I know I am kind of late. DOPE FLOW. You may need a pop filter or some equalization because the plosives make the track lose quality. The chorus has this weird rumbling in it in the lower frequencies. But overall I like the track. I just feel like with a title like Revolution it would have more impact and content instead of punchlines(nice punchline though). I have problems with all the things I have stated so I am not trying to point you out I am just trying to help. but again NICE WORK keep it up. I wanted to listen to more though.
I think the percussion needs to be a bit stronger to add to the emotion of the track. Around the 00:57 it seems like it is tuned out of rhythm. but nice track and emotion.
Nice beat. It just feels like it is missing something.
So let me allow you enter my mind for a second. When I am rapping I like the beat to tell its own story and then I just add my 2 cents over it. What rappers are forgetting is that the beats is the music that holds it all together. And If you cant feel the beat it is not for you. Even if it is a hot Beat. But I feel like the percussion needs some velocity changes throughout and add some swing because it has a robotic feel to it. The lead needs some layering to make it more robust. But nice mellow track. there is a story in there just enhance it a bit. Nice work.
Man seriously I do not listen to a lot of industrial electronic music but i love the unconventional style of it. I like grim and grit in this track and was it was like take it or leave it. I just wish the voice was little more clear. But I guess the acid voice adds to the track's griminess. Nice track.
Thank you very much for the listen and comment! Happy that I could induce you to listen to some industrial, as it's definitely one of the more varied and creative genres recently. Definitely a filthy track, so I'm glad you liked that aspect. I did use more effects on my voice than usual, but you might be surprised to know that before releasing it I removed several effects. Since recording this, I've been using less effects on vocals in my songs, it was kind of a transition period. I really do appreciate your input!
I love the simplicity. But i do know how I feel about the switch up on the piano melody (Both. I just cant put my finger on it). Its different for sure. But the first one adds this different feeling opposing to adding to the feeling. And the second just doesnt fit in my opinion. Also the percussion is to hard tone it down a little. I think you need add velocity and (human) timing to the percussion because it sounds robotic in a sense. But great start. Just find some original sounds that havent beaten to deaf in hip hop to create a fresh track. But again good start. Piano is hard take out the lower frequencies of the piano add a bassline to make the sample seem like it just not a two bar loop.
I agree wirh Minor2Go. I listened to her original song and I think this trumps that any day. Nice depth and quality. Good work. How did this track take you? I love it.
I wish this track got more notice back in the day. Nice ambiance through the track. The violin add that uumph. I just want to comment because I like it.
The percussion on this IS SICK. I love it. I love the mellow guitar. It add to the vibe I am having. Like your girl has just came to you after a romantic dinner to tell you she has been having an affair for months. But that is just my mind. I like the simple piano riff it just does just that for me. Nice track. I listened a couple days ago and I just wasnt able to comment
Thanks man
I appreciate your kind words
I'm glad you enjoy this one. The breakbeat is a loop I picked up on musicradar.com...they have a large selection of royalty free, free loops and samples and i find myself using alot of stuff from there. The guitar loop is from here (props to hamood).
Fire Path refers to a cycle of breathing in the chinese art of Qi Gong (pronounced chi kung). This natural breathing method is often used in combat and much like this track instills a feeling of tranquility and calm focus (cellos and guitar loop) combined with swift and powerful action (breakbeat).
In my opinion the samples do not do it for me. I like the lead more. I like the beat but yeah i didnt feel like the 808 were strong enough in the first part but too strong in the second bridge/chorus/verse?. But i guess this is your second beat, right? So no bad work it just needs some work. I love the snare rolls, maybe i am addicted to them. But yeah nice start I just wish it had more cohesiveness throughout the beat and more clarity. Better approach would be treat your listener like he/she is stupid. By that i mean, dont assume them will understand your chorus and main verse because if I were to writing to this I wouldnt understand where the chorus ends and the second verse starts. if you want the rapper to rap on it then it needs to be clear. I think this is great start for you. You have the element down but again just needs some work. THAT LEAD IS SICK.
Thanks Man! That's the comments I need! :) Great criticism and feedback! I have made a teaser track for a new song! Could you check it out? Its on my Profile and it's called- BANGING Trap Delay Teaser. Just a few keywords to bring in the views xD .
See how you feel about that one and could I have improved or if its better than this track?
I love the funkiness of the track. I think you need a bassline. But i dont understand the interruptions. I dont know if that is my internet service or audio interface but it really taking away from the track but if your are going to do that then you need to switch up the beat to hardcore RnB with weight behind it (you knwo this is my opinion, right?). Other than that it is an easy listen. But I dont know if your mic is lo fl, but i feel like the low frequencies are missing from your voice to add more presence. But really nice work but it need some work to be ready.
Man please tell me when I get to be able to music this EPIC. I love how you dropped the vocals for a brief moment to add to the climax. I love the track but it also has a big presence that i have yet to find but great track man And I am not saying that to be saying. IM REALLY SCREAMING IT.
I am really digging this track it reminds me times inmy life that i have fallen short. I love the simplicity of it and the hard in your face aspect of it. But yeah the bass synth is too strong. But I guess it is a raw audio so i shouldnt complain,
I meant to comment on this earlier but something got in the way. I read the comments so i know it is a three track demo. But out of the three the first one is massive. I just can not get with the 8 bit like music in the other tracks. Im just not a fan. But overall nice work.
I also read something about using loops to kick start your creativity is just as creative as building from scratch. So really you do deserve credit.
Based on my assumptions, you sound Caucasian or grew up in a neighborhood where professional dialect was spoken daily. Why all the racial slurs? Because you said the word doesn't mean you understand the struggle? Get an understanding of the struggle. I do NOT mean reading your history books.
Just because it feels right does not mean it is right.
I like it but I just feel like sample should have a more complex rhythm when the verse starts to add diversity and trick the listener to believe that it is more than a four bar loop with hi hats. i think the kick gets thin with the bassline or you haven't layered the kick. Which ever it is, just make sure your kick has more presence in the mix. And also the break at 00:52 just makes no sense because the fundamental use of a break or pause should to add more visibility/clarity to line or thought of the main vocals. The sample at 01:45 also just takes away from the track oppose to adding to the harmonics.
We all need to improve. But I like the track. I love to hear what come of it since you said this is not the final mix. Keep us posted.
In my person opinion (You know this is my opinion, right?) that you are not lacking anything. The reason i may say it is missing something because it lacks presence, maybe compression or proper equalization. I do think the grunt is overkill in the beginning but the beat is hard. By the way, that 'Watch the Throne' sample gives off an feeling that you are trying recreate oppose to inventing. Drop the voice samples and allow the emcee to add his own adlibs.
And just a tip. You want to create a space for the emcee to rap on. So adding to many sounds will hinder an emcee from exploding on this but if i decent rapper gets on this he will demolish it. GREAT JOB.
Thanks for the advice. I always have a problem with overkill so i'm not surprised. I'll more than likely cut the grunt (I always forget that watch the throne used the world pack too) I never know if I have too much, so I appreciate the feedback. Thank you for contributing to the final mix
I dont know if you over-layered your kicks or boosted some strong frequencies but they are overloading the track. And the chime is strong also and maybe used to many times in the track. But Keep up the hard work, nice start. (by the way, just my opinion.)
I like the beat but I am not feeling the BIG part.
Let me give reasons:
1) it seems like its off beat when he says 'It Was All A Dream'
2) From my rapper perspective (my opinion. You know this is my opinion, right?) it just crushes any creative aspect of creating an original track talking about anything else expect dreams.
and 3) Dreams of being an successful rapper are over populating the scene. What I mean about that is that when you want to stand our in a room full of vultures. Do not recreate, invent.
But again the beat is dope. I just feel that the music should speak for itself opposed to using vocals to do the trick.
I understand, just so you know big sample came last. After I had everything down I went through my library to see what songs were the same bpm and if i could add anything and I found juicy. i found the acapella and then put it in and cut the first bar. Obviously it didn't work perfectly since biggie didn't record for this beat but it worked well enough to where i wanted to keep it. I thought it gave this beat something unique.
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So let me allow you enter my mind for a second. When I am rapping I like the beat to tell its own story and then I just add my 2 cents over it. What rappers are forgetting is that the beats is the music that holds it all together. And If you cant feel the beat it is not for you. Even if it is a hot Beat. But I feel like the percussion needs some velocity changes throughout and add some swing because it has a robotic feel to it. The lead needs some layering to make it more robust. But nice mellow track. there is a story in there just enhance it a bit. Nice work.
57er
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I want to collab with you if your down?
Nice beat though
Keep to collab mate. What don you want from me?
Cheers!
Tim
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Can you help me.Sorry my english bad.
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I appreciate your kind words
I'm glad you enjoy this one. The breakbeat is a loop I picked up on musicradar.com...they have a large selection of royalty free, free loops and samples and i find myself using alot of stuff from there. The guitar loop is from here (props to hamood).
Fire Path refers to a cycle of breathing in the chinese art of Qi Gong (pronounced chi kung). This natural breathing method is often used in combat and much like this track instills a feeling of tranquility and calm focus (cellos and guitar loop) combined with swift and powerful action (breakbeat).
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See how you feel about that one and could I have improved or if its better than this track?
Thanks Man,
KAYOS
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Peace.
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I just do this as a kind of therapy,so i just enjoy what i do when i do it.
Im no pro man,it's all just pure enjoyment.!
Thank you again for droppin in.!
peace man!
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I also read something about using loops to kick start your creativity is just as creative as building from scratch. So really you do deserve credit.
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Just because it feels right does not mean it is right.
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We all need to improve. But I like the track. I love to hear what come of it since you said this is not the final mix. Keep us posted.
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And just a tip. You want to create a space for the emcee to rap on. So adding to many sounds will hinder an emcee from exploding on this but if i decent rapper gets on this he will demolish it. GREAT JOB.
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Let me give reasons:
1) it seems like its off beat when he says 'It Was All A Dream'
2) From my rapper perspective (my opinion. You know this is my opinion, right?) it just crushes any creative aspect of creating an original track talking about anything else expect dreams.
and 3) Dreams of being an successful rapper are over populating the scene. What I mean about that is that when you want to stand our in a room full of vultures. Do not recreate, invent.
But again the beat is dope. I just feel that the music should speak for itself opposed to using vocals to do the trick.