hey thanks for the comment originally i made this track for the Beat Makers Competition so i needed to use five of the ten provided loops, i tried to make it sounds easy flowing but just couldnt make it click, eventually i felt overwhelmed and thats how the song was starting to sound to me, but sometimes, im not sure if the song is actually having the overwhelming effect or just because its so cramped together and messy, perhaps if i slowly seperated each sound individually, either way thanks for giving it a listen and thanks even more for giving me something to think about
not bad for a first song?! it either needs to drop away into something more ambient or needs to get real dramatic, accent bits but i think its good as it is, i often try three or four parts bridge, verse, melody and a fiddle bit, you seem to sit on two max..good work
i think its pretty good, i think it needs a break in there, maybe one of the chorus bits drop the melody and accent the ryhym, its a good song tho.....
Smooth it out a little. Composition and transitions are a little to rough. Add a crash when your dropping in and out of certain parts of the song. Its a little weird for me but, I like where your going with it. Think smoother. Keep it up!!!
Thank you, i do enjoy it when people just tell me "nice track", but i definately enjoy it more when others pick at my songs to try and help me get better, for a beginner i really need and want any and all crticism, so i can take a nother look at my pieces and pick them apart myself also.Thanks again XD
Man, that's crazy. It's well put together but to be honest with you.. I couldn't listen to the whole thing because it was creeping me out! So mission accomplished for causing emotion :-)
its too bad you didnt listen to the whole thing, but i was wanting a freaky horror sounding song, and i guess if it creeped you out i must have done something right. thanks for giving it a listen and thank you even more for the review, very much appreciated
I'm getting the feeling from what you wrote about your track that your fairly new to production "this isn't your first song : p' and worried about people not liking your stuff.
I have to say tho, it's really nice. You've got the right idea and obviously have a musical ear. So don't worry, just keep at it, the harder you work the better you'll get and quicker too.
Few things I'd do to improve it:
Vary your snare drum pattern a little more, throw in a couple of extra notes and push the odd note VERY slightly out of time to add feeling. Push it backwards if you want to slow the track down in feel for a second, or forwards to make it sound snappy for a second. Depending on which sounds better at the point in the beat you're working on.
Expand either the piano or the vocal with a different melody. Could just be something simple around the end or middle of the verse or wherever fits.
Try chopping the elements up a little more, cutting elements out of the beat every now and then, it can make a big difference to break up the track just cutting the odd little bit and piece out.
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I have to say tho, it's really nice. You've got the right idea and obviously have a musical ear. So don't worry, just keep at it, the harder you work the better you'll get and quicker too.
Few things I'd do to improve it:
Vary your snare drum pattern a little more, throw in a couple of extra notes and push the odd note VERY slightly out of time to add feeling. Push it backwards if you want to slow the track down in feel for a second, or forwards to make it sound snappy for a second. Depending on which sounds better at the point in the beat you're working on.
Expand either the piano or the vocal with a different melody. Could just be something simple around the end or middle of the verse or wherever fits.
Try chopping the elements up a little more, cutting elements out of the beat every now and then, it can make a big difference to break up the track just cutting the odd little bit and piece out.
Keep up the good work anyway mate.
Rick.