JamesDavies

Hold on.. rewind.. stop everything. I'm hearing the beginning of a future star in this track. Admittedly there are production issues but listen to that rapping on it's own. Cancel everything else out. I'm getting quite an accomplished flow going on here. You understand how a rap should come across. Loving the effects on the rap portions of this song. The way that the sound is thrown about in my ears to emphasise certain words. It's there with that beat banging behind it.

There is quite a lot of noise on the vocal track(s).. I'd recommend playing around with the mic input level until there is more of your voice in there than background noise.

Overall though a solid effort in my opinion. Look forward to hearing more from you in the near future James :)

No ur not a rapper or singer sorry bro

nice start dude, dont get discouraged and keep working i iknow you will get it!

Too many people want to rap and sing these days straight with no practice...

It's pretty good like the beat of it. It sounds like some beats don't belong in some points of the song. It feels overlapping in some parts of the song. I like the way you set it up. Nice job.

As hardwareexorcist sayed . Your vocal is so messed up . Its like taking a mic and scream into it . :(

DOPE!! im feeling this ! dont forget to check out my track and leave your reviews as well.

I have to be honest here... I almost didn't make it all the way to the end of this track. I'm curious as to what software you use, other then Audacity. In any case this track made me feel like i was experiencing the worst DJ set in the world!!! please fix the timing on the "loops" that you used. Also I recommend that you look for some torrents of sequencing software (or figure out the math to timing without sequencers). Furthermore, I agree with Bear... It is wonderful that you are starting out so young. I got started on production when I was about 16, all i had was Sound Forge. Which is a great sound manipulation software but not a sequencer, which means that at first all my sequencing was done in "copy paste" format.

Peace and Love
Drums and Bass

It looks like I'm late to the party. It also looks like this is one of your first songs and it is a pretty good start young Jedi. The timing issues will work themselves out.

Actually, there is a thing in music called "syncopation." A syncopation or syncopated rhythm is any rhythm that puts an emphasis on a beat, or a subdivision of a beat, that is not usually emphasized. A quick search on the Internet should get you a lot of information on syncopation and why it's cool to use in music.

The great thing about all of this is you are only 13, yet you are producing some pretty good music. Just keep at it. I started at the age of 5, and here I am, 53 years later and I'm finally starting to figure it all out (I majored in music and graduated from college with a music degree).

Congratulations on a good start here on the Loop. Just stay with it.

Bear

there's some good ideas here, but you really need to work with some software that'll allow you to sync your loops. i recommend using FL. it's a great entry level package that'll grow with you. i still use it, heh. it's got a great slicer in it, so out of sync loops will be a thing of the past. and you don't even have to worry about what BPM they are, the slicer automatically cuts up a loop and sequences it in the master BPM. but yeah, get yourself a good DAW to work with, learn the basics of it and you'll see improvements in your work immediately. feel free to PM with any questions you might have about anything tech related, i've been doing this for a long time and might be able to help you.

this song has some really cool sounds going on in it. you did a great job selecting the sounds here. like toddj said, this could fit in glitch really well. maybe ambient if you added the right drums and bass. i can here this song going in several different directions, actually, depending on what elements you added and how you mixed them. or you could leave it as it and it would still stand alone quite well. good job, man.

let's start with the positives first. you've got a good feel for the rhythm and how to make that work. you added the backing vocals in very good places and the work well with the main track.

now most of your negatives are on a technical side and those improve with time, so let's get those out of the way. the vocals are way to high in the mix, so much so they over power the music track. again, the problems with volume levels and learning how to EQ out dead frequencies will come with time and practice. there's also a lot of hiss in some of tracks and it's hard to tell if they're coming from the effect you used or someplace else. those can be dealt with by editing your effect parameters and EQ.

your non-technical issues are solely pitch. your ability to maintain the proper pitch not only in relation to the music, but to yourself needs a considerable amount of work. this is something that can only be overcome with lots of practice and hard work. if getting singing lessons is beyond your means, perhaps you can find another vocalist to help coach you to improve your technique. once again, you're in a great place to get help:) don't get too down on yourself, man. we all had to start somewhere and, like i said, your issues aren't anything that can't be overcome with practice and patience. ask for help where you feel like you need it, the people here have great advice and can help you grow leaps and bounds.

what an odd melody you used for the square wave starting this song out. very different. actually, this song seems to be full of things that sound and feel...off... but the kick and synth guitar tie it all together with a central theme. i won't comment on the off beat loops, apparently others have brought that your attention and you're addressing the issue. but i would recommend using a slicer for your loops if you have one. those are a quick and easy way to get your loops in time with everything else, as well as giving you many more options with your loops. there's a good song in there, man, you just need to refine your technique a bit. no worries, though, you've come to the right place to learn just how to do that=) keep working on it, man, you'll get there=)

gret tune- cant wait until the vocals hit this track

Has potential, could be a really awesome track, as others have said, just work on your timing, I had the same problem when I started making music! I love the main synth and the beat sounds Pitbull inspired, good work, keep trying & editing! :)

prtty good techno tune hear but you reely reely need to work with the beats..

I currently use an older version of Acid, Acid Screenblast 4.0. There are many good programs out there. Fruity Loops Would probably be a good one. Reason might be a good program also. There is Acid Home Studio 8 that is a good introductory program. Search around online and find out which one might work the best for your needs.

It sound like you need a program that will allow you to stretch loops and also record to. Acid is good for that and so is Fruity Loops. Those are some of the best entry level programs out there.

Once you get a good program to start with then you can start to really practice your craft of mixing and music creation. Good luck with making your own music.

Toddj

This tune could fit in with weird or glitch. The style could depend on what kind of drum beat you might choose to use. This track does sound well constructed for the most part the audio levels seem to be pretty good. I like the different sounds you mashed together. I think this track would work well with a drum and bass beat, or an Ambient beat. I like Zero2zero's comparison to a metal mickey braking down. Nice job James!

Welcome to Looperman. Hey we all have to start somewhere. I'd Say Looperman would be a good site to do it. It sounds like you're off to a decent start. Just figure out your timing issues with the drum track. You might try to watch your audio levels for each instrument track. You don't want them too loud, that they are sounding distorted. If your mixing program has an audio level meter, see if the sound is going into the red for each individual track. You want to keep it from going into the red. That's what we call clipping. Without mastering it or using a limiter on the master track you may find it hard to prevent clipping entirely. But, hey just have fun with it. Read a lot and ask questions. I'm not an expert so I'm just giving you some of what I know. I hope to hear more from you in the near future.

Keep workin at it Lil Bro... just play with your DAW and tweak stuff here and there. First and foremost is you gotta figure out tempo and timing! The BPM refers to Beats per minute and thats the key you need to focus on...using matching BPMs or stretching/shrinking time/tempos on your DAW!

keep trying... practice helps...

It feels like you didn't stretch the loops/samples to your project tempo . Needs to be reworked . Good luck

Hi.
Good quality recording, does not depend on the program but on the hardware and how it's all set ...
Audacity To me, this is not a program for creating ... maybe more to the recording or a combination of samples and finished singing.
Writing "making music", I mean coming up with and arranging sounds in such a way that created a melody ...
Each program you will learn from the ground will be good, but I work only with FL, so I can only recommend FL ;-)
Diwey

Do not get offended, but I'll give you some good advice.
Get a good program for creating music.
FL Studio can be.
Study guide your program and spend a lot of time these activities.
All information can be found on the internet ...
Beginnings are always difficult, but as we now start from the professional software to create, in the future, the more successful you'll be doing songs from the one you just heard ...
I always take every criticism with courage and pull out of this critique conclusions.
Good luck and I hope that you will not last long, make a good, new song!
Diwey

Idk if its just me but a lot of stuff is off beat the hi hats are very sloppy and the way it just cuts out and totally changes was weird, but just keep practicing man try to get the drums to fit better I can tell it would be a great instrumental if everything blended better, practice practice, practice, and some day it will be perfect.. Keep workin at it.