GullyMan - Sludgecity

Well first off, I know how long it took me to get the breaks to work for me, so I sympathize but I have to be honest and say that there is a lot missing here. One being it is way too short.
The Synth is too mixed up, and seems like it's just all over the place at the end. A reverb always softens it up even if it were just a small room or whatever. Maybe even a delay.
Another thing I suggest is finding a couple of notes to work with, as a base, then working on that. Too many variations in notes and too many patterns confuse people and make it hard to follow.
Another thing is the beat, I don't know what you listen to that makes this a good beat but I don't hear it. Not to sound too harsh, but I just want to point out the eqing is to extreme, the dynamics are way off and the levels of the instruemnts too. I'm my own worst critic when it comes to my breaks - I spend hours on them trying to perfect them. One thing that helps is comparing them to other loops. I KNow they may be a finished version of the loop but getting as close as you can to another beat that sounds the same (or if you re-create it to sound the same) helps a lot.
The bass needs a lot of work, I know you were probably trying to get a growl out of that but try adding some resonance to it, it'll give it a bit more fluidity. Eq it a lot and make sure it has a lot of small compressions to give you more control over the dynamics rather than loosing all the peaks and dips of the bass.
Hope this helps,
I know DNB can be difficult but keep at it, you'll get better!
Steve

there are some good ideas here...for me the track lacked thickness throughout... your basses need to layered as does you drum track...don't get me wrong I enjoy the track it just seemed quite basic.. the synths worked really well though...

I see you use Reason 4...I would suggest you pop over to boyinaband.com that guys tutorials taught me loads...

anyway keep 'em coming brother

crazy track you got here, i like how you switch it up alot, that is very important to not let the beat go stail, keep up the hood work