Listen To OBLIVION With Vocals Hip Hop Song By AlleyCatLuca | Looperman

I like your rapping bro. Hop on one of my beats already jajaja. I liked the vocals but i feel like the beat is too minimalistic. While that isnt bad, I feel it could be a lot more fire.

Hey dude. What's happnin?
Let me start with the fact that this isnt my genre of choice, so I don't have a very extensive knowledge on the in's and out's of what it's supposed to sound like.
With that being said, here are my thoughts:
First, your voice. I don't know why you seem to think it's not good. It's clear, you're on time, the rythm fits the beat, you're projection is strong. You don't seem to be hesitating. Dude, that's your voice. Embrace it. Based on what I heard, you ARE a rapper. Run with it, amigo.
Second, the music. Again, I don't know the genre, so I'm listeneing with fresh ears.
Lets start with the beat. It's very minimal. Which is a good thing. It's not crowding the place up. Even with its minimalism, it's still varied, so it doesn't get boring. I don't know if you're using loops, or if you programmed them yourself. If you did program them, excellent work. If they are loops, excellent choice.
I dig the use of the vocal sample. It's almost like another piece of percussion.
The gated squarewave synth is good. It brings a higher octave into the mix. That way, it doesn't seem like everything is competing for the same low end. Which, sometimes, I'm guilty of myself.
Third, the overall mix. It's very clear. It's nice and wide. Everything seems to be sitting exactly where it should be. Nothing is clipping, or ducking. The hats are crystal with no sizzle, the kick is nice and deep without squashing everything else.
The vocals are sitting perfectly front and center. This is a good mix. My only complaint is that it's only a minute long. Keep working on this until it's at least a solid 3 and a half minutes, dude.
Fourth, your presentation of yourself to us, the listeners.
You have what I refer to as the "Bullshit Check Off List."
That's where, instead of just stepping up and saying, "this is my work. Enjoy it!" You list off all the things you don't like about it, or that you feel isn't good enough. That just puts all of the flaws into the minds of the listener, and as they listen to it, they can check off all the bullshit that you listed. Your job as the creator is to create for us to hear. Your job is not to decide if we should like it or not. 99.9% of the time, my friend, nobody will even catch the mistakes that you think will ruin it. I can't tell you how many times I've posted a track with a cringe in the back of my mind, only to have comments of the highest praise from some of the most talented and respected members here. What I'm saying is, if they didn't catch it and say anything, then it wasn't anything to worry about. Do yourself a favor, and toss the clipboard.
Alright, man. I've been up on this soapbox long enough. Bottom line, dude...with this track as my only exposure to your work, I'd say you have a pretty good handle on what you're doing. Get yourself a little confidence, and keep doing it.

Take care.
V

not bad,...better mix could push it to the next level