Used To Be HIPHOP Rough Draft - Wordybum

Hot track, and two wicked flows..great work

Yo again.

Thanks for the reply. Good to see PlanetJazz has come back and will take your vocals and even send you the audio tracks to do your own version.

"i didn't know if the words would sound right over the track because of those very aggressive stabs throughout the verses."

Yeah, that's kind of what I was getting at. They're good stabs but interfere quite a bit with the vocals. So, maybe the timing of the stabs can be redone by PlanetJazz to fall more inbetween the vocal lines. Or maybe they could be removed entirely from teh verses. Just the bass and drums should be fine to accompany the vocals. Then the stabs will be more exciting when they return as a break from the vocal. Just my little idea for PlanetJazz, in case he reads this.

I look forward to seeng what the two of you end up with as I feel there's definite room for improvement.

Good work, all the same.

Hi Wordy.

I've already commented on the original version of this track in quite a bit of detail so I won't bother again here.

I think your added vocals are, predictably, good. However, there's a big overall problem: the mix is now just too busy.

So, if the top layer of synths could be partially/mostly removed as you're rapping, things would be a lot cleaner. Your vocals get in the way of the nice jazzy bass guitar runs. Not a criticism of you and I understand that you don't have the separate stems to mix - just the one MP3 file of the whole mix.

Second half you've left without vocals so it would be fine to get rid of the top layer of synths in the first minute (as you're rapping) as that stuff gets heard later anyway.

1:12 when you take a bit of a vocal break the other elements can be heard more comfortably again.

I guess the only options are either PlanetJazz sending you the separate elements to mix or you sending him your vocals to incorporate.

Good luck.

im down!!could shoot you a rough by 2morrow!