Description : Just a little freestyle I recorded. I also produced the track! Feedback is encouraged! The track starts out to be a tad satirical to the stereotypical hip-hop culture (big chains, fast cars, etc.) but half way through it switches to a message to all the doubters.

Note: this track is also for sale on my Bandcamp site

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  1. Mosaic
    Mosaic on Mon 22nd Sep 2014 - 9 years ago

    Hey Mack

    Mate not a genre I listen too to much so can give to much constructive feedback, one thing that did stand out was the clarity of the track, crystal clear through laptop speakers which is a good sign, great vocal, lol thought my net dropped out, but no, just a short track...short but enjoyable man...Fav...Peace n Respect...Mosaic...

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    Hey Mosaic, sorry it took me so long to get back to you! I've just been real busy since summer holidays finished. Anyway thanks for the positive feedback man! Much appreciated I'm glad you liked it.
    Peace,
    MACKEY MARSHEL

  2. Tumbleweed
    Tumbleweed on Sun 24th Aug 2014 - 9 years ago

    definitely different...and since rap isn`t on my usual listening menu I sure wouldn`t be a good source of advice...I do agree with the comments on the rap & music being out of sync...and sure...the production is a bit weak,...but we all start somewhere...You have the good fortune of getting off to an early start with your music mackeymarshel...so you know if you keep at it & invest in the learning you will be well on your way.....its a great addiction and a lifetime of satisfaction...all the best & keep on......Ed

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    Thank you I appreciate the comment! I'm glad you played my track even though you don't usual listen to rap. I will continue to work on music and I will always be looking to improve.
    All the best to you as well!

  3. SubFreq
    SubFreq on Mon 4th Aug 2014 - 9 years ago

    Wasn't bad but I don't think the track suited your vocals(or the other way around).

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    I appreciate the feedback! I wanted to experiment with this track and I knew that uploading it to Looperman would be the best way to get some honest and constructive comments because everyone on this site likes to do their own thing and not be held behind a certain genre!

  4. DanGoldstein
    DanGoldstein on Mon 4th Aug 2014 - 9 years ago

    believe it or not i kind of think about frank zappa mother of invention on your beat/instruments. it is a neat, sound and yea - satirical quality (which was also in zappa's stuff). nice work - hope you keep goin with it.

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    Thanks for the feedback! I have heard of Frank Zappa but never listened to any of his music, I will definitely have to check some out!

  5. VicaMOOR
    VicaMOOR on Wed 30th Jul 2014 - 9 years ago

    What's up, mackeymarshel

    Nice track. It's a bit out of the box, like you meant it to be -- it could be mixed better by laying the kicks and snares and turning down the bass plucks... but I like the direction. It's refreshing, really, like the string in the background has a quirky touch to it that's a bit charming, along with the bass.

    Your flow and delivery needs work, also turn it up so I can understand what you're saying.

    Like the first guy said, this is a good start. Keep it up!

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    Thanks for the comment! I appreciate the feedback!
    I agree it could be mixed better, mixing/mastering is on top of my list of things I want to improve on.

    Because the beat was 'out of the box' I wanted to try the same with the flow. I realize now that it didn't work out as good as I'd hoped. To me it sounds to 'choppy'.

  6. GramoChopin
    GramoChopin on Mon 28th Jul 2014 - 9 years ago

    Hey so I'll get back to your comment on my mecha track soon, I return the favor to anyone who reviews one of my tracks. I see you just joined basically, welcome to the site bro. It's a cool place really, community is great. Anyways, nice starter track you got going here.

    The lyrics were are actually better than I thought. You need a bit more of a flow but lyrics wise, It wasn't too bad. The beat itself is more of a electronic minimal type of beat. But alot of people tend to do their own thing (including me) so I don't do the genre nazi business much. (Hardly do at all) Cool track, I would just like some more effort put into it.

    Most people on here also give honest critique. So don't take it personal, we just like to help and push others. Keep at it man, peace

    Gramo/Neo

    mackeymarshel
    Reply by mackeymarshel

    Thanks for commenting, I appreciate the honest feedback! In regards to the beat I wanted to create something that was a little 'outside the box' instead of the typical hip-hop/rap type beat. In terms of the flow, I agree with what you said, I'm always trying to improve my delivery and flow.

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