Lonely - DavidArcade

Weird but cool. I'd have fun doing some vocals over this if you're interested. Check out some of my stuff @ soundcloud.com/weirf

Like it. Love the reverbed guitar

You could add another melody around 1:50 - 2:00 and that would sound dope! This is definitely X it sounds good but I'd lower the higher bands on the equalizer the get the sharpness mellowed out.

This was really great. I actually enjoyed listening to it. My advice is to make faster tracks (like 130+ BPM) and youll be making hits! keep up the good work.

So I listened to the reference you made and on that particular beat, it is simple as yours is. However, there is use of the intro sample vocal that is sparsely used in a few spots. Its a small detailed element that keeps the listener entertained by the music.. although the music is obviously not what makes the track. The layered vocals in the reference track are well done and do fill out the track overall. Again, its about the rap, not the music. However, the beat itself (drums) of the reference track have a couple of extra hits that are placed in the hooks which also add a small, but detailed element.

Your track isn't far off from this, and always go by your ear before you go by visuals of the actual .wav files that you're looking at. You can make up that volume by compression and EQ on the back end. Your extra guitar part is the thing that clashes with the key of the song (its on the last hit), I'd leave that out and allow the initial guitar to play that awkward voicing.

When you add the second guitar back in the middle of the track, perhaps put a small, soft delay on it. Add a couple of voicings to the bass in the hook to make it move a touch more.

At the end of the day, yes, the vocal is what is going to bring a track like this to life, but you can't just assume that the artist is going to fill that void.

Sounds good Davidarcade, the only thing i think i would change is the bass, the song itself is pretty good, maybe a little more mixing and add a few more instruments to the mix. awesome work!!

Ok. So dont take anything as a negative as I am a very critical listener. Plus, I feel as if the goal is to uplift folks.

1. Very interesting chord progression that could make it challenging for one to sing to (artist adds a chorus).

2. Original guitar loops seems to sit pretty far behind the kick and snare on certain hits. Not sure if you intended this but if not, take a look at the grid there.

3. Personally, I feel as if you need a few more elements as the track as a whole seems a tad bland.

Keep putting material out bud. Good job.

very like it