. Top notch work here everyone. I going to drop a bunch of tracks on here under a new account by the Handle of Johnnie Smokes, which is who I am pseudonymly speaking, I do not want to have to delete the work of my other profile. Dropping in 5 min.

Aliens might be dancing to this right now or down the line, maybe they have crazy hearing and can tap into whatever. lol

Good track Paul! Really painting a picture here. Is anything really beyond repair...? Your lyrics have led me to ask today. When I do some traveling we should grab a beer, or if you do. Hopefully sometime soon.

Anyway nice track. Got a new one coming, going to leave the one you've heard up for another round.

Thank you,

Nice little memo track here. Sick!

Great Job theHumps were storming Normandy on that one. From the past to the present to the future, really capturing the vibe perfectly with the vocals. Excellent job.

Nice video! I think it captures the vibe very nicely!

Nice track! Nothing not to like here. Just some expression of the human condition.

Easy track to like here. Trees are great, why not be like one?

Just DMd the second part on soundcloud!

I did wind up going back to school. The hit happend way back in 2014. I just graduated with my Master's degree in December of 2023.

All love brother!

I got hit too... When I was 18 playing ice hockey. I like to think it knocked some sense into me. I was 3 weeks in to my freshman year of college. I decided I had to take a break and recover. On the way home from school after deciding I was not going to go back, I was talking to my mother about my hopes and dreams. When I got home I went into my back yard and smoked a big bowl of Marijuana. I head inside go up to my room. A feeling like ecstasy comes over my body. My ears ringing. Wiz Khalifa pops in on my left shoulder. Says, I'm Wiz. Then Drake pops in on my right shoulder. Says "I'm Drake". Wiz says "Make music.", then I say "I'm writing lyrics" after that they were gone. Later that night I'm thinking about what it could all mean and my left eye was forced to wink six times. So that's why I record. But here is a podcast I started like 2.5 years ago. Send me a message on soundcloud I'll link you to Part 2. It's all still private as I only have the first two parts recorded. It's a story from my childhood. I played the piano on the intro then freestyled the introduction, punching in and out. I think you'll laugh hearing it. Anyway... Hope all is well, lmk what you think.
Listen to S1 - T.S.a.A. Blackjack: Ep 1 - Part 1: The Blue Glow - Part 1 by Johnnie Smoke on #SoundCloud
https://on.soundcloud.com/Dz44VCxifsqtn3pa9

The beat has some notes of lose yourself by Eminem.

Seems you picked your words carefully! Keep progressing the forum for yourself. Optimistic track. Good flow. Good rhyme scheme. This ticks a lot of boxes for me.

Truly great Paul! No need to say too much as long as your punching through with the truth. No rush in the delivery! Just some harmonies if you really want to get into "singing" try writing some rhmyes too "oooo's" and "eeeee's" they are magical. You are progressing the forum here for yourself, and others. The most important thing a song can do is progress the forum, I do not care how bad your voice is, or how good. Does your song compliment the day? Does it inspire others? Sometimes showing empathy or describing a bad situation ragging on something a little bit is great. You took a hit to make a play when you were a kid. That's some Ice Hockey Terminology for being a team player. "Take a hit to make a play." Got one coming for looperman.

Nice job Paul! Stellar track, great thoughts to put on the record. Life's better with rhymes, these are good bars. Not rushed in the delivery at all. Really letting the instrumental shine through. Then you punch in with some solid ideas. Thats what its all about.

This is awesome Paul!... I like the short punchy bars.
Really it is nice work lyrically. This is not rushed at all, really valuing the time you have on the record. I've learned that just slamming the song like you are here is a great habit. Especially if you can get your ideas out and on a rhythm, it makes you feel cool. Thats what its all about!

Love to see you still holding it down, and letting your creative side show.

I'm back for the time being. Its been a while. We'll have to catch up.

I have a hockey game I have to get to, or Id write more. Later...

Nice job here Bao, everything is sitting nicely. I'm a sucker for lyrics, wish there were more.

This is awesome! This was a great track, a very easy listen from my side of things. I like the touch of blues.

This is perfect for what it is. Are you singing the track?



The voice is phenomenal! You have a hook there, and it sounds amazing and you hit us with it right of the bat. I had to replay the track because I missed its presence. The nature of a hook is that people will miss it until you bring it back. Bring that thing back somewhere before the song ends.

Sometimes when I record a hook, I think "Oh, would peoples ears miss this in about a minute?". Music can really be powerful for the listener but they shouldn't have to starve if you know what I mean.

You also have a great start to a little verse in there starting with "baby let me lift you up" and "I don't want to let you fall in love" I know lyrics are hard to come up with, but I think it could use a few more.

The arrangement is perfect on the intro "bars" and sounds like a hook to me. Maybe cut out some of the cluttered together filler vox hits and lay those few bars from the beginning down again where they fit.

I think tracks like these really let peoples talent shine through. I'm hooked on the sound of the whole track. Do I think you should put a lot of time into refining it? No, I think you established yourself on the record in a really creative way that showcases your talent. You'll look back at this in a year and say, Wow!

I think this track reminds me of my track New Money... Its not on looperman anymore. I had to delete it to upload other songs. But you could find it on any streaming platform, spotify, apple music, youtube etc... here is a link

https://songwhip. com/johnniesmoke/new-money

I spaced out the .com FYI.



Great track again!

Johnnie

Hot Dog! This is a fun one.