Heavy Breath - Nln1

10th Dec 2019 05:27 - 6 years ago
Description : Hello it has been a while! This is a raw recording of a song I wrote named Heavy Breath in January 2018.

I think that lyrics seem rough as well as the singing, but think the concept is still good. What else can I do to improve it? Thanks!

Comments (4)

If you have time take a listen and give nln1 some feedback.

theHumps
theHumps 16th Dec 2019 12:29 - 6 years ago
The effort is there with the singing, that's what matters. Could be worse, it doesn't sound like lady gaga or taylor swift. ha!

Sometimes less is more. I don't know if it needs any more music added, maybe some more giggling. ;)

Wayne
tsochai
tsochai 15th Dec 2019 19:28 - 6 years ago
so, i like it. the singing isnt maria carey, but its good. i think what makes this seem so unfinished and 'raw'
would be the beat, honestly, everything is dope, with the right instruments and mixes anything will sound better.
KEEP WORKING!! we all are
-CAP
HeathAlexander
HeathAlexander 11th Dec 2019 05:38 - 6 years ago
Personally, I think 1:00 is begging for a solid Lo-Fi drum entrance, but it depends on the mood you're going for. If you want to keep it minimalist, more intricate guitar during the chorus would greatly increase interest. It's difficult writing a song for only two instruments and you did a great job. If you want, you can contact me with your email and stems and I'll work with you.
Frostdog
Frostdog 11th Dec 2019 02:46 - 6 years ago
this is nice

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