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As always it's off the charts good. Rock solid, or maybe I should say jazz solid (despite the great guitar).

However.

I have a producer friend/teacher who helps me with songs and structures and he almost always tells me to simplify stuff. In your tracks I hear that too; you have so much musicality and so many amazing ideas - any 15 seconds of your track are more interesting than entire tracks (or the entire life work) of some of us.

Eg the first 5 seconds are this awesome drum rhythm plus bass, then at 0:04 you have the sax, then horns, then a Rhodes, then after 2 min you introduce this amazing guitar which you got straight out of the steely Dan studios (who is that amazing guitarist???)

So what I would set you as a challenge is:
- decide what the top 3 ideas are in your track (to me: the drums, the guitar and the horns)
- build a 2-3 minute track out of that to make sure the core is exactly how you want it
- then add some of the other elements.
- then see if it needs to be longer
Oh btw the drop/break at 4:45 needs to be part of the essentials

I should add that I already immensely admire anything you do - it's easily a 11 on a scale of 1-10. I just think that if you make that next step from jams to songs, you can be a major recording artist (if you aren't already). It's just that good.

I can't fully hear it, but it seems to me the bassline might be in a different key than the female vocal?
I like how you combined the vocals though, and the idea of having only a bass and drums and no other instruments is also really cool!

Amazing track. I agree with Eric on the autotune, which is one of my pet peeves, but you know what, this track is so rock solid I don't even mind. Great job!

BTW that is an awesome avatar, I only noticed when you replied. I might actually steal that idea for an album cover, that's how much I like it :D

Regarding "tracks to get played outside Looperman" - hey, I made that journey from "crap track on Looperman" to "decent track on looperman" to "some tracks on youtube" to "some listeners on youtube" to "some people to telling me to bring out an EP"... to doing a small concert of my own songs this weekend.

I mean... I honestly didn't think that was possible even a year ago and now I'm setting new milestones and new goals and while I still think it's all crap and I don't expect anybody to listen... some people do. So NEVER THINK THAT! Even if you're just being realistic, it can also be nice to be ever so slightly ambitious.

So, long story short, yes, people might play it. You might play it. You might DJ somewhere. Now imagine people standing around on the dance floor and you are starting your latest track and you want to blow their tiny minds - and your intro should tell them PREPARE TO BE BLOWN, EARTHLINGS. Wait, that's not what I meant ;)

So yeah, intros need to be interesting. Good luck :)

I like it, although the intro is pretty long for my taste. That's something that can be shorter maybe?
Great use of the vocals although I don't like the autotune. That could be in the stock vocal, else I would simply remove it?
Finally I didn't know Moses was called Bob, but he seems to have a nice side job besides splitting the red sea. Great danceable track man!

Very cool, where did you livestream it? Feel free to ping me a next time if you do it again!

Yeah understand 100%. I always try to focus on getting the music right before focusing on recording; I generally record guitar/bass through DI and piano through midi (I can't fit a proper Steinway in my tiny apt ;) ) and for drums I do have access to an accoustic set, but for practical reasons I start with some basic midi stuff. It's just easier.
Good stuff man, keep creating!

Very chill and dreamy. Nice track man! Would be great to add some vocals?

Very nice, love the combination of your voices. In the beginning I needed a bit to get into it, but then it grabbed me and I enjoyed listening to the whole track!

Nice! Maybe you can even add lyrics? Love the strings towards the end!

Love what you did around 1:56, also the guitar solo from around 2:26 is great. I love how you took 2 fairly separate genres and combined them.
I didn't fully understand it (I couldn't really tell when you would be going from techno to guitars and back) but I guess that doesn't matter, and I certainly had fun listening. Kudos, more of this!

That's really good! Imagine what you could do with a simple midi controller!!

Very good! Are the drums an electronic set or midi? To me you use the crash a lot and I'd consider to do a bit less of that or possibly use the ride, which gives a bit more pleasant sound.

Good stuff on the guitars. What kind of distortion are you using?

And always good to find someone who also believes in playing live instruments :)

Yeah the drums make this track. Well done.
So is it all live or currently in midi but you might record it live? I agree with the sentiment btw, I try to do everything live, but having midi piano/strings/drums just is a lot more practical at times, and I wouldn't be able to fit an entire orchestra in my living room anyway ;)

Not sure what to do? Publish and move on to the next track :) there's a million more tracks to be written.

But I can give some suggestions:
- less autotune in the sung vocals, I think that would bring it to life more. It's a good track btw, I just don't think you need audible autotune
- One other thing you could consider is to give the chorus a slightly different instrumentation than the verse.
- Finally you could try with dynamics and instruments to create a bit more of an arc, where the listener gets drawn in more towards the end, and where you also make the outro a bit different so we know it's about to end.

In any case, that's all details, and I would say: press publish, now start on the next track and take your lessons with you :)
Good luck!

Very special and a great combo with the spoken word!

Very nice! Good beat to it!

Love it, but I can also think of a couple improvement points you could consider.
The part from around 1:00 has a great vibe, and I think you can lead into that beat a little earlier. Then when you get there, you can bring a bit more variety. The vocals from 3:49(ish) are amazing and give it an ethereal vibe.
Good stuff, I was never bored!

Love it, even without the C64 references.
Btw I saw this the other day (not mine) which you might also appreciate:
https://youtube.com/playlist?list=OLAK5uy_lPhwCosVWD78-OkyVOHCcfrHW0_mn5lmc
Your tracks have more of an 80s britpop vibe, but the main thing is that I really really like it!

Dude, that is really really lovely. Your voice is getting so good! Great stuff!

It's very nice man. I'll whip out my guitar and noodle along for a bit!

His vocal is getting a bit better every time, and I really like the song you wrote, it's very compelling, good structure too.
Great stuff man. Are you guys planning any live gigs? Any open mic nights where you live or bars where you could play 20 min?

Add some vocals :)
If you're similar to me you're probably thinking "I can't sing" but the thing is, you can learn to sing. Just try, practice and get better :)
Good luck!!

It's quite punk rock, with interesting vocals. I like it!

Great vocal and you gave it a good vehicle, everything clicks. Good job!