Judah76

"and nobody listens to radios anywhere else these days!"

That's not true, sir. Broadcast radio is still a huge medium (although not as frequented by the public as in the 80s & 90s). Major record labels still spend thousands of dollars in air-time for their releases. If this was not so, you and I could release our works on the radio. But we cannot because the Majors still have that medium virtually on lockdown (thus making it expensive for the little guys to enter). An independent artist's friend is still college radio.

Sounds more like Alternative and Punk Rock. The cymbals are a bit too loud. And that weird synth introduction drives the whole song into its own car crash. And the vocals, chiefly the chorus, are sitting in mud beneath the music! Vocals shouldn't sit under the music. This does a disservice to the vocals and makes her sound like Joan Jett (although at Joan's musical zenith).

The overall composition is good. The 30-second right channel pan could be annoying to some listeners. Left channel is too low even for a pan simply because it is a near-30 second stretch. For that reason, this would not be radio-friendly (ever wondered why no song ever played on the radio began with a channel panned?). It would work well in a movie or stage theater, but the pan would still need to be shortened to like 10 seconds. Love the break.

I've heard these vocals before and, yes, they're great. The first half is awesome; the second half lacks symmetry: your piano accompaniment is glitchy and out of tune. Fix that and your track is a heavyweight.

This is crap. Way too loud. No essence to it. Felt like you picked out random VSTs, threw in a random set of chords, jacked up the volume, jacked up the gain, and rendered.

I have mixed feelings about this.
Pros:
Very harmonic; easy on the ears; great running time (mainly because of the following Cons)...
Cons:
Sounds like elevator music; doesn't invoke that feeling to click "replay" over and over...

You said you'll be expanding on it. From my perspective, it needs a little more dynamics in its presentation. I see the mood is intended to invoke a mellow atmosphere, it does, so the dynamics I'm talking about is not some major twist or transition. Maybe another instrument to guide the progression or ease in and out to create an extra flavor. I do it often in my new work: TARGET PRACTICE (4/22/2017)[4 track demo album].

But its not bad!

Sir, this is awful. There was no cadence to the music (even metal has harmony. Screamo: blow that crap up with a nuke). The entire track basically exceeded 0db. Could not understand the lyrics until I put on headphones. Sorry, but there isn't a single decent point about this song. Edit: lower the gain, throw in a bass drop, a solo guitar, and amp the lyrics. I guarantee it will be a better version.

Lyrically way better some of the crap dudes peddle on CDs outside of Walmart.
I'm a chopper fan so I'm a bit bias when it comes to flow.
There are some issues with it tho: 1. as a Hip Hop song you took too long to appear, 32 seconds before a word is spoken. Sorry dude, that rule can't be changed. 8-10 seconds should be the max; 2. the music is nice & melodic but it doesn't fit the title and theme. You're declaring conquest over the rap game issuing a battle cry of "(I'ma)Change the Game", yet your musical composition, as Korrupt pointed out, does not convey that. The mantra behind such a statement as "changing the game" in HH is equally musical composition AND lyrical presentation. 4. There wasn't a musical nor lyrical bridge, which is a staple in music that packs a 12 gauge blow to the listeners of their genres. Imagine a newbie group declaring to be superior to Metallica or U2 and don't implement a solo guitar in their I-declare-war song. WTF! Who are these bustas!
Good effort, tho. Consider a new & harder beat behind the song.

You have too much compression applied. I can hear clipping. The drumline is drowning out the synths & the music is above your vocals making it hard to hear them. The overall harmony is nice tho.

Sounds like a Timbalind hit! For Missy Elliot. Like it a lot. Good running time too.

Yeah this is my type of Hip Hop instrumentals I like to jam out to. Shit that sounds epic! Thx for not drowning us out in sub-bass! Esp. loved when you dropped the bassline and music sounded like a score off a Michael Bay film.
Subtle but bangin'!

Music is good. Good job not heavily compressing the vocals (like soooo many others habitually commit in error). The only issue I hear with this song is that the music is "above" the vocals and doesn't invoke a desire to have the song as a "favorite". Try dropping the guitar (or synth, if that's a synth & not guitar)& other non-percussion instruments under the vocals. Let the bassline ride over the vocals. Keep everything else the same (they're fine). Just some listener advice.

Pros:
1. the music composition is bada$$
2. the lyrics are mediocre but...
3. your hard-hitting flow redeems them for replay action
4. great job in making the melody stand above the bassline (it's getting a bit stale hearing other people's track after track of 80% kick & sub-bass)

Cons:
1. one minute lead-in to the vocals had me questioning: "does he mean this is an instrumental about blah-blah"
2. vocals were under the music and not on top

Over-all its superior to most the crap on Soundcloud.