I feel in no way qualified to critisize anyones stuff but I'm going to.
This is to long.
If this were chopped down into smaller pieces I can hear it at the begining of a comedy sit com or advertising something.
What I'm saying is with a bit of something and I don't know what .... I smell something very very commercial not cheesy.
A sellable product is not to be sniffed at and marked down as cheesy!

Ill tell you whenever I have something with it ^^

u did a god job on this! really like that sweet melody!

this is awesome!!loving the beat..

Ficou pesada...

This is rad:)

Loving this.. really I would die for the audio stems and to remix it

Very nice I can listen to this all day man.

hi again, I like some of the changes you've made here by rearranging the song. Sounds really good like this. The only thing would be that the e piano which I particulary like (the one playing some nice rhythm) seems be a little bit less present here. Synth bass and pad blend-in very nicely in the recording. Im really enjoying this one. NIce work. Congrats, Alex

this is such a cheerful song...
great to listen to when u r with ur mates riding down the country...

Its great

ok, I listen to it again, I gotcha. nice work!!

super, super nice track, I would love to lay some vocals on this.

awesome tune dude!

Shout out from me.I love it.The overall mix is great.

hi RampatheSwift, very nicely done, chill, easy, relaxing vibes. I like how you work with all the samples and elements of the song. Nice e-piano rhythms and motifs that you're playing. This fat synth bass-lead maybe stands out a bit by first listening, but still provides more 'gravity' to the composition... nice glassy pad.
Looking forward to hear the complete song. I thought you might just remove some parts and 'compress' it in 4min. That could be good for finding even some better balance and sound in the final mix.
But you could extend the song as well!
Very creative work - Im enjoying it a lot.
Alex

HAVE GREAT RHYTHM

Cool vibe here. Sometimes is nice to hear some relaxing hip-hop in bunch of gangsta rap. Really good job done here.

hi i like your make itmusic this melody is so good

Hello!

Hip-hop is not really my style but this sounds enough nice to me. A bit observation : i feel the drums a little too loud, sometimes suppress some other sounds a bit and for a long track, its not enough various to be a lead channel without the chance of boredom (and there is no need for use it that way, there is nice synths and pianos!). However, its just my opinion as a listener - it might be that sounds better now than with more faint drums.

GJ!

Regards, traz

ps : sorry for my bad english

Smooth track, Love the drums.

very fun vibe here. Like a "walk in the park" or something out of a "high school musical" . Still very catchy nice work man. I'm enjoying your style.

Great Track

love the chords. upbeat drumming. cheerful. happy music. simple, sweet. nice little touches here and there - like the bits of vocal chorus. do you think there could be more "presence" in the mix? is there a possibility you could "normalize" the track to bring it up? all the best. look forward to hearing more! regards - Dan

Maybe I have a strange taste in music or something but I didn't find this cheesey at all. It's good, I like it. Those drums are pretty sweet too.