Description : Hi everybody ! This is my new song and i hope it will please you ! So review this song and tell me how you found it, i want your feelings ! Thanks
Ps: Thanks to Michael Pimentel to vocal and Califken to melody!
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I agree with Toonz. The acapella sample sounds "ok" but you could clean it up just a bit. The melody and the beat.....here's the part where it gets rough. These two things do not match (at all). You may want to listen to Deadmau5 & Kaskade's - I Remember. That song has almost exactly what you need to make that acapella track shine. Also, try not to just copy and paste a vocal track over beats, because as this song is a prime example of, it just doesn't sound pleasing to the ears, and when you are trying to make this kind of music (dance,house,etc.) you need to make sure that people can flow, and also dance to it.
However, like Toonz mentioned you may want to just completely start fresh and just work on song structure. Also, I would recommend learning the basics of chord progression and arranging. Although, this can get complex, take Deadmau5 for example. He uses fairly simple chord progressions, but because of how he arranges his music it sounds amazing.
Sorry, if I came off a bit odd, I'm just trying to help!
I agree with you and Toonz. But it's hard to make a song when you just have FL's demo... But i'm gonna listen to you for the next and try to use your review :)
The best song i do was "If I die" if you can tell me how you found it...:)
Ok,... So you might not like me much after this but the aim of this review is for you to hopefully take something away from this and improve.
From the start - The vocals do not seem to mesh well with either the beat or the plunky melody. They almost seem like they were forced together, which is never a good thing.
The main melody is nice, but there is a definite "gap" between the two phrases which tells me these are probably looped samples you put in right?? It's a nice idea, but it's a better idea to use your own loops as these have a FAR greater ability to blend with the song. If you aren't that experienced making melodies just experiment. Practice makes perfect after all :D
There also seems to be a notable lack of a solid bass line, which no track is complete without.
around 1:32 when the vocal kicks in again, not sure if it was an upload issue, but again a very apparent glitch. you can hear it for yourself :)
If I were you, I would completely ditch the vocals and any pre-made loops and concentrate more on track structure. I would suggest listening to some of your favourite tracks, look to see how they are set out.
A Classic Example of song structure is below:
intro (4 bars),
verse 1 (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
verse 2 (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
bridge (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
outro (8 bars).
Maybe try to build your next track to those guidelines above and listen carefully to your favourite tracks and try to "copy" them so to speak.
I really do hope this helps,... But if you want any more advice, feel free to ask :)
Sorry for the harsh review
Toonz
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However, like Toonz mentioned you may want to just completely start fresh and just work on song structure. Also, I would recommend learning the basics of chord progression and arranging. Although, this can get complex, take Deadmau5 for example. He uses fairly simple chord progressions, but because of how he arranges his music it sounds amazing.
Sorry, if I came off a bit odd, I'm just trying to help!
-Spoox
The best song i do was "If I die" if you can tell me how you found it...:)
From the start - The vocals do not seem to mesh well with either the beat or the plunky melody. They almost seem like they were forced together, which is never a good thing.
The main melody is nice, but there is a definite "gap" between the two phrases which tells me these are probably looped samples you put in right?? It's a nice idea, but it's a better idea to use your own loops as these have a FAR greater ability to blend with the song. If you aren't that experienced making melodies just experiment. Practice makes perfect after all :D
There also seems to be a notable lack of a solid bass line, which no track is complete without.
around 1:32 when the vocal kicks in again, not sure if it was an upload issue, but again a very apparent glitch. you can hear it for yourself :)
If I were you, I would completely ditch the vocals and any pre-made loops and concentrate more on track structure. I would suggest listening to some of your favourite tracks, look to see how they are set out.
A Classic Example of song structure is below:
intro (4 bars),
verse 1 (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
verse 2 (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
bridge (8 bars),
chorus (8 bars),
outro (8 bars).
Maybe try to build your next track to those guidelines above and listen carefully to your favourite tracks and try to "copy" them so to speak.
I really do hope this helps,... But if you want any more advice, feel free to ask :)
Sorry for the harsh review
Toonz