For your first attempt, its not bad. I will assume you have been making other music. First of all, about Johnnygadgets comment, trance music does not have to sync all the time. In fact, it often does not. However, at some point the song does have to sync back up with the beat, as to be mixable for a DJ, and also for the listener to get back on track. Other than that, I would think that if you wanted to put some more chordic sounds or pads under to fill the spaces, that might be good as well. Otherwise, its a good track, just keep working on it. Don't get discouraged. It will really develop, as long as you don't get sidetracked literally into another song.
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