Stars And Clouds - Dolawhite

this one is pretty cool...pls check out my version of this song https://www.looperman.com/tracks/detail/57297 i love the lyrics great job man

Nice man. I never expected anyone to put lyrics to this. Kinda made it as a random abstract intrumental. Sounds decent.

Im going to be extremely honest with you because i see you have the potential and drive. lyrically you're already there, but your production as well as your delivery was slightly off. going into the red is not always a bad thing it really depends on what kinda sound you're trying to produce. i say that because your vocals overwhelmed the instrumental. you delivery was choppy, almost like you were trying to rap like someone else. thats a problem i have with a lot of my artist. they try to mimic someones style making there song sound like they're reading off the paper.(rap like you rap and i promise you wont lose) Overall it was a great song. you got your message across and i was feeling it. like i said your lyrics are already there!!!! BTW that hook is killer....keep makin' hits