From reading all the comments, this track has gone through several changes in it's short life. Good to see your spirit rising to work out any issues and make your productions better. I lack that quality, lol.

I like the idea and feel of the song. There is something to this idea. I often tend to do a lot of shorter compositions by taking an interesting idea and doing a 1-2 min musical treatment rather than a full length track. It keeps from repeating loops and musical phrases, I can add leads, pads, rhythm instruments just like any long song and the listener can get in and out quickly and hear interesting things all through the short but full production song. Plus you don't spend hours mixing many verses and chorus parts, bridges and all that and get all the benefits of learning production skills as you do it. I feel maybe if you took this approach here it might benefit the idea. Take the cool riffs and changes, sounds and any midi instruments and effects and rearrange it but shorten it up. Just my 2 cents. :)

Cheers!

Wayne

I agree with the Ennio Morricone comment.
Sounds great but I do have a problem with the repetition.
Doesn't belong in this kind of music.

Much Much better, now everything fits in it's place. Now you can experiment with the percussion and bringing the drama up. and then the drop to just the pad and rebuild the whole thing. even think about a key change at the end, the ideas are endless.
Cru

Killer man. I've got this cranked right now. Exceptional.

Ever heard of Ennio Morricone? He composed many of the songs for Italian director Sergio Marone.

That's who this now reminds me of. Cutting edge, alternative sounding,
not pop, ready from prime time. These drums work, and you're hearing the payoff. Great job. I've marked this as a fave. BRAVO.

Hey Neuromance that is a sold chunky track right there you have done a good job of this for sure. Nice mixing clear as a bell i loved the arrangement too cool guitar my fav instrument. best regards Robbie.

I think it all sounds great. I think this piano and guitar go together well. My only complaint is that there is a really distracting hi-hat tssit in there throughout that is a little loud. Maybe thats what you wanted, but for me it's distracting. Makes me think of a jet of air being let out of a tire. Could just be me though, but I wanted to throw my 2 cents in. Otherwise I love the grove man!

Real smooth. I like the drums a lot

Okay, I hope you take this with the spirit in which it's being given. I agree with Cru and Danke. The guitar is in a different time signature than the drums. The piano comes in, but it strikes me as a cool sequencer piece, where technology, and not someone playing manually, has been inserted.

That's not to say that this body of work isn't creative. Let me also say, that I commend you for having the courage to upload your work in progress (I'd suggest since this isn't royalty free, then you may want to change it to no downloads).

Sometimes stepping away and coming back to a piece can give a fresh perspective. I wish you all the best. May I also ask, what style of music has your heart? What genre is your passion when you create?

Nice!!!

cru is true...:-)

not calculating this fact, I prefer this one...

handshake, Danke

Something amiss with the rhythms of the guitar and piano. They both sound nice separately but not together.
cru