Platform 1b Ft Behnam Zandi DeciBel - Srbrown7

well Hi again to all friends & before all my gentle friend Steve Brown .
as collaborator of this track , I just was minded to tell a great thnX to all comments for both versions ,meanwhile Staticnomad for his attention & usefull comment and all great words from great musicians like Scott & Ed about me which would work as encouragement for me .
in the end a great thanx to U Steve again for our collab & best wishes.____Behnam

Hey Steve...just a note of thanks for the comments on Cloud Dancer...I went over to my music PC...muted the bass track (I used a simple synth bass on the version posted) and plugged in my old JazzBass which I am much more comfortable with...but tend to walk around a lot on....and did some different bass licks...big difference....I`ll leave the one I did posted ...but I`m slapping myself on the forehead for not letting myself do my old bass player things....thanks again...Ed

Not sure what you mean about sending through another project. I'll look out for your tracks on here and leave advice now that I know it's helpful (or PM me if necessary). Some people find my suggestions useful, many don't respond, a couple have even given me outright abuse and insults. Because of the latter, I'm reluctant to say anything at all disapproving (though I do this constantly with my own work) and really only comment on tracks that I think are good or have potential. One guy even called me 'the greatest critic on the Loop', which was odd and a bit worrying though he later said he meant it as a compliment.

If I like something, my feeling is almost always that it can be better. So, I try to analyse which areas need to be worked on, though it can be hard to express how you think someone should go about this. And you don't even know if the element for which you're suggesting improvement is maybe the bit they think is perfect!

Recommend to me some of your tracks featuring Superior Drummer as I still haven't heard any track that I am aware of using the software. It and EZ Drummer are all over most of my last 12 or so uploads on here. I have most of the EZ add-on packs and a few Superior ones. Might get another EZ one this week (Rock) as I find I can never really have too many drums.

I use between 2 and 5 kits on a track and love mixing and matching elements. The EZ Metalheads and Claustrophobic kits are particular favourites and I love the Superior Roots and Sticks kits too. I'd love some orchestral drums (eg kettle drums) but there are none for Superior but there is a pack for BFD. But I don't have BFD!

Good luck with this track as I'm sure there's more to come from it.

There's so much soul in this piece. I'm convinced that guitar is alive.

OMG this is off the chart, I bloody love this mellow kind of rock :) pink Floyd style :)

Steve

I commented on the earlier version so won't say it all again (eg excellent guitar). But this is better.

Bass effective starting on 0:24 , gets better on 0:43.

Ambient beds are all good - just my kind of thing.

Little shakers good percussion choice but the one that comes in 1:04 interferes a bit with the guitar. Maybe they're not coming in on the right beat.

Still think more could be done with drums in those first few mins eg gentle cymbal rolls, a delayed fill here and there, maybe a hint of a beat fading in (have some fun with it) though basic sparse choice works fine.

Vocal sample 1:41 effective. Sounds like more vocal should now happen but I quite like that there is no more!

2:57 onwards bass is loud enough and effective. This section is probably all too loud, as can be seen on waveform (technical point) but good mix. Cool psychedelic section but needs to be longer! So, maybe return/drop back down to ambient chill though maybe with more of a beat this time. Maybe chop the guitar up a bit or something eg some reverse bits.

Behnam is an EXCELLENT guitarist. His style eludes me, though. I hear his talent and technique, but I have no idea where he goes with his music, but the man can PLAY HIS ASS OFF! Believe me, this is in no way a 'put down.' I love his playing, but I have no idea what the Fk he's doing! It is great, non-the-less!

Cheers,
Scott