I see a black widow, aka female husband killer, preparing and intitiating her plan. But it stops. It needs to go beyond the basic idea. Great start to what could be a great tune.
begins beautifully, like I just opened the door to a club and walked in. At first I was listening to RnB and then.........
Dude, I like, but this is not RnB, Fusion definitely.
My only other piece of advice (not criticism), is make this longer. Damn, just when I was lovin it, it stopped. Reminds me a girlfriend some time ago, but let's not go there LOL
I would suggest bringing your vocals to the forefront. I want to hear you as if you were standing right in front of me. That being said, and that is not criticism (it's more like pleading), this is a beautiful track. There are so many elements of this track that just make me tingle (for lack of a better phrase).
Thanx Jonhn !!
I Sure am glad ta hear that and um sure Jefierenee will be too. Especilay with your skill and experience. wut a compliment. So ya think I may need to allow more breath'n room for voc's? or shorten the sixteen, add a abridge..hmm ya got me think'n. oh yea...Intro? Thanx again DRE?DSP
Lol. Great use of special effects, love the use of the organ and keys. The drum tack works with everything else. How did you manage to get Brittany Spears to sing for you? The sax was awesome.
Dude you have me boppin. Great metre (Canadian spelling) to your lyrics. Awesome voice for rap. I don't think you have to swear as much as you are in this song, though I understand it is part of the genre for some, because you appear to be too good a wordsmith. I'm guessing it's for dramatic effect.
This is a great track. You obviously have talent and I am going to check out more of your stuff.
Don't forget us looperpeople when you hit the big time
sorry it took a min to get back but check out the song why i use the n word and it might shed a light to ur question and i will never ever forget
my looperman friends and fans
This piece would be great during an action scene, as was the last track of yours I reviewed. Everything works great. Seems like there may be some element of sci fi involved. Could this be the theme to the X Files 2?
There's someone lurking in the background, waiting. The person he is waiting for arrives. He follows close enough to maintain where the person is going, but not so close as to be detected. Why is he follwing? Is it for some evil intent? Who id the bad guy in this? It could be either. The person being followed feels eyes upon him\her. The pace quickens a bit. The one following knows he has been detected. He speeds his pace, overtaking his prey. A decision must be made. Who will die? Or, perhaps even worse, has he actually found Waldo?
I first decided to listen to this track because I wanted to know what the deal was. I'm thinking your vocals are better than your backing instrumentation. You have a great voice for rap, nice metre (Canadian spelling) in your lyric, but you need backing music worthy of your talent.
thanks for the review. You are right about homey production because he can send me 100 beats and I'll like only 2 of them. I just went with the best he had. Plus this is an old track from like 3 , 4 years ago.
Dude the quality is fine, this is a sweet piece. You could have called this cinematic because it does bring images to mind. Do you know what that means? It means it's art. Well done.
dear john, thx for your review. it is called song nr. 1, cause it is really my first song starting last year. it has a very optimistic atmosphere, and it gave me a lot of positive energy in a very deep part of my live. i think the quality of my other tracks are better, but the melody of this is amazing. As you know a review is very important for me to hear other opinions and continue my works with a higher quality. thanks once again, greeeetz michael
Sweeeeeet. Seriously, you have done a very nice job job on this track. Whatever errors you made were invisible, at least to me, because I was too busy enjoying what I was listening to.
I don't think this will be on th site long because of copyright issues, so I'm glad to get here first and say, ##### awesome. Love it, love it love it.
140 bpm? Ah, you played with the bpm, well played. Nice turns, you're taking directions I didn't quite forsee. The break was expected, well done bit. The only prob I see is that there is no clear definition of your instrumentation. Have you used any panning?
This is a very good track that could be a great track, I just wish I knew I had the skill to tell you what it begs for
Hi john,thanks for your review.My english is really poor.Clearly i must to say i can't understand , what you said.I will show your review to my friend at monday,he knows english better than me and i will return you.
peace
The guitar comes in sweet. I would not have expected rap. Nice vocals. Fitting well with the background music. There is some, what would it be called, straining, but it's something that could easily be fixed. Doesn't seem to be prob in the middle part, beautiful metre. The voice is awesome, the backup vocals are good but maybe a bit too much effects. If that is you rapping, you have a voice to die for.
Very nice track (I'd buy it and I'm not a rap fan, well, I do like Ice Cube, c'mon, how can you not like Ice Cube)
John
This is a pretty track with a bit of an evil overtone. Feels like a predator has captured it's prey, but it has feelings for the prey, maybe from some long past relationship. The predator releases the prey in a moment of emotional weakness.
Then again it could just be a sweet sounding tune, lol
the way it started almost gave me a heart attack, lol. Thanks for the breather soon after. Does anybody have some epinephrine? There is much about this track that is, let's say, common among such tracks. There is also much novelty in this track. Reminds me of Steve Jobs, "Good artists copy, great artists steal", to which I must add, "exceptional artists transcend".
LOved the instrumentation and the vocals. There were a couple points where the metre seemed to be off a bit, but other than that, an exceptional effort.
on Derailed by aliyarose
A very nice track (I wish you great success)
John
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All the best
John
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on Mirrorball (Nico ft. minette) by Nicooo
Sweet Track
John
Cheers :)
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All the best
John
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:-)
Johnny Like :-)
John
checkout the improved version om my thrack MISS U
Thanks for da appreciation
on Think About You by JKent
Dude, I like, but this is not RnB, Fusion definitely.
My only other piece of advice (not criticism), is make this longer. Damn, just when I was lovin it, it stopped. Reminds me a girlfriend some time ago, but let's not go there LOL
Overall, nice track
John
on perfect by minette
Well done
John
on I DONT WANNA LOOSE fet.Jefierenee by DSPSTUDIOS
Great expression of your talent
John
I Sure am glad ta hear that and um sure Jefierenee will be too. Especilay with your skill and experience. wut a compliment. So ya think I may need to allow more breath'n room for voc's? or shorten the sixteen, add a abridge..hmm ya got me think'n. oh yea...Intro? Thanx again DRE?DSP
on Animal Friends Get Funky by SYLPHEERA
Nice track ;-)
John
on this song is 4 u by donmega
This is a great track. You obviously have talent and I am going to check out more of your stuff.
Don't forget us looperpeople when you hit the big time
John
my looperman friends and fans
on Hyperspace by Mechanic
on calmer than you dude by oasisduke
Well done
John
cheers for the listen and review, John!
on i dunno by oasisduke
There's someone lurking in the background, waiting. The person he is waiting for arrives. He follows close enough to maintain where the person is going, but not so close as to be detected. Why is he follwing? Is it for some evil intent? Who id the bad guy in this? It could be either. The person being followed feels eyes upon him\her. The pace quickens a bit. The one following knows he has been detected. He speeds his pace, overtaking his prey. A decision must be made. Who will die? Or, perhaps even worse, has he actually found Waldo?
Nice track
I like it a lot
John
you obviously get it...
;)
cheers for the beautifully expressed review. much appreciated!
on You Know The Deal by shortyone74
All The best
John
on Song Nr. 1 - Hoffnung by MichaelBork
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on Hair Echo by JimmyLee
Great piece
John
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John
on Stop by CSoul
This is a very good track that could be a great track, I just wish I knew I had the skill to tell you what it begs for
John
peace
on So Natural by KorruptDialect
Very nice track (I'd buy it and I'm not a rap fan, well, I do like Ice Cube, c'mon, how can you not like Ice Cube)
John
on Pollen Confetti by WoodlandCritter
Then again it could just be a sweet sounding tune, lol
John
on My Little Stars by TaraToxic
You appear to have transcended
John
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JOhn
on I BEEN WAITING fet. Preachnvain by DSPSTUDIOS
John
I think it came out ok for a quick pick. =)