Just The Groove-Optix & Boy@n Feat. Addis-2009 - Optixdj

Not bad, you're heading in the right direction with this style. The sliced up vocals were a good addition and the bass is very simple but it's a good foundation to build on.

Although, there's basically no variation in the song at all. No verse melody or bridges, choruses? I don't mean to offend but you really need to make it less bland. Try making some alterations of the bassline and try make a verse melody. Make a hatline, a couple background synths and already, you'd be grabbing more of the listener's attention.

Another thing I found is that the notes the bass plays are way too low. It's got that farty kinda' sound. Few things you could try is moving the melody up a key or 2 (not really sure if that's the correct term lol but you know what I mean.. right.. right?) or some effects like a chorus, flanger, whatever your personal preference is :P.

Other than that, all I can say is to try add some rythmic percussion to it. Shakers, random percs and weird stuff. It's a great way to make your tracks all the more interesting. Anyways, that's about it. What you have here is a great foundation for a great track. I hope to hear the full version one day. Ciao!