hey JamesDavies I've composed since I don't know if this young colleague of ours in this avatar of yours has been born or not,buT I'm not sure if I can compose this music or noT!
everything is very welldone,lyrix and main idea are lovely .
is that a male voice which has changed to sound as a girl?
it's cool ! and totally no criticism .just I think singer can wait sometimes and doesn't sing all the monets and let the music talks too.best wishes.___Behnam
No, probably not :D I've been composing for like 4-5 years, and I didn't start with rap. just one thing: i didn't make the instrumental (it was made by Freiherr Von Braun), all I've added was the rap with lyrics I've wrote. The instrumental samples "The Story Of Our Lives" by Alex Dimou which is more electronic type music. Just to say that I downloaded the instrumental with the singer's voice already on so I couldn't really take it off, though I agree with you sometimes it could be better without that voice on ! Anyway, thanx for passing by, listening and spending time to comment :)
I think your lyrics had some great imagery to them. The quality sucks, but I understand not having great equipment to work with. At points it sounded that you got off the beat. This could be two things. 1. The quality just makes it sound this way. 2. You are trying to put all the words in, and hitting your lines past the beat. I like that you sampled "Stay." Great choice. Having a male singer do the hook. Another great choice. If you want to improve on the rapping then get at me. We'll collab and I really think I could help you improve. I can send you some of my stuff if you'd like to take a listen. You got potential. If you like doing it, then keep at it. I listen to tracks I made 10 years ago, and they are not great, but I kept at it and improved.
personally i didn't find any problem putting all the words in but i must agree: the quality sucks ! anyway, thanx for listening and commenting and yeah, i'll check out some of your stuff ^^ i'm happy to collab :)
Alright, There seems to be a filter going on over your voice at the start which is ok'ish, I would perhaps take that out or not use it so heavily, but thats just my opinion.
Find your own style, i think you will find it. If you want some beats every now and again then check my tracks. ps just ask for a download and I'll send you a private link.
Thanx for the feedback man ! Actually there isn't any filter but yeah, i'm still trying to find my own style. And sure, I'll check out some of your beats ^^
yea, I guess that was my first attempt at making a beat. quite old this song - funny because I still use only audacity, but anyway: everybody's got to start somewhere. thanx, for your feedback...
You have a very interesting rap style. Also the lyrics are not bad (a little "generic" but interesting though).
Looking forward to hearing more from you.
Take care, Domenico
well firstly, im not hearing much continuity here..has the sound of a few loops just stuck together without much regard to matching them...it's ok i guess but still got a long way to go before it actually sounds like a track. I think it would be safe to say you absolutely murdered a perfectly good vocal loop. sorry if it sounds harsh but just saying it as it is.
As a first try, it's pretty good. I'd just recommend to look up more about dubstep. Probably a good way to start is by reading all this: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dubstep
Also listening to dubstep other people make should help a lot.
Keep it up!
P.S. Keep in mind, that you should listen to older dubstep too...
good sounds just try fixing up the drums and add some kick to it.check out my new track called shawty i care.i also got a music video for it on youtube
...um, it sounds a little confusing. you didn't really stick to anything long enough to get a feel for what you were trying to accomplish. i think i'm trying to say you have quite a bit going on, so its hard to distinguish a pattern here.
i'd def be interested in hearing your ideas on the pellas for this. good effort though.
WTF is this. Slow down and go back to the basics. i can believe you actually let someone hear this what were you on. I wanna talk to your parents cause there is a serious lack of guidance.
I think you can have a more consistent track if you order the ideas around try to work with a intro-verse-chorus module and go from there... And most important don't stop making music!
I just saw you are only 13? Good for you. Keep going and experimenting, the more sounds you make the more sense will come of it.
I would try having some order to laying your tracks try the rhythm track first then add sounds to that beat. you have some interesting melodies going on but it just needs to be less confusing.
As an experiment why not choose a song you like and listen to the way its put together and then try to copy the styles for verse, chorus etc.
Any way good luck with it James.
J
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everything is very welldone,lyrix and main idea are lovely .
is that a male voice which has changed to sound as a girl?
it's cool ! and totally no criticism .just I think singer can wait sometimes and doesn't sing all the monets and let the music talks too.best wishes.___Behnam
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Find your own style, i think you will find it. If you want some beats every now and again then check my tracks. ps just ask for a download and I'll send you a private link.
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Looking forward to hearing more from you.
Take care, Domenico
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good track.
Looking forward to some more dubstep from you.
Regards
Dj malook.
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Also listening to dubstep other people make should help a lot.
Keep it up!
P.S. Keep in mind, that you should listen to older dubstep too...
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i'd def be interested in hearing your ideas on the pellas for this. good effort though.
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cheers
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I would try having some order to laying your tracks try the rhythm track first then add sounds to that beat. you have some interesting melodies going on but it just needs to be less confusing.
As an experiment why not choose a song you like and listen to the way its put together and then try to copy the styles for verse, chorus etc.
Any way good luck with it James.
J
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