Fayz

i think the strings/choir is coming in a little to strong, but i like the original sound of this. i really like the drums in the background, but again it pushes it more towards a hiphop/rap kind of track. infact i think this could even go under a fusion. a little too short, but i like how it keeps moving, and the piano is very simple, but i think that's all it needs to be, this is a fairly well done track. level the strings/choir (i cant really tell what it is exactly), make it a little bit longer, and i believe this would be a truly beautiful track.

i thought it sounded pretty good, could use some more to it. maybe some strings, make this part the repeating line and i think you would be set for a full sized track. other than that though, any piano being played well gets me, but as stated before, would be great to hear a full track, as is i would probably say this is more of a loop/sample.

not really my thing here, but i must agree the sound is very well done, i love the piano in the background, the strings work well and the beat is on it. more importantly the vocals, i haven't heard very many rappers on looperman that sound legit but these ones really stand out to me, with some more vocals to fill the track, this could be a really great track. great job with the mixing, very professional sounding.

hmm... i loved the track, very beautiful. would go great with some inspiring lyrics... i love anything with strings, and my favorite instrument is the piano, despite my metal head-ism. so just those two things going had my heart melting. this would be a beautiful orchestra track but the drums change it into more of a hip hop/rap. which makes vocals all that much more demanding for this track, its so beautiful and well thought out. great job

i thought the into bass line was kinda sweet but then the second part to it didn't really match up with the first one. the track sounds good, however the guitar's are kinda everywhere, i think there's too many different sounding guitars. i also feel there's a lot of open space that could be filled. like the track just doesn't have a full sound to it. i would run the drums through the eq and try to get a nice "pop" to them. and since your guitar is you main sound i would amplify that, maybe add a few fx, to fill the empty space more. another thing you could do is put something off in the background. i would suggest taking something simple and make it wide (reverb, delay/echo) but then make it so it's there in the track but not so noticeable this would also help fill the track.

so i cant say i've ever listened to Jordan Sparks. but i have heard of her. but for my first time listening to this song, i think it's amazing. your vocals are amazing, and the piano is perfect. my only problem with this song is very very very small, and i dont know if anyone else noticed. but when ever you get into the mezzo-forte and forte i can hear a slight distortion. it might just be the mic, but if you have a condenser mic you shouldn't be having this problem. if you do have a condenser mic i would recommend checking over your recording settings on your computer or the device you use to record.

but like i said, very very small. i almost didn't notice it at first. but over all great job on the song, and being that this was my first time ever hearing it, if i ever do hear the original version, im more than likely going to think of this version.

your vocals are amazing, lots of power, and it really brings the meaning forward. i know you wanna go for a trance type thing, i could maybe whip something up if i could get the vocals and piano separate... i do techno/dance when im not working on anything important or just want something fun to do. i make my own beats and melodies. so if you want i would love to help with this project, again great job.

i really like this, like really like this. its not overdone or anything, the background melody kinda reminds me of the windows start up theme. i think this would be the perfect beat for a classic sounding hip hop song. i mean it just brings me back to the 90's when music like this was about the people behind the music, and the stories they told and how easy it was to relate. now n days its kind of a lost art.
but back to the track, i think the way everything was arranged was very creative, and the samples work perfectly in harmony. great job.

haha nice, this track really me think back to when i was a kid. i thought it was pretty creative, and i like how you presented it. great job

wow so i really like the intro, i freaking love string instruments especially when the come together so well. the beat is pretty strong even through my cheep laptop speakers, so there's an accomplishment right there. the beat does get a little repetitive though, and there isn't much to separate the sections from the hook to the other parts. the break down was pretty tight though, and it did add that relief of repetitive i was talking about. and you know i was wondering how you were going to end the song, and i was kind of worried about it all just stopping abruptly, but i think the fade out was very well played. this was a very beautiful track, i think my only concerns were, separation from the hook and the rest of the song, and the repetitive beat.

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haha im digging the opera voice!!! i've been trying forever to make a track with an opera voice in it, and its kinda hard for me... so kudos for you great execution. this is a very relaxing track, like something to Sunday drive to. i love how everything works together so well, and wow it just gets so much better as it progresses, this is a very fine track, i hope more people will realize this. again great job

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haha yeah it started and it was like instant happiness, i just woke up so i'm glad this is the first thing i heard. i like the different organs that you used. i like how it's really happy sounding but has that darker under layering, and the ending is pretty cool, i like how you ended the song. very well done.

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Nice, i like the mood in this one, it's like something they would use in a movie for when someone's being all bad ##### and what not. like seriously kill bill just walked into my room lol. but no seriously i fell in love with this track from the moment it started. the guitars are just brilliant, great job, and congratulations on your new job, hope everything goes alright.

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wow, you never fail to impress, i could definitely see some vocals to this, very powerful stuff here. just listening to it, reading the title, and reading the description, my head got over killed with lyrics. great job, though as previously stated im not sure if that particular guitar works, i think that the idea of having a guitar in there is brilliant, i like the edge that it gave but there's just something about that one that doesn't seem to fit entirely with the mood.

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aside from the filter, it really reminded me of Marilyn Manson at first, then when you hit the higher notes, it kinda reminded me of another artist that used effects on their voice. but really this is a really great song, im digging the beat, the vibes, and the vocals are tight. great track, excellent job, and i hope to hear more in the near future

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no offense but i thought the voice was a little cheesy, you should try using your own voice if possible. the intro was a little too long for my taste. but other than that i thought it was a pretty good track. kudos for using your own material, that's a pretty long process, on top of arranging it all together, and then if necessary modifying some of the sounds. the break down was pretty sick, i like it, that part actually made me want to bust a few publicly humiliating moves lol, but great job one of the best house tracks ive heard on the site in a while.

I'm gonna say this real fast before i forget what I'm thinking, try shortening the intro a little bit, it got kinda dull after 10 seconds,(that's the average attention span of anyone listening to a new song) the wood block? idk but that instrument with the insane reverb, i like that, but maybe use a little less reverb. also i am huge on bass, and kick bass drums, my favorite part about any song are those two things, but i felt they were lacking power and depth. i would add that power and depth by mixing it up a little bit, i can't really elaborate much on that through text. but that repetitive "dun dun dun dun" is what really made me lose interest.
on a further note, i think the song was a little to short to be house, generally any song is three to four minutes long, and a dance/techno/house song is generally anywhere from four to five minutes longs, and i've known some to be longer. but for now try to keep it average with the duration and make it a little longer. the ending seemed kinda pushed together and i know alot of songs do it, and i learned the hard way, a crash isn't the best way to end a song, its like a book that leaves you hanging. another thing too that would also help with adding some more time, is that a vast majority of songs have what is called a 'hook' which is basically a part of a song that repeats its self, generally that part that gets stuck in your head and makes you want to listen to the song again, and again.
no that i think of it too, the whole track seemed kinda bunched together after it really got started, the part i liked and wouldnt mind hearing again is that section with the woodblock sounding thing. i would add some more to that and maybe make that the hook, and for a break down take that piece just as it is now with out anything added to it. another thing is try speeding it up maybe? idk. maybe if you spice it up, shuffle the beat a little bit and expand it out so it doesnt feel so squished together, you might not need to speed it up, as long as the track is filling.
and thats another thing, i've never heard a track like this. there are points in the track that it has a 'full' sound to it and other parts where it doesnt. but you'll be able to correct that with more experience. infact all of this is all fixed with more practice. i started off kinda the same way.

now i didn't just criticize your track for my entertainment. i did it because i wish someone had done it for me when i first started out. i learned just about everything i use today on my own and it took alot of time.

what i did to learn better, was to listen to songs, making sure i heard every little detail and made mental notes about every song i listened to. i asked myself questions like "why do i like this beat, how can i achieve that feeling, which instrument is usually panned where, how heavy are the effects... ect."

now if you want to make more dance/techno/house and you plan on following my advice of song analyzing, and comparing to y

Perfection at it's best. this is some fine work, though i expect nothing less from the other tracks I've heard from you. i would love to hear some vocals to it, vocals with lyrics that just really connect emotionally to the music. i love the effects that were put on the lead guitar too. everything just works together so perfectly, and i just love how you combined so many instruments that don't normally work so well together, but are in perfect harmony for this song. for example acoustic guitar with strings? i cant say I've ever heard those two working so well together. great job.

OMFG! This is an amazing track!!!! makes me wanna like mosh and freak out and what not! brilliant! absolutely brilliant! i love the way it starts out too, starts out amazing, and then gets like 100x more awesome. great job, i'd have to say this is my favorite track on the site. bravo man! bravo!

well this certainly was something different. i can't say i've ever heard anything quite like it. umm, i would try a limiter on the track or something of the such, i had to turn my volume down because i was getting that scratchy noise from my headphones it was so loud. i like the way it started out, and then when it got to the tweaked trumpet i thought it was pretty cool. my thing with it is that it's bit long and repetitive. i think some variation would be nice. something as simple as pausing the trumpet for just a drum or bass or something for a few seconds would qualify is some variation. changing up the drums a little bit too.
- off topic - for what ever reason while i listened to this track i thought of like one of those trippy vidoes that are supposed to show you what it's like to trip on acid.
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but the track as it is now, is an alright track. id have to say though that my favorite thing about it is it's uniqueness. so you get like bucket full of cool points for that. hope to see some more from you.

well it started off really really good. then it got really repetitive and i think the take off came in a little too late. then my next issue is that there's nothing to seperate a chorus from a verse. even if the chorus was instrumental that would be good too. changing the melody for the verses or chorus would be good too. also im all down for the whispering vocals, but there's no emotion, nothing to make them stand out. you make such great music but once it gets repetitive like this one it loses its power. i know that you can do sooo much better. all you need is variation. change it up a bit. because the music you make really could take off and go some where but it it gets really bland. what i do to learn how to make my music better is by listening to wide variety's of music and really just analyzing them and what makes them sound great. i dont know if this helped any you probably already knew this but i would really like to see it put into effect.

its a really great track, i love the piano in the background. the meaning behind it is very powerful but i think there could be a better use in words in some parts, i think if it was a touch more poetic it would change the feeling alot, and from my personal point of view when your making songs about something that is a 'personal' level when you write it with more of a poetical base especially in rap or hip hop it brings the meaning of the song to life. just by changing adjectives, or when writing i if i were making a rap/hip hop song i would right a line, count the syllables, and for that i would make the next line or every other line have the same syllables. maybe make the lines with out the same syllables rhyme with the first line to make it all fit more together. using the syllable technique will give your words more of a rhythm which vocally i didn't hear much in the song, also emphasis on words like when you say something that's sad or upsetting, making it sound like your really upset when you say it REALLY brings out the heart in the song. and when your trying to tell some one something like at the beginning, pretend your trying to convince people that they are great like you want to persuade them. but when it goes "how many people are ready to hear this true life story" that part really fits into the song because it has a rhythm to it, emphasis saying it like you were upset? that would make it just pop! i agree with alot of the vocal contrast, the darker/deeper parts really fit in well but they don't stand out. its like if you were painting a black and white picture, if theres dark gray on black then its not that interesting, but white and black with touches of gray would make the picture stand out. same thing with vocals. if you have more emotional parts and then those darker parts along side with every once in a while that gray area it would really make this track that much better. in my view this is a really good song i can tell there was a lot of thought put into it. but i would like to see more heart put into it.

i enjoyed the track it was short and to the point basically.honestly i was a little scared to click on it, i thought it was gonna be one of those slow, dark, depressing songs for some reason, probably just the title. but im glad that what ever possessed me to click on it did because i sure would have hate missing out on such a brilliant track. great job and i hope to see more from ya.