Description : Lmk how this sounds and give any feedback/tips

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  1. OcsiProx
    OcsiProx on Sat 14th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    Omg this is so cool man, that dope
  2. theanscenic
    theanscenic on Fri 13th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    So I listened to this a bit more in the car etc. This is all my opinion and I am just a regular dude so I may be wrong and its your song in the end but these are my thoughts:
    1. The vocals seem to be missing depth. Like something with the EQing. They sound a little tinny? idk if that's the right word to use.
    2. I love the part at one point where you added vocals in a lower pitch around 1:35. It was one of those moments when you get goosebumps from a track.
    3. The producers tag is a bit annoying more than once. maybe take out the BEAAAAAAAAATS after the first time
    4. you could switch up to one of the drops if you cut off the music for a bit. For example at 1:16 it would have been dope for the beat to stop and you to go "aye, aye" and then it drops again. Or if you stopped the beat like at the end of the track and then came in with the drop.
    5. You could add a bit of a singing "yeeaaah" here and there for example at the end after the hook the last time at like 1:56. It just makes it filled out. Just general adlib type of things here and there if that makes any sense lmao I am trash at explaining anything because I dont really know much.

    Of course this is really nitpicking but I listened to the track in my car a lot because I actually do really like it and was just offering all my thoughts on it. And you're only 16 man I wish I was that good right now, let alone at 16 lmao!
    sunnydas01
    Reply by sunnydas01 Thank you so much for the help man im making the changes rn.
    This really helped out dude ill send you the final link if you want when its done.
    Probably spotify and soundcloud in a week or 2
  3. theills312
    theills312 on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    Nice!!
  4. syrupdoeslofi
    syrupdoeslofi on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    This is absolutely on fire duh... Maan, I began as a producer and... Whoah, this is definitely a level I wanna get on..
  5. Arloph09
    Arloph09 on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    well-mastered
  6. EightyEightt
    EightyEightt on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    Nice man, enjoyed it a lot
  7. FAMOUR
    FAMOUR on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    Man this sounds great, really well prod bruh.
  8. baconmustard
    baconmustard on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    bro just keep on workin hard
  9. VadVid
    VadVid on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    Fire, I like the instrumental selection and the way your cadence and flow match it. Only thing I would say is, well idk if you changed the pitch but if you did be sure to turn on preserve formants, because right now there is a robotic sound to your voice. If that doesn't work I would say go into an equalizer and bring up those mids, to try and keep the natural sound. But ay its still fire.
    sunnydas01
    Reply by sunnydas01 Theres just a little pitch correction but I think the robotic effect might be from the microphone being a bit busted lol... but thanks for the feedback!!
  10. theanscenic
    theanscenic on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    This is dope! The beat and vocals, melody everything is on point. I don't have a good ear tho im just a trap bro lol
    sunnydas01
    Reply by sunnydas01 Thanks man!!
  11. JosephFunk
    JosephFunk on Thu 12th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    I can respect the fact that you asked the community here for opinions. I am at a disadvantage due to the fact that this is not my kind of genre of music but with that aside, I took a brief listen to your other stuff. Whoa, it is like night and day. First your style of singing works excellent with this kind of song. I think I heard some autotune or pitch correction in the vocals and that is fine. That is pretty much how it is done in modern music today anyway. I think you are heading in the right direction but keep on tweaking your style by maybe adding a bit more clarity to your lyrics in your vocals. All in all, I say you are good, and I see a lot of potential. The so called Adult content in your other songs is rather juvenile, in my opinion, and could possibly hurt your brand in the long run if you want to be taken seriously, but I love what you did on this one. It is always better to show and display your talent to win hearts and minds. Or you can choose the underground (explicit rap content), that is truly up to you if that is your real artistic passion and calling in music. But again, I really think that this style in this song works better with your good vocals as you get better. I wish you all the best no matter what you decide.

    Joe
    sunnydas01
    Reply by sunnydas01 I appreciate your feedback a lot and im glad that you heard my older stuff :)
    I'm trying to experiment with every type of music and find my own sound and over time my style has changed a lot. I'm glad that this song appealed you most. I'm still 16 so I have time to work on my music but your feedback really helped me!!

    -Sunny
  12. AxelZ
    AxelZ on Wed 11th Jul 2018 - 1 week ago
    This is dope!

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Broken hearts lead to open scars
That’s why I’m bleeding out
Lock away my feelings behind bars
That’s why I’m breaking out
Girl I know it’s on your mind
Why can’t we last long
I know I’m not being kind
Cuz of things going on

Hidden figures in my mind
Haunting me all the time
Making me lose my mind
Do I want to be alive

broke your trust
Ate your dust
You must think I’m here cuz lust
You can leave yea if you must
But I didn’t come to you just because
Hold me down when I’m messed up
Always helping my come up
can’t stand the fact that I take advantage of your constant love

Broken hearts lead to open scars
That’s why I’m bleeding out
Lock away my feelings behind bars
That’s why I’m breaking out
Girl I know it’s on your mind
Why can’t we last long
I know I’m not being kind
Cuz of things going on

 


 

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