FALLEN GREATS Ft D-wreck - Raporia

Track is Hott,Luv the way you paid Homage To The Greats,And Guru passing did touch a nerve indeed,Good flow,production,concept and over all.R.I.P indeed to the fallen,we all have at least one so pay respects to the Fallen. ~T.R.I~

wo dnt kno if i can top the review above me haha
but i think its rlly dope
i love the beat rlly like piano sick vox really dope lyrics
felt it 100 percent
if u git a chance check out my new track its the new crew n lv a review
pc

its a really great track, i love the piano in the background. the meaning behind it is very powerful but i think there could be a better use in words in some parts, i think if it was a touch more poetic it would change the feeling alot, and from my personal point of view when your making songs about something that is a 'personal' level when you write it with more of a poetical base especially in rap or hip hop it brings the meaning of the song to life. just by changing adjectives, or when writing i if i were making a rap/hip hop song i would right a line, count the syllables, and for that i would make the next line or every other line have the same syllables. maybe make the lines with out the same syllables rhyme with the first line to make it all fit more together. using the syllable technique will give your words more of a rhythm which vocally i didn't hear much in the song, also emphasis on words like when you say something that's sad or upsetting, making it sound like your really upset when you say it REALLY brings out the heart in the song. and when your trying to tell some one something like at the beginning, pretend your trying to convince people that they are great like you want to persuade them. but when it goes "how many people are ready to hear this true life story" that part really fits into the song because it has a rhythm to it, emphasis saying it like you were upset? that would make it just pop! i agree with alot of the vocal contrast, the darker/deeper parts really fit in well but they don't stand out. its like if you were painting a black and white picture, if theres dark gray on black then its not that interesting, but white and black with touches of gray would make the picture stand out. same thing with vocals. if you have more emotional parts and then those darker parts along side with every once in a while that gray area it would really make this track that much better. in my view this is a really good song i can tell there was a lot of thought put into it. but i would like to see more heart put into it.