Sleepless - WithoutMyArmor

I agree with most others seem to be saying. Not a ton needs to be improved. However, I could probably make a few adjustments if you want, and i'm definitely up for producing some songs for you. No pressure, just let me know if you want me to give it a shot :)

Brilliant, I loved the structure. cut the g-solo by half the second part is cloying but the first part is great. add some percussion and a little more on the bottom and we will clean up those pianos to shimmer a little more and you will have perfection!
Cru

Great job.
Killer "hook" that compliments your stellar vocals.
What's missing? I didn't hear a definitive bass line, and imho a song like
this needs one (nothing showy, just something to bottom this out). I also agree with VirginiaSlimm on supporting vocals. They need to swell with you at the 1:30 mark of the song. I'd suggest "ghost" vocals, almost in a whispery, far off sounding way, and in a slightly different melody than what you are lead singing on the chorus/hook. Again, nothing overbearing, just in and out at certain points in the tune.

You may want to check out a prolific drummer on here by the name of laurentwirz. I think he may have something to fit this song. Link to his drum loops page: https://www.looperman.com/users/loops/2054129

Your guitar solo is another fave for me, but especially the melancholy cello? Viola?

This is stream worthy music, and I fully expect to see you snagging awards sometime in the future.

you need help finding an engineer? Engineer me! lol, but forreal, this is a great song! :)

donno what the hell could be the 'help' here...this is a stunning track in every level, maybe the only thing what I miss is the drums...good luck on your way because your voice and music needs to be known to the whole wide world...

handshake, Danke

Hey dude. I love your track. One of the best I've heard on looperman
Although it's not really my genre. I would love to work with you if you want to branch out to a more pop based genre. Your so good man you could really make a popular song if you had the right producer. thanks>

I like this song, it's awesome. I would like to hear a background shout for "I don't wanna waste" at :59
It seems like a good place to start building up supporting vocals that would really push the chorus at 1:12 like a mf. Doing that will also make the 2nd verse sound more intimate when you could drop out the backing vocals at 1:48.

Good bracing on "trials and errors" with backing vocs.

You did a nice job breaking the track back down for the outro.

If you want another voice for it let me know! I'd have a 2-3 day turnaround probably.
Damn good song.

Instant fav. So much going for you in this track. :) Not a whole lot needs improving on, although I do agree that the buildup around 1:12 is begging for some kind of fitting percussion. (But it would have to be the right one so as not to take away from the emotional feel of the track.)

Overall, such a great track. Already can't get it out of my head. ;)

Ok I'm going to be honest, I don't think you need any help perfecting this. It stands pretty tough on its own. The only thing I hear after the pre-chorus after the second verse is a classical string arrangement to help accompany the guitars with a light sustain during the guitar solo. I believe this song deserves the right attention, this song could be playing in films and could really make an impact musically. I've heard your acapellas all throughout the Loop. I believe I may have downloaded one of them but never worked on it. After hearing this, I might have to look into doing that. I think you have a quality in your voice and your songwriting that should be amplied among the masses. I'm going to be listening to your other songs too. Excellent job!

Hey man,

I just listened to your track, and I'm speechless. It sounds wonderful, you did amazing with the guitars and strings and vocals and solo and basically everything. This is really a pearl in between all the Looperman tracks.

Couple of tips to help you further: I think that some percussion would do this track good, or just more rhythm overall. Don't forget to vary a bit in your melodies / rhythm / chords to distinguish one part from the other, and give it more energy.

I love this track man! Keep it up! Can't wait to hear the finalized product, if you're going to post it here as well :D