Fayz

lol rawr is right! awesome track, i like the melody especially. its def a jam for the clubs, id increase the bass a little bit though, to kind of add the resonance to it. other than that i think this is a great track, i don't generally get into this style of music being that im so picky with repetition that is usually incorporated in this type of music but hey, you got my attention and i actually enjoyed it, so i gotta hand you two big thumbs up great job on the track

im going to have to agree with everyone else, great vocals! they truly are outstanding, with alot of heart and emotion put into the lyrics. i kinda like the eerie sound behind it, i think it fits nicely, kinda like an interlude track on a CD that leads to another song. i think the only thing that could make this better is if there was a little more energy. the track is great as is, but i can imagine it with a sort of intensity that really lifts it off the ground. it still feels a little like your in your comfort area, but i can tell that your slowly pushing your self further through out the track, but its kinda like an elevator in a building of 10 stories, but only goes up to the seventh floor.

im not criticizing, but theres just something itching under my skin that tells me, you have a real talent, and that even though this is really good, you could really do so much better. i love your voice, and i actually loved this track, but i bet you could do even better =) you should let me know next time you put out a new track, im really interested to hear some more of your work.

hey nice track, i really like the bass on it, its sick as hell, a little too repetitive at first, but not too bad, would be more interesting with vocals or something, but still its a really good track, my biggest grievance about this track though, is it lacks originality, feels like i've heard this track a thousand times before, and not just on looperman, but even in main stream music. i think you just need to experiment more and find "your" style. also change it up a bit. take like a section such as a bridge or break down as a chance to keep the listener more interested. change the beat, change the melody, slow it down, speed it up, anything really. it's cool to keep or change a beat for a chorus or hook section, but the melody definitely should have more attention drawn to it in certain sections, such as, a bridge or chorus.

but you definitely have some raw talent that could use a little refining, though music isn't really science, it is a formula and reading into music theory or analyzing your favorite songs could really help refine that raw talent and give you the key to that magic formula

best of luck

hot beat, i love how there's so many elements working together, i absolutely love it when music incorporates classical instruments with modern instruments and styles, beautiful piece with alot of emotion and it almost feels like there's a story behind it. but im kinda disappointed with the ending. i like tracks that have that kind of ending, but you have to kind of let the listener know that it's about to end. when im messing around with samples and tracks i found that if you add a build up such as, a reversed crash or something, it lets the listener know that something is going to change, so they expect the change, thus the perfect way to end a track abruptly without leaving an empty feeling.

other than the ending, i thought the whole track was great, the beat was strong, the melody was powerful, and the overall track was absolutely stunning, great job on the production

hey i like the track, you got a really great voice, not so hot about the instrumental. the instrument is kinda dull and occasionally off-beat. but i think you saved it with your voice.

but i feel they need to be pushed forward more, and cut some of the low frequencies out of it and boost the higher frequencies. also a little tip i learned recently is that if you take your vocals and then make back up vox for it, in either the same tone, or higher or lower in a harmonic combination, it will really add presence to the vocals.

one last thing, you have a really good voice! but it feels like your not confident enough with it, it really seemed like you were pretty deep in your comfort zone, and thats alright while your starting out, i get that problem alot im not perfect either, but compared to me your 100 times better, and you really need to embrace that and have more energy and confidence in your voice. just throwing that out there,

otherwise, i liked the track, and your vocals really were the only thing that made me keep listening

i actually like your voice, but i gotta agree a little less auto tune, or even smooth it of if you can if your gonna use auto-tune. but i can tell that the vocals raw would probably be alot better. theres lots of heart an emotion, and i think you really executed adding vocals to music nicely. this would make pretty good for a demo track, if you ever wanted to get signed or something. i really like the accompany music, its kinda cute and really exposes the emotion that the lyrics convey. not really my cup of tea but i like it, faved as soon as vocals came into play ^^. great performance and all around a great "feel good" tune. this has to be one of the best track's i heard with vocals. the vox go great with the music, and i didn't feel that one element was too overpowering over another element.

a little tip though, is to mess with the eq on the vox, and increase the higher frequencies, or even see if you cant use an exciter vst-plugin. what it does is "excites" high and low frequencies. if you apply that to vocals, it will sound very professional. the one i recently downloaded is called "X-cita" its pretty basic, not the best one in the world, i would recommended looking for a better one if you can. but as far as basic and free goes, it works. and the best part is, is that it's so easy to use you don't even need to have any prior knowledge.

any-who, like i said before its a really great track, and vocals are done nicely, but i'd like to actually hear your real voice i bet a million bucks your voice isn't half bad :)

hey thanks for contacting me, really appreciated, as far as the track goes, i'd say you did really good. i find it really complicated to fit sampled vocals to music, but i think this one came out fairly well. i like the background "let it go" kinda adds another emotion to the track, and while the drums kinda remind me of hip hop and the bass is kinda reggae, i think that the elements of the track come together in such a unique way.

great job on the track, and i hope to hear more later down the road

omg i made it to the bottom of the forum lol, great track, i really liked the bass to it, the melody is kinda cute like a romantic teenage rave thing, or like a best friend song. i love how your tracks always provoke stories in my head like i lived that moment in some kind of way. awesome track, i loved it ^^

awesome track, i love the quality of this track, i would totally rave to this and maybe even dedicate it to a feel people on my black list. theres nothing else i can really say, production is good so i dont really have any critisism, so great job! two accomplishments a great track and you've left me nearly speachless.

haha awesome, seems like Eshar is a celeb on looperman lol but as far as the track goes, very rich sounding, probably could have ended differently but very nice track, great job!

lol amazing! I freaking love this track!!!! omg dude you are the real deal! i mean honestly, i think you should put the vocals up front a little more but thats about it, amazing track, laughed my ass off at the end of the track "shouldn't there be a chorus here or something?" amazing...... just amazing... bloobers were pretty funny, but you know your actual voice isnt too bad for rap if you over lay your vox with different variations i think you'd be set, but yeah, awsome job!

ha i dig it, kinda sounds like a bonus track of an album, ... the last part made me laugh the freaking pause and then ... "These go to eleven" just because of that faved

i instantly thought of marilyn manson, could use more lyrics, and if it was longer that would be pretty cool too. id say the vox are actually disant enough to listen to, but they need more energy to them. other wise its not too bad of a start

pretty cool track, i think the music track should be brought back a few steps, deffinantly need to make the drums pop more, because if you break down rap or hip hop, its really about the beat of the drums and rhythm of the vocals. the other stuff is there to make the track diverse and instantly reconizable. of course im not an expert, maybe im wrong too, but i am very sure that if you take the music track down, increase the drums, and do what ever you have to to make those vocals crisp and clear this track would definently shine

as for the vocal artist, lots of energy, and that always appreciated. i dont know much about rap but id say that he's pretty solid, but id really like to be able to understand what he says, but i cant because the music track really distracts me from listening to what he's saying.

over all its a very nice track and good job the the both of you for making this track

its an alright track, i guess i was kind of comparing it more to your other stuff i've listened to in the past, like "Krillateen"

this track here has a good idea behind it, but i never felt like the track was filled, it feels like it could use some more percussions, maybe, idk.. every track is different but i really feel you could do alot better, im not rippin on you or anything but i know you have more protential than this.

haha i dig it, especially the vox, could use a little more work though, seemed like it had too many changing parts, and id try reverbing the begining loop or something to stitch it together so it isnt so apparent at where it loops at. but this is definently a pretty cool track.

hey great track, even my friend who usually has nothing nice to say, thought it was pretty good, very well done, just needs a little more work on the vox, try layering something darker, what i do is i take the vox, copy and layer below, then lower the tone, turn it down a bit so that they dont compete and add to each other, but thats just me, other wise well done

wow pretty cool beat, i like the distortions with the strings. the melody and the beat. lots happening all around! and i like how you brought it down, towards the end. great sound production, and i really dont have anything to say for improvement, great track

first off id just like to say, all the people that posted negitive reviews, it doesnt really matter. i would agree that yeah theres almost always more work to be done on any track its not just yours.

Personally, i kinda liked it, your vox really remind me of Icp. i guess my biggest suggestion, is less effects on the vox. bout the only thing i really know about rap, is that you want it to come out crystal clear, but there are songs that do have lots of effects that make it work, but just while your getting into the feel of making music, try to keep it simple. another thing is that with any kind of vox, you want to put alot of emotion into it to connect with the listener. but i think that for only a few uploaded tracks your doing pretty good for yourself! and dont let peoples negitive words get to you

hey thanks for letting me know that you used my accapella, i really liked the intro to this track, it started off really nice. the vox though they werent perfect to begin with, didnt really blend in with the background music. i would have added some effects like an echo or reverb. the music was really good but for me it felt a little too repetative. im not trying to rap on ya, i just want to help you improve on the music part, the accapella couldnt be salvaged, but next time if you can get a really nice track going i could give you some vox that would fit more to the song.

but like i said, the music was really good but it would be a good idea to work on having them change a little bit through out the song. Good luck to ya

yo i'm diggin your style! i checked out Human (Dis)Grace, Faved both tracks! your sound is so full and sounds very proffesional. i also like how you mixed the vocals at the begininning, very creative way of using your resources to get what you want. your track gave me goosebumps, its just so incredible! i dont want to stroke your ego or nothing, but this is one of the best tracks i have ever heard on this site. great job,

awesome track, not gonna lie! this would be my themesong for ass kicking lol. its got like a psycho feel to it. and the laughter!! ... i've made my point on the psycho vibes. i really dig the beat, the synths everything! excellent track, and if this is just your rough version, i cant imagine your finished, this is already off the wall! i'll have to keep an eye out for the finished track.
Good Luck

Much Respect - Fayz

i like the enthusism you guys got, really use that in your next tracks, i felt the auto-tune was a little unneccisary for the rap. i understand its one of your first so im not going to hound on things that could be done, my first couple of tracks weren't the best and all it takes is some experimenting and feedback. i thought the beat was good enough for a track, but you would want to increase them in the future, and push the vox back more to fit in. a reverb would help blend vox, and there are various other tips i could give, but id rather let you experiment with different thing to find out for yourself what works best.

there are tuns of tips and tutorials in the forums and i believe there is a section somewhere around here with great tips for mixing and production. and maybe later on sometime we could work on a project together. but for now just keep on trying, dont let anything discourage you and if you need anything at all, ill try my best to help :)

awesome track, the rap vox kinda reminds me of the old school rap. the vocals seem too upfront though, both the singing and rap. which isnt really needed because they're so crisp. but thats my only itch with this, other than that amazing sound and quality. really gave me goosebumps great job Absolutely loved this.

i actually really enjoyed this track, it's really relatable, and thats very important. the vocals are very powerful, but they're not really focused. now i dont consider myself the best singer, but i do know that if you were to take a little time and practice the pitches with an instrument, piano would be best if you have one or something similar. just to give them a real sturdy ground.

i also enjoyed the accoustic guitar. i thought it went well together with the lyrics and the vocals. it has a nice melody to it. my biggest thing here though, is that the Song doesn't take off. and if this is just your rough version i have no doupt that you can make something truely fantastic out of it.

now this is just me and you dont have to do this but i think it could pick the song of the ground.

introduce it the same way, but then make a small break, and bring in the drums on a crash, and a sustained guitar in the back ground coming in with the crash.
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then bring it back down a tid bit with your original guitar line, but with drums behind it that follow it and continue your song.
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i have many more idea's but i dont want to waste too much of your time. i saw the protential of this and i just couldn't resist
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However as is, this is a very protential track, the idea of it is perfect and the guitar is flawless. the lyrics cut pretty deep and your voice is very powerfull. Now i understand this is Your scene here, but in the case you wanted any help on this id be more than willing for a collaboration. and even help you out on the background vox, if your interested let me know, if you have any questions or concerns, contact me.

- Much respect Fayz