JamesDavies

Woah man, alotta problems on this. first off it's all off beat. the drumline sounds like it's glitched or something. and sounds like you added a bit much compression on the track, alot of frequencies are being cut out. and theres no yearn to even want to rap on this. it's too off beat. sorry man, not feeling it. nice attempt for what it's worth, maybe make it another genre, because it has a sort of glitch template to it. peace

Neobane

That quite "pow" noise coming from the mic is probably from either a bad mic, or your to close to the mic for how loud you're singing. If you move your head back a couple inches, it might help.

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nah bad man.. really bad..

everything is off beat it seems... i dont get the change up either man... try to just make drum beats first... listen to one of your favorite hip hop tracks, figure out the BPM and try to recreate the drums.. JUST the drums.. then build from there! keep workin it will come

Bob Moog is spinning in his grave. Wait, he's not dead yet. Still a good knob spinning good time. Kool track.

hey J.

u need 2 learn about using kicks nd snares 2 define ur beat. I dont think this can quite fall undr hiphop z of yet. if u want i can email u some piano roll patterns of basic hiphop drum pattern + standard bassline patterns to help define ur beats more. Dont give up man, u got potential

Peace

please tell me this is a joke

This is amazing from someone so young!
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Ok beat, I like the unorthodox beat but you're gonna need some really strong vocals for it to be any good. And the tone and content has to be kinda dark I think, this has a funeral organ feel to it.

Great potential!!

The beat is out on alot of the song but once that is fixed up it'll be great!!

I reccommend investing in some better software aswell, it'll really come in handy in the future :)

KUTGW
theFISHface

......I don't think vocals are your thing man. You need a lot, and I mean TONS of practice. Intention is definitely there, kudos for that.

i don't know what to say but try using autotune on your voice when u sing. also, the rap has potential but needs better EQ changes. Don't give it up though man, you could be famous one day yaknow?

The drums and instruments are really out of tune. But i vaguely heard "Dangerous".

Great effort, my friend, made me smile :-)

All The Best

John

ugh good intro but it is kinda messy

laying down your own drum tracks aren't the easiest thing to accomplish. It really sounds like you have been working on it. Try to start out with a basic beat using just the kick and a snare. Then you can always layer a high hat or some combination of various percussion. I agree that something like a bum tschak bum bum tschak is a good place to start. The synth tracks sound okay. It sounds like you have a bit of an oriental melody going on. I like that. You are doing better at keeping everything in the track synchronized. Keep working an practicing, it's definitely paying off.

try to do something more simple. Good luck.

use bit map champ... thiis a mess...keep it up!

Hi James...
the drums are a bit "too random".. To improve your beats you could simply start with bum tschak bum bum tschak.. keep it up!!!

I don't know what that was but I just can't get with the beat. I know you said for fun but I guess some people liked it so "Keep'em comin & Keep'em movin".

Yeah nice work in here once you pull it all together.

I see the potential in this

just focus a bit and tighten up what needs fixing and keep rolling.

Beat is ok.
Raps are quite cool (reminds me a little bit of the Streets... UK-HipHop from France.)
But Bro: Kick out the singing passages and concentrate on your raps and your flow.