Seriously, I like the suspension atmosphere, a little less the quality of the audio and even less the equalization of the volumes.
The percussion loop should have some variation and not always be the same, in its place, if you really want one always the same, you could use the one used in the soundtrack of The Matrix "Clubbed to death" which I think is good on this type of tracks.
It also tries to better equalize the sounds and make them more dynamic, as they are vintage (which is fine), but too flat.
Dear Friend, thank you very much for your valuable advice, I think I will get back to the song trying to improve it, unfortunately with the modest means at my disposal. Best wishes and see you soon
I don't know if it is the fault of the English translation, but they seem to me to be a bit strong terms ... I just gave you my honest opinion as possible, giving you some advice, as well as telling you that the song was basically well built and that its technical defects did not affect its validity.
In any case, I must say that now it sounds much better, absolutely, compared to the track so flat that you had initially presented, here there is a greater effort regarding equalizations, stereo fields, compressions and dynamics.
As it is, it is also more enjoyable from the auditory point of view, because it keeps the listener's attention alive.
I just wanted to tell you that you could very well not delete the original track, but simply re-upload it after working on it.
I never said that you had to delete it, nor that it was a bad idea.
I am the type of person who does not put the trivial comment just to show that he commented and then put his song on the top of the list.
Hey HenryPascal, I am sorry you got me so wrong here - I was absolutely thankful for the detailed review you gave me, because that was the wakeup call I needed. Thank you so much again!!! I think this is what makes LOOPERMAN so great: you get response, encouragement and criticism so you can learn. Sorry, my words in the description were meant absolutely funny - a bit of sarcasm on myself. I will remove it, if you feel offended. I am very glad about your new comment here, because, you know, with this track I had a very hard struggle and was very close to giving up recording at all. But maybe you know this case: for some reason you don't want to skip an idea and try to get it through however. Your review gave me the push I needed and I got myself togetherand got a bit deeper into the technical side.
And: I know about the option to leave a track in the profile and just upload a new mix, but once I realized the poor mix I wanted to take it off as quick as possible ;o)
hi Henry - many thanks for the comment, hope to progress the orchestral version this weekend. Thanks for the tip with Patricia Edwards too I'll look her up :-) - best, Anna-marie
The dark-chic setting is very beautiful. Also guessed the arrangement of the bass in sixteenths. As for the voice, it is in some places badly equalized (but perhaps it is the original track to be it) maybe you should put some eq and add other effects, as it is it seems too flat.
In addition, the background music has no significant variations, except for the bass in the second part, according to my tastes the arrangement is too minimal. For example, in your place I would have added contour elements in the second verse and I would have raised the whole pad by an octave in the second refrain.
The final part could have been enriched with distinctive elements, which would also have constituted a special, which is missing here.
Generally though, it's a very good track, which is an excellent base on which to build an even better track.
Many non-professionals, the so-called "average users" of music, are convinced that those who make music "with the computer" do nothing but press here and there a few buttons, and the music is automatically created by itself.
I didn't study music, after a few lessons I left the piano course I started last year, because I encountered difficulties that seemed insurmountable to me. But "I mess up" with the computer, and I know perfectly well that, regardless of the instrument you use, making music is not such a simple job.
So, at the end of this philippic, listening to your tracks no one can not notice the effort you put into it, the quality of the audio, the personality and temper of your operas.
I see that there is a study behind it, I see that there is refinement in the sounds and sensations you want to convey.
For this reason, friend Jamid, all I can do is take off my hat in the presence of such masterful work.
Humbly, the only thing you would miss, but that doesn't make your works less interesting, is a voice, which could very well not be the backbone of your tracks, but simply an additional instrument to add to the "orchestra ".
Hello Mr J. Thank you very much for such wonderful feedback, my friend. I do agree with you nothing is easy or perhaps it is if you don't care or believe in what you are doing or what you want to achieve. having said that in my view only the uneducated and fly by night sort people who bought a guitar for a few bucks and call themself musicians saying such unjustified statements. However, dedicated and educated people like you and I and some other on LM we know otherwise. Look at you with all your studies and I studied at Point Blank music London to get my Production and management accreditation. Studied two furthermore years to get my degree in psychology of music. again I did not stop there I studied another year to get my file degree which BA.(Hons) in music technology. Now I believe for you and I this is a total dedication to to our music regardless of which way we come to a resolution doing it via computer or live. Anyway thanks again for all your support and good luck with your studies if you need anything just let me know. Jamid
Thumbs up: epic instrumental. To me is awesome just because is a typically metal atmosphere transported into electronic (or cinematic, as someone said before). Eq, balancing, final mix mastering is a pleasure for ears. Appreciated the "Save a prayer" tribute that drives to the end of track.
Closed fist: vocals are a bit neglected, i mean there are no relevant fx on. In your place i would kill a bit the mid, which are too bulky, and that encumbrance makes sometimes unintelligible the words. Then, it fits a bit of panning, crossfading with wet and dry reverb.
Thumb down: there are some parts in vocal coaching not matching with background music. They maybe could be fixed using the cheapest trick of pitch bending (it would compensate the lack of fx on it). The percussions has not so much variations, in a so long track maybe can tire the brain, which stops listening to them. For example, in the half of track, you could add a real drum beat (saturated, which is good too). The ending cames too suddenly, maybe can be fixed and improved.
In general, it is an excellent track, the defect of which, all things considered, do not affect the validity of the idea.
Thanks for this honest feedback, that's what i need, even if i'm not sure i can do better. I'll try to explain and answer you as precisely as possible (with my hard working english).
For the voices you're right, I wanted as little effect as possible, so that the voice is as comprehensible as possible, but in fact it makes it "flat" or something like that. Also, i ever killed a bit the mid, but i have to work on it again. You say "there are some parts in vocal coaching not matching with background music", i don't have this impression, can you tell me witch part ?
For the percussions, once again you're right, usually i try to make variations in drums, but this time i wanted something repetitive and that don't take to much place in the mix, i'll have to see that again. And i'll try to fix the suddenly end too.
A nice track, with an excellente audio quality, instrumentation keeps high the attention of the listener. Yes, is cinematic, but this is not a defect at all. Very well done, i enjoyed listen to this.
Ok, i like to give honest feedback, so... are you ready for bad news?
As an extenuating circumstance, it can be said that, being your first attempt, a real masterpiece could not be expected, so the so-called "errors of youth" can be forgiven to you.
Now, put yourself in the listener's shoes: if I read that the genre is Drum and Bass, at least I expect a very marked, powerful and raised drumming section. And this is the first thing that in this track, I believe has not been sufficiently developed. Also, in the first part, very fast, you limited yourself to just making a few minor changes to the percussion. But the worst thing, which definitively ruins the whole track, is that you have chosen an acoustic main theme ALWAYS THE SAME!
There is no development, there is no variation, there are no contour elements, there are no support elements to "cover" any moments of emptiness.
Translation: after repeating the loop only three times, the brain skip it and the listener's attention level drops fearfully.
Unfortunately, the second part does not save the situation, because the change of speed, applied to a main theme that is still the same and identical to itself, honestly makes you want to stop listening to it.
I hope you will forgive me for being so bad at judging your work, but I'm not the type of person who just writes trivial things like "nice song", "I like your style" just to bring into view its track.
I am sure that if you listen to your track with your eyes closed, you will find that you can improve and enrich it, you just have to be patient and work on your music.
Don't be in a hurry to release, try harder, I'm sure you can do it better.
Hey, thanks for your feedback! I really thought about that, and I do see where you're coming from. It was pretty hard working with one-shots,(it's my first time with those too) and I'll admit I was rushing it a little bit. I just put some effects on the bass and put a little reverb on everything. But yeah, I should have done more. Thank you!
Nearly finalized bud lol. I haven't finalized the mixing/mastering yet. Volume will be nice and vibrant when I'm done. I probably should put a note of that in the song notes. But thanks for the enjoyment. I've never heard of that group/individual but I'll take a listen.
My oh my, what a traaaaack! It get shivers down my spine almost immediately, so i set this as a fav! Good audio quality, no particular issue about it, the only thing i would fix, in your place, is putting some fx on the main vocal, so they're not... boring (?)
Thanks for the comment Henry! Glad you like it! I was trying to add some vocals but I couldn't come up with anything, vocals are the hardest part for me!
So System of a Down, which means I LOVE IT SO F****N MUCH!!!
I could imagine Serj growls and Daron screams on this... but, to be fully Soad, you have to get the drums more difficult to play, and give more presence and brilliance.
Very nice idea, fantastic atmosphere created, the voice seems to come directly from the 80s, and more precisely from Patsy Kensit from Eight Wonder!
Technically, however, there are several things to fix. First of all the eq of the volumes, the voice is too dominant and, as already written, too full of reverb. Despite using headphones of excellent quality such the I-phone ones, I do not hear the bass (the low frequencies generally), the drums are too weak. Maybe you could opt to saturate them if you don't want them to be too prominent.
The general mix mastering should be reviewed, as your track is, however, has that vintage flavor that is definitely a positive aspect.
I have not selected as a favorite just for the audio quality, but I believe you can do your best to improve it.
Judging from this track, your album promises great things. I'd like to listen to it!
Thank you for your feedback, I too heard somethings that were not as they should be, but in the past few listened to it a loooooot of times, and I became a bit ''deaf'' to Eqs and basically everything.
I have changed a lot so it sounds more how it should be in my opinion.
Hello and thank you for your nice comment. In fact, I was born in Milan and probably many of the sounds and noises of that city have remained etched in my unconscious. Best wishes
I hope it's still a work in progress, 'cause there's more then something to fix in eq/mix/mast... e.g. the cymbals are too high, then throughtout the percussions are buried down by the guitar, which are strong but too dominant. About vocals, the rough cut as you called is imo is so good as you present us, maybe try some eq. The general track has the midtones too hard, and in some parts distortion is present.
Anyway, putting aside the technicalities, the whole track for me is promoted with full marks, the arrangement is essential but not messed up, the general atmosphere earns a lot.
Thanks, and yeah it is still very much a work in progress. I took your advice and swapped out drum kits and turned the mic down from above to cut the cymbals down. I also dropped the guitars down in the mix a touch and cleaned up the EQ on them. Thanks for the listen and feedback.
Hello Henry! I recorded the bass and some keyboard lines, it also includes an acoustic drums and also more elements of percussion and cymbals. I liked the original music a lot so I thought about giving it a more acoustic and aggressive feel. It was the way I found to contribute to the project. Thanks for the comment!
I like the vintage feeling of this track, it's a perfect soundtrack for a "Sunday morning" ahaha.
Well, to be honest til the end, if you leave the track as it is, to have some panache the performer who will sing the song must make sure that there is some variation, so as not to put the listener's brain to sleep.
You basically repeated the same loop for 5 minutes, I listened to the entire track and there are no significant variations at all, so already after two minutes, my brain was no longer listening.
I understand perfectly well that you composed the track at a time when you were bored, but on this basis there could be brass, guitar solos with nylon strings, or some piano rhodes. As you can see, it is enough to listen well again and some ideas and experiments can also be applied. I hope you are not offended by what I say, I like to be sincere in what I say.
Thank you for cleaning up. As you can see, making music is an interest for me. When I see it, a song is played and there is room for criticism and suggestions. This in itself becomes a kind of motivation for me.
Is that your first experiment with trance music? If it's, well... good one! If it's not, well... good one too!
Some technical advice: to be fully trance, the track should be enriched with enveloping pads and "warm shades" (as if they were colors). In addition, take care of the dynamics of sounds in sixteenths. You could also add some vocal hooks, better if female. The pads could be processed with Fast LP in and out, in order to have a soft and sweet fade, which well aligns with the general atmosphere.
I listen to the last second, i found this track well done anyway. About mix/mast, just small things to fix, but as you present it, gives the impression of coming from a dated vinyl, which is not a defect at all, it contributes to increase the vintage feeling that the whole construction of the song recalls.
One last thing: if you are the guy on the profile pic, and you play guitar... why not some experimental solos on this?
Thanks henry, thats some great advice. Do you work with cubase ? Id be happy to do some collaboration work with you some time ! Thanks so much for the message, im always up for ideas on mixing/mastering etc, any advice you can offer is much appreciated
Commented on Kid Cudi - Day n Nite Remix by Stretchfyb
So, can we upload remixes? 'cause i've got one since last october!
Commented on 02 Youll be Alive ft LeoValentine by Eighteen
I still like this, but still not satisfied about mix/mast too.
Sorry.
Why don't you give me the vocals, so i can remix this?
Commented on Ghatanothoa by Stereonomicon
Henry Pascal Lovecraft ahahahaha
Seriously, I like the suspension atmosphere, a little less the quality of the audio and even less the equalization of the volumes.
The percussion loop should have some variation and not always be the same, in its place, if you really want one always the same, you could use the one used in the soundtrack of The Matrix "Clubbed to death" which I think is good on this type of tracks.
It also tries to better equalize the sounds and make them more dynamic, as they are vintage (which is fine), but too flat.
Commented on Imagination by Micky
Would I even slap you?
I don't know if it is the fault of the English translation, but they seem to me to be a bit strong terms ... I just gave you my honest opinion as possible, giving you some advice, as well as telling you that the song was basically well built and that its technical defects did not affect its validity.
In any case, I must say that now it sounds much better, absolutely, compared to the track so flat that you had initially presented, here there is a greater effort regarding equalizations, stereo fields, compressions and dynamics.
As it is, it is also more enjoyable from the auditory point of view, because it keeps the listener's attention alive.
I just wanted to tell you that you could very well not delete the original track, but simply re-upload it after working on it.
I never said that you had to delete it, nor that it was a bad idea.
I am the type of person who does not put the trivial comment just to show that he commented and then put his song on the top of the list.
Commented on Between the sea and the sky by vacacegamusic
Sounds so cinematic, i dig. Yes, a beautiful idea could be adding some archs, to give it some orchestral dress.
Hope to listen to that update as soon as possible.
I could listen well a lyrics, maybe could be a good idea contact Patricia Edwards, she can do her magic for sure on this.
Commented on Muse -DA Remix- by AAP featuring Leo Valentine by Darkangell
So, I try to make a sincere judgment.
The dark-chic setting is very beautiful. Also guessed the arrangement of the bass in sixteenths.
As for the voice, it is in some places badly equalized (but perhaps it is the original track to be it) maybe you should put some eq and add other effects, as it is it seems too flat.
In addition, the background music has no significant variations, except for the bass in the second part, according to my tastes the arrangement is too minimal. For example, in your place I would have added contour elements in the second verse and I would have raised the whole pad by an octave in the second refrain.
The final part could have been enriched with distinctive elements, which would also have constituted a special, which is missing here.
Generally though, it's a very good track, which is an excellent base on which to build an even better track.
And I'm sure you can do it.
Commented on Tears Of Oceans by DijamMusic
Many non-professionals, the so-called "average users" of music, are convinced that those who make music "with the computer" do nothing but press here and there a few buttons, and the music is automatically created by itself.
I didn't study music, after a few lessons I left the piano course I started last year, because I encountered difficulties that seemed insurmountable to me. But "I mess up" with the computer, and I know perfectly well that, regardless of the instrument you use, making music is not such a simple job.
So, at the end of this philippic, listening to your tracks no one can not notice the effort you put into it, the quality of the audio, the personality and temper of your operas.
I see that there is a study behind it, I see that there is refinement in the sounds and sensations you want to convey.
For this reason, friend Jamid, all I can do is take off my hat in the presence of such masterful work.
Humbly, the only thing you would miss, but that doesn't make your works less interesting, is a voice, which could very well not be the backbone of your tracks, but simply an additional instrument to add to the "orchestra ".
Commented on Thank You feat Lily und Wolf by ignome
Ok, i give the usual honest feedback.
Thumbs up: epic instrumental. To me is awesome just because is a typically metal atmosphere transported into electronic (or cinematic, as someone said before). Eq, balancing, final mix mastering is a pleasure for ears. Appreciated the "Save a prayer" tribute that drives to the end of track.
Closed fist: vocals are a bit neglected, i mean there are no relevant fx on. In your place i would kill a bit the mid, which are too bulky, and that encumbrance makes sometimes unintelligible the words. Then, it fits a bit of panning, crossfading with wet and dry reverb.
Thumb down: there are some parts in vocal coaching not matching with background music. They maybe could be fixed using the cheapest trick of pitch bending (it would compensate the lack of fx on it). The percussions has not so much variations, in a so long track maybe can tire the brain, which stops listening to them. For example, in the half of track, you could add a real drum beat (saturated, which is good too). The ending cames too suddenly, maybe can be fixed and improved.
In general, it is an excellent track, the defect of which, all things considered, do not affect the validity of the idea.
Commented on Space Machine by koga100
A nice track, with an excellente audio quality, instrumentation keeps high the attention of the listener. Yes, is cinematic, but this is not a defect at all. Very well done, i enjoyed listen to this.
Commented on 02 Youll be Alive ft LeoValentine by Eighteen
Well, i give another chance on this just because i really like this song.
Anyway, you didn't still get the right eq/comp/mix/mast.
At the moment, i can't because of my hand injure, but i would like to make my remix of this, one day.
Commented on first try at dnb by Kronaz
Ok, i like to give honest feedback, so... are you ready for bad news?
As an extenuating circumstance, it can be said that, being your first attempt, a real masterpiece could not be expected, so the so-called "errors of youth" can be forgiven to you.
Now, put yourself in the listener's shoes: if I read that the genre is Drum and Bass, at least I expect a very marked, powerful and raised drumming section. And this is the first thing that in this track, I believe has not been sufficiently developed. Also, in the first part, very fast, you limited yourself to just making a few minor changes to the percussion. But the worst thing, which definitively ruins the whole track, is that you have chosen an acoustic main theme ALWAYS THE SAME!
There is no development, there is no variation, there are no contour elements, there are no support elements to "cover" any moments of emptiness.
Translation: after repeating the loop only three times, the brain skip it and the listener's attention level drops fearfully.
Unfortunately, the second part does not save the situation, because the change of speed, applied to a main theme that is still the same and identical to itself, honestly makes you want to stop listening to it.
I hope you will forgive me for being so bad at judging your work, but I'm not the type of person who just writes trivial things like "nice song", "I like your style" just to bring into view its track.
I am sure that if you listen to your track with your eyes closed, you will find that you can improve and enrich it, you just have to be patient and work on your music.
Don't be in a hurry to release, try harder, I'm sure you can do it better.
Commented on Mismatches - Julio Oliveira - Initium Mix by InitiumMusic
Why volume is so low? ahahha
This track has much in common with another track i know... check "Beat & Sweat" by Bloom 06, to understand what i mean.
Oh, i like both tracks ahahha
Commented on We Dont Stop by JackLake
My oh my, what a traaaaack! It get shivers down my spine almost immediately, so i set this as a fav! Good audio quality, no particular issue about it, the only thing i would fix, in your place, is putting some fx on the main vocal, so they're not... boring (?)
Commented on Lm29 - Dont Kick Me When Im Down by Lm29
So System of a Down, which means I LOVE IT SO F****N MUCH!!!
I could imagine Serj growls and Daron screams on this... but, to be fully Soad, you have to get the drums more difficult to play, and give more presence and brilliance.
Wooooooah!
Commented on 02 Youll be Alive ft LeoValentine by Eighteen
Very nice idea, fantastic atmosphere created, the voice seems to come directly from the 80s, and more precisely from Patsy Kensit from Eight Wonder!
Technically, however, there are several things to fix. First of all the eq of the volumes, the voice is too dominant and, as already written, too full of reverb. Despite using headphones of excellent quality such the I-phone ones, I do not hear the bass (the low frequencies generally), the drums are too weak. Maybe you could opt to saturate them if you don't want them to be too prominent.
The general mix mastering should be reviewed, as your track is, however, has that vintage flavor that is definitely a positive aspect.
I have not selected as a favorite just for the audio quality, but I believe you can do your best to improve it.
Judging from this track, your album promises great things. I'd like to listen to it!
Commented on For You Girl by kilogramx
Wow!
This is so Youtube background music! Love the atmosphere you created here, very wise choice not to bury everything under a heavy drum.
Commented on The Nameless City by Stereonomicon
Judging by the sounds that distinguish it, I would say that this city has a name ... and it's Milan! hahaha
Commented on Feel You Now by topvega
Oh wow! Heck of a track!
I hope it's still a work in progress, 'cause there's more then something to fix in eq/mix/mast... e.g. the cymbals are too high, then throughtout the percussions are buried down by the guitar, which are strong but too dominant. About vocals, the rough cut as you called is imo is so good as you present us, maybe try some eq. The general track has the midtones too hard, and in some parts distortion is present.
Anyway, putting aside the technicalities, the whole track for me is promoted with full marks, the arrangement is essential but not messed up, the general atmosphere earns a lot.
Waiting for finished (and fixed) track!
Commented on Remember This By DJ-SLT-UK - Julio Oliveira Remix by Juliooliveira
Those who commented before me already said everything I wanted to say hahaha.
However, this is a re-arrangement more than a remix, because the main sounds of the original track are basically kept identical.
The idea of putting live played elements is very appreciable, give to the track a completely different "dress".
Bravo Julio!
Commented on uncharted romance prod by lochovski by lochovski
I like the vintage feeling of this track, it's a perfect soundtrack for a "Sunday morning" ahaha.
Well, to be honest til the end, if you leave the track as it is, to have some panache the performer who will sing the song must make sure that there is some variation, so as not to put the listener's brain to sleep.
You basically repeated the same loop for 5 minutes, I listened to the entire track and there are no significant variations at all, so already after two minutes, my brain was no longer listening.
I understand perfectly well that you composed the track at a time when you were bored, but on this basis there could be brass, guitar solos with nylon strings, or some piano rhodes. As you can see, it is enough to listen well again and some ideas and experiments can also be applied. I hope you are not offended by what I say, I like to be sincere in what I say.
Commented on life is a fight by Daniall
This trailer promises well, useless to talk about judgments and technicalities on something that is being worked on.
I wait for the finished work, I hope that the idea you developed will become even better!
Commented on GRANDE A555 EXTENDED MIX 1 by NESMANGA
I am agree with Jkingz.
Anyway, is the first time i listen to a so various suite, it reminds me the '70ies very long pioneer electronic suites!
Commented on Isolated by Jkingz
Is that your first experiment with trance music? If it's, well... good one! If it's not, well... good one too!
Some technical advice: to be fully trance, the track should be enriched with enveloping pads and "warm shades" (as if they were colors). In addition, take care of the dynamics of sounds in sixteenths. You could also add some vocal hooks, better if female. The pads could be processed with Fast LP in and out, in order to have a soft and sweet fade, which well aligns with the general atmosphere.
I listen to the last second, i found this track well done anyway. About mix/mast, just small things to fix, but as you present it, gives the impression of coming from a dated vinyl, which is not a defect at all, it contributes to increase the vintage feeling that the whole construction of the song recalls.
One last thing: if you are the guy on the profile pic, and you play guitar... why not some experimental solos on this?
Commented on BCV - Lock Down ft Slimm by BCVProductions
Wow, so amazing! Love it!
Commented on Project SkyBreach by bitronix
No one commented yet! Guys, where are you??? Take a chance on this, is so happy and shivery!!