MOONLYTE

Nice one

You have some really nice musical accompaniment for a Hardcore track EYEDYE...I like the concept and I think you are off to a good start here (well done on the lyrics too)..keep on doing it....If you like a little more reverb on your vocal (and thats a metter of personal taste)...set a long predelay on the reverb you are using after you have it close to where you want....the predelay sets the amount of time before the reverb kicks in, so vocal can be more distinct....well done...Ed

The deep screaming line that is under the main vocal line is a bit distracting and messes with the mix. Sounds like you took the main vocal and doubled it down an octave or two. Still, everything keeps sounding better!

You clearly have the confidence in your voice where the scream-o is concerned. It's the melodic parts that need more. It comes across as if you're hesitating. Specifically, 1:28-1:42. Maybe if you added a little reverb so it wasn't so dry. I understand you want variation in the different vocal parts, but that spot is a little too dry, and the levels are higher than the rest. Which isn't anything I'm going to go into at this point. It's already been stated.
I agree with Johnny. A backing vocal track would be good in this one. It would bring more dimension and life to it.
It's clear that you're working hard to improve your music. You're doing a pretty good job. Keep it up.

Take care.
V.

Nice track

I thought you've created something that has a lot of interest invested. The mixture between the varied vocal styles applied really stand out. Overall matches that way you put together the music and leaves a good impression of your message. I dig the ideas about this project. The heavier parts really do give a good kick. Mule kick, a third primary, very coo!

Agreed with what other members have said, just some fine tuning, could be a great performance. Keep going and don't give up what you do. Peace,Dave

Well it sounds pretty good, I wonder what the previous daw is that you used since you now go for magix

Some people already mentioned the master so I am not going to nag about that, but like LivingInSilence says this song could indeed benefit from having backup vocals, I think that would take this next level.

I don't know if you are going to edit this song for that, but for future songs it would be cool to hear

Guess I will keep an eye out for the future ones then ^^

Thanks for sharing and still great job on it

This is a massive improvement on the last piece of yours i listened to. The guitar playing is good, the vocals are pretty good & so are the lyrics.
But as already stated, the levels are way too loud. (remember, if the master is in the red you need to turn it down)
But well impressed with the improvement so keep it up. You'll nail it eventually and i don't think you're far off.
Keep 'em coming
FR

Nice work, especially for your first track! This is 100 times better than my first track. Keep this kind of work up and you may start to surprise yourself.

Some tips of mine would be to automate the bass's volume so that it stays on low while you have the solo thing going on or even put a pad in there. Leaving only one instrument in even when you're trying to just make one sound pop out, usually takes away from the dynamics and makes the song dull. So instead of removing all of the other instruments completely, it's best to just lower the volume of the instruments you want to fade and then bring it back up when you're done with the solo.

Other than that, I think you did a very great job for a beginner! Keep up the good work!

While I like the composition and lyrics to this song, it could be mixed better. It's very "loud" and starts to deteriorate/go fuzzy in the choruses (e.g. 0:50-1:06), however that can be fixed quite easily. Also I feel like this would benefit from having backup vocals in some parts, like the second half of each verse for example, but that's just me.

Anyway, that aside, I really enjoyed this song! It's just a few small tweaks away from being something professional.

the sounds are pretty nice but would sound better if you side chained your sounds to your kick

certainly a great effort for a first attempt. I like the square wave synths (plucks) and the unusual way you build this tune. I think I would like to hear a more intricate percussion and bass line on this as the song moves along. Not a critique but just what I hear as I listen to this. Great songs give great ideas to musicians. Keep on it!

Not bad bro for your first one...I'll have to check out some of your more recent stuff to see how much you improved. Peace......Dan =B-)

Very good for the first track!
You need some drums for it!
Paulo

a thoughtfull composition which has a cinematic sense too!
it's so good tallented Eyedeye..U usually compose more thoughtfull than your generation..best wishes.___B

Love the piano and the vocals are great, especially in the beginning. The intro is definitely the perfect way to make sure the listener stays to the rest of the song, which is also great. Congrats!

Great piano and the voice sound good as well. great job

Cool first attempt,remember some of my first attempt´s,;) you never wanna Know. Every beginning is difficult. The Path you've taken is a good one. No one is perfect at the first time, do not give up.

cheers,Destero

I liked it - good production values throughout. I agree with evisma that the panning was distracting. Not sure I would call this dance but that is a quibble. It is coherent and restrained in a good way. Keep it up this is a very good first effort.
-clindsay

Awesome track would like to add more drums to to make it a club joint
Can you send me it without any beat?

Nicely done

Very nice I like all types of music you nailed this

Nice track great vocals

The only thing I would say rubbed me wrong was how extreme the panning was in the middle section.

2:30 on is very nice and I hear what your going for.

There may be some timing issues with the drums and leads at the end, but I must say I dig it all. Kudos to you good sir, now please get the hair out of your eyes.

Fun Fact. Pirates wore eye-patches to preserve their night vision when going below deck on a sunny day. Just move the patch to the other eye, and the one you've had covered all day is very accustomed to the dark and will be perfect for the low light environment below deck.

If this was your first track, then I must say it's really good and it indicates your musical potential in the future!

All the best____Orlando