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Description : Putting this on it's kind of funny cos I've just looked at my first track I tried rapping on 2 years ago, all those ppl saying I should quit rap (well i've stopped singing), and yeah it sounded horrible but if i hadn't continued i wouldn't have come so far !
Anyway this song is for someone who means a lot to me, and it's going to be on a first mixtape I'm working on. Please give any useful suggestions...

PS: and btw, i'm looking for rappers and beatmakers for my mixtape cos so far i put this all together on my own (i mean i made the beat).
thanx to Far Winter for the chorus cos i honestly can't sing !

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  1. ArtfulOne
    ArtfulOne on Fri 1st Nov 2013 - 10 years ago

    I think your lyrics had some great imagery to them. The quality sucks, but I understand not having great equipment to work with. At points it sounded that you got off the beat. This could be two things. 1. The quality just makes it sound this way. 2. You are trying to put all the words in, and hitting your lines past the beat. I like that you sampled "Stay." Great choice. Having a male singer do the hook. Another great choice. If you want to improve on the rapping then get at me. We'll collab and I really think I could help you improve. I can send you some of my stuff if you'd like to take a listen. You got potential. If you like doing it, then keep at it. I listen to tracks I made 10 years ago, and they are not great, but I kept at it and improved.

    - The Artful One

    JamesDavies
    Reply by JamesDavies

    personally i didn't find any problem putting all the words in but i must agree: the quality sucks ! anyway, thanx for listening and commenting and yeah, i'll check out some of your stuff ^^ i'm happy to collab :)

  2. ntid
    ntid on Sun 27th Oct 2013 - 10 years ago

    I like the pianos.

  3. AdamVelerez
    AdamVelerez on Sat 26th Oct 2013 - 10 years ago

    Alright, There seems to be a filter going on over your voice at the start which is ok'ish, I would perhaps take that out or not use it so heavily, but thats just my opinion.

    Find your own style, i think you will find it. If you want some beats every now and again then check my tracks. ps just ask for a download and I'll send you a private link.

    JamesDavies
    Reply by JamesDavies

    Thanx for the feedback man ! Actually there isn't any filter but yeah, i'm still trying to find my own style. And sure, I'll check out some of your beats ^^

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