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This definitely has potential. Your voice is good. You have a good feel for the flow of the track. However, I agree with Darren and Frenz on the vocal stabs. They should stop as soon as you start. Unless you put a wide stereo separation on them. You could even add a touch of reverb and delay to them for some depth. The same goes for the female "mmhmm". Right now, they sit directly behind your vocals and when you stack up yours, the little stabs, and the mmhmm's, it gets rather cluttered. Spread the stabs to like, 70% separation, and the female to 50% separation...or whatever. Just so they don't all sit in the same spaces.
Another suggestion would be to add some hi-hats/rides. That would help tighten it up and put a little edge on the beat.
Like I said, it has potential, so keep at it. Bring this thing up to it's finest and make it shine.
Take care.
V

Like it a lot, but have to agree with Darren about the competition, however it could be reintroduced from 1:41 to 1:47. I like the rap, but I'm no specialist in that area.

The vocal at the front sounds cool but distracts from you rapping.
I would take it out when you start rapping because the vocal is competing with yours.
Apart from that its dope.

I think this track have all it takes to be hit.
Awesome beat and great vocals.
I like it!
Cheers!

Hello Bonezonmarz, this is pretty cool my friend, I think its dam good.....the music itself is great, nice beat as well. I say you go for it brother

i like it very cool

I love the bass, that is the hook in for me - feel the fear and do it anyway, as they say ;)

U never kno unless u give it a shot. I personally like the selection of sounds u used