Evisma

Your rhythm guitar track sounds a quarter-note early, or your pick-up note is early, something is off with the guitar and drums for sure. I'd sort that out before you look for vocals.

This will sound pretty good then!! The guitar solo at the end sounds like it was done in the right time, though very impromptu. Still some good soloing there.

0:34 guitar tone is sweet as hell! Really caught my attention. Kinda too high in the mix at times but awesome none the less! Great soaring tone for leads and solos. Mic'd of amp software?

I like the strings and acoustic combo in the beginning. Very neat rhythms afterward. Pulsing and deadly. Good bass tone. Some very twisted spoken word stuff. Organ is pretty tastefully done here. Good organ sound. That stomping percussion is nice.

Guitar solo is raw and very fitting. great.

Synth soloing lead to follow is awesome and funky with some emotion put in.

There is a forum thread for this kind of track. This was a great listen!

Evan

Damn! Those are some brutal loops you have there.

Every track of yours has a totally creepy vibe that come 100 percent from your vocals. Very "I keep people in my basement" kind of vibe. I'd like to hang out with you, but not at your house.

I've just barely got "Your Cat Yeah" out of my head and now I have this one! This will keep my mind busy at work.

You've had a fan in me for a while now. Take care.

Evan

Damn! Those are some brutal loops you have there.

Every track of yours has a totally creepy vibe that come 100 percent from your vocals. Very "I keep people in my basement" kind of vibe. I'd like to hang out with you, but not at your house.

I've just barely got "Your Cat Yeah" out of my head and now I have this one! This will keep my mind busy at work.

You've had a fan in me for a while now. Take care.

Evan

Some pretty heavy feels in here. Good breaks and frantic kick drum moments. Did you record any of this or is it loop and Midi?

Either way, it is a pretty sweet creation. The feedback gets old around half way through, but damn, that's some good sounding guitar feedback with delay. I'd run it into the ground too!

Great sense of rhythm and changes. Bass at around 4:00 is too much and overrides , but I like everything you've got here.

Ok, now that I got I guitar, I'll be going back and listening to your stuff again. I envy your rhythm ability.

The intro reminds me of the organ music for a late night horror from the 40's.

You've got some pretty big reverb going on in places.

2:12 is the start of something pretty badass, then cuts off. I like what you had going there!

Did you say the underwater drum sound comes from slowing down a faster drum loop?

What distortion pedals do you use? Looking for something that will give a lot of options.

Hope all is well with you. Been a while, it seems.

Take care.

Evan

Hello!

Your track has a nice, building quality to it. Simple melodies remind me of the kind of stuff I do.

Vocals sound good. A bit mumbling, but after a bit I get used to them and all is good.

The moments of backing tracks and lead lines are the highlights. Good sound quality.

Reminds me of a Puscifer song "Mission" at times, especially the vocals.

I seem to dig all that I've heard from you. Good stuff.

Evisma

I like it!

Now, you just need to bring in some tuba doing some low foreboding droning, with a thin and tiny sounding chant produced by pagan grasshoppers gathered fireside for the solstice.

Definitely think "Ewok Village at night".

Pursue it, and make it a gathering of tiny friendly creatures who are celebrating nature together.

That's what I'd do.

Track is not bad. I saw bassist and thought I'd give your music a try. Thought there would be some bass guitar recorded or something. Do you have any real instrument music? Saw you play bass and more. Would love to hear some since Looperman.com is pretty poor when it comes to musicians, mostly producers and arrangers.

Sorry, I'm not the best to critique electronic music. What you have sounds pretty good though!

D sharp is what this track is. It was the same root note for almost 3 minutes.

The beat and strings were good, and there were several good quick melodic runs, but there was no key change in almost 3 minutes.

I like what you made here, it just needed a change after about a minute and a half.

Take care.

Evan

This reminds me of Arch/Matheos.

Drumming is probably the highlight for me here. Guitar is good. Some parts predictable, some just bad ass!

The whole lead up to 4:00 was pretty sweet, not to mention the following solo that is very fitting.

I would have screwed this track up by over layering it. Just when I think you're going to, you break off into so Liquid Tension Experiment type stuff.

I do dig.

Evan

Hey Mr. Dye

The falsetto thing is mostly you not projecting your voice. Power should be coming from the diaphragm. It sounds like it's coming from your throat.

The pitch thing is just, it doesn't sound like you wrote "notes" to sing in parts. It seems kinda "fast and loose" right now. Like I said, I know this is in the early stages so I shouldn't judge it like it was finished.

I do like where you're going with this. Maybe there's pointers on projecting your voice and whatnot online.

Hope all is well.

Evan

Moments reminiscent of "Mindless Self-Indulgence".

You sing in a low falsetto sometimes, like a loud whisper. Odd. Pitch seems kinda hard to pin down. Seems like you spent time on the lyrics, but not the delivery. I know you'll make it better and that this is in it's early form.

Take care

Evan

Everyone has said it already. This is an awesome track.

All I would like to add is the kick-drum seems a bit fake and out of place in the track. I like how strong it is, it just sounds too muffled. I truly dig all the rest!

This is a clip fest.

I like what you have recorded, the song anyway. I liked the music and the singing. But there must be something on your interface or recording software or hardware the shows you when you are clipping(maxing out the input).

This will be awesome once it's re-recorded, because you have a really good song here, but right now it's kinda hard to listen to.

This is the best thing I've heard on this site in a while! I was speaking to another member of this site a few months ago about a track with splashy, watery sounds.

You have some very awesome textures going on here. The first minute has some great interplay with the delay, awesome. Your lead line at 2:20 sounds like something I would do.

Drums are pretty heavy for a majority of the first half, then disappear at 2:46 for more oceanic bard serenading.

4:42 solo tone is very tasty, though not the best guitar line in the song.

Ending acoustic stuff is not bad at all, seems to have the same delay treatment as earlier guitar lines, mostly on the left.

I really dig this track, and I wonder why nobody has even given a "nice track" comment to it. This one was very refreshing.

Evan

"I really want to amp up this song"

I think a big part of that would be to put more emotion in your vocals. You sing like there is someone in the next room and you don't want them to hear you. Like you're being quiet.

It also sounded like your first vocal line kind of ascends, but the root notes of the piano do not. The word "Are" seems to go up, when it sounds like it shouldn't based on the piano. Same for each starting line of the stanzas.

What I think this track needs is some orchestral strings. Lots. That is what I was hearing more than guitars. The vocals never get hard or even very excited to be there. You have a good lyrical idea, the delivery is just lackadaisical.

"Please excuse the piano in the chorus"

I thought that part sounded good. A tone and key change.

Evan

I recognize the voice. Haunting as before.

Care for yourself.

Evan