bloomonkey

I love the french house vibe ! I my opinion you can improve your drums a lil bit (heavier clap -> transpose in -12 st to make it more dancy). But still a very nice work

Hi, Bloomonkey! Hello from Ottawa! Nice to meet you! (Inverness is one our our favourite places in Scotland, especially the River Walk.)

Saw your post in the forum and took a listen to your track. I agree with Bear on most of his comments. I liked the way you introduced different elements as the track progressed. Panning is good. I didn't hear it more pronounced on the left side, but probably worth checking how your Master level meters are looking in Logic. (I use Logic as well.) I was pleased to see that you had quite a good bit of dynamic range in the track. It doesn't just max out continuously in the wave form display.

That said, I do have some suggestions. First: there are only two chords in the track, played repeatedly by the synth pad. The other elements do help to make the track not overwhelming repetitive and boring, but it really would be improved by adding in at least one additional chord progression.

Second, I also think there's no variation in the drum pattern throughout the track, at least not enough to be noticeable. I'm guilty of the same thing in my tracks, but your track really needs more elements that will maintain interest. So, I'd consider layering some other drum/percussion patterns at points. Not sure what you have other than Ultrabeat (the drum synth that comes with Logic), but it actually has lots of patterns as presets and is easy to program patterns from scratch.

I think the bass line is good, but should be more pronounced in the mix. It is submerged relative to the two-chord pad part. The timbre of the bass patch is OK, but in addition to increasing the level in the mix, you might experiment with EQ settings to give it a bit more bite and some compression also if you don't have that already on the bass track.

You can't go wrong with using one of Patricia's vocals. If you create an arrangement with an additional chord progression, you might be able to use something else from her acapella, not just repeat the same phrase.

Overall, I think the mix is a bit muddy, largely due I think to the prominence of the synth pad which dominates the middle to upper low frequency range. I would experiment with EQing the synth pad track to make room for the bass line and reduce the level of the synth pad track in the mix as well, relative to other parts.

Those are my comments, for what it's worth. I did like the track. I'd say it represents a good foundation. Needs a little bit of fine-tuning of the mix and, as Bear also said, a tempo or chord change (I favour a chord progression change) to make the arrangement even more engaging for the listener.

Eric

Nice work here. I think the mix is actually pretty good. I like the panning on the piano/bell synth (it has some really nice movement from left to right). The pad on both intro sections could possibly use a bit wider stereo field. Also, it could be my ancient ears, but most of the instruments seem to be centered or skewed to the left, leaving the right side of things seeming a little neglected (I hope that makes sense - it could just be my hearing too, haha). I did enjoy this a lot and I'm a fan of good chilled music. All in all, it was an enjoyable listen and your production skills are really pretty good. Compositionally it was also Well done. If you wanted to get crazy you could throw a tempo or chord change in the middle and then transition back. There are lots of changes you could do, but you could also just leave it as it is...it's a solid effort. I hope all is well.

Bear

fresh!! great work

Nice work. Incredible bass!

This is nice! Relaxing vibe and I like the mix too. So many audible textures and layers to sink into and float around in. Yeah, so you did your job well, I'm certainly more chilled out than earlier, cool.

Wayne

I just opened my channel in YouTube so soon I will upload new video with your song
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8Zl9tjbootk

I really like this track, perfect for my video

Nice work.

Bella

absolute cool track ... relaxing, traveling music in car ... downloaded for that ... thank you ...

fistbump, Danke

awesome just awesome

im curious to know what u used for the kicks.

Hey Bloomonkey,

so this is how they houseparty at Loch Ness ... very cool. It's got a feel of original chicago house but is also quite modern. Love it. Best regards, Michael.

Bro your tracks are insane ! keep pushing, full support!

This track has a great energy and interesting sound profile. Really enjoyed this banger! Time well spent on a job well done. Thanks for sharing.

deep house is way far from me but this is a super cool and chill song...absolute fav...

handshake, Danke

Ooh, the sections are unique but fit

I like the change at 2:08. It's a subtle change, but it drastically changed the mood. Very cool.

I'm usually not a fan of house music, but this is very nice. Mellow with a variety of layers to hold interest. I also like the subtle way you used the vocals.

Nice soft beat & keys. Cool synth. Love the riser break & vocal at 1;35. Rather enjoyed this one. Great work.

Ableton always has great sounds, and comes out as a quality mix. You did a good job with creating a mood here. I like how the listener can sit back and get lost thinking of different things.

A really great laid back feel to this track, Bloomonkey! Must have something to do with the way the river flows through the banks and under the bridge at Inverness. :) Definitely one of our favourite places in Scotland!

As I have said in comment's I've made on other tracks, if I hear a vocal melody line right away when I hear a track that tell's me its got something special. At least to my ears. I'm kind of old school about that, I guess.

Anyway, I got a nice R&B melody line playing in my head right away, so as far as I'm concerned, you did something right with this one.

I'd like it to have an additional chord progression for at least one more section to the song, but that can be hard to accomplish when the song is built on a stand-alone loop. Not sure if Danke provided anything more that would work with it. I should check that out, I guess. But, if left as a funk tune, it can work just as is.

Anyway, very nice work. I enjoyed it greatly.

Eric

I also put it in my top five looperman preferred track some month ago, follow the link below to check it out. Enjoy!
https://www.looperman.com/forum/thread/182742/what-are-your-favourite-tracks-on-looperman?page=5

cool tune...funky, groovy, dancy...

the middle part with the speech is a great idea to break that repetitiveness...

handshake, Danke