Interesting approach under ambient...it could be but not on the usual way...vocs are very 'chartish' and the drums are on the hip hop line...those are great and the structure of the song too..bit overgained yes...
That vocal is insanely good. I'm gonna have to agree with Skwish Fish about maybe adding a little melody with the keys in the 2nd verse just to keep things interesting. Also, if you're gonna have the drums then I think you should commit to them. They sound like an after-thought as is. Like you weren't sure if you wanted to add them or not.
Otherwise I really like your song. Could definitely hear that on the radio.
Zee
I don't want to come across as negative as my musical tastes are a little removed from this material, I think your voice by today's standards is very good, in fact it sounds exactly like most of the commercial material being produced today, now that is in fact a compliment and answers your forum question..I think if anything the dynamics of the track are a little one dimensional in that there's an immediate plateauing of emotion, no ebbing no flowing, maybe it's the autotune...unfortunately my preconceptions are getting the better of me and I'm sounding out of touch with today's vocal style, in all seriousness you've got a good to excellent voice and I can't see why you couldn't with the right production company get some commercial air play....all the best cheers PJB
This is a very nice track. All the components that exist within it work together in perfect harmony.
I do have to say though, it seems like it's missing a lot. It relies heavily on the repeating piano riff and the acapella to drive it along. The drums are hardly noticeable and seem very distant when they are. Also, the vocals at the very end do not seem to be in the same key.
In order to become ready to be released as a single, this track needs to be touched up on. Add a few more varying piano parts in there and maybe even a little melody to help drive it along.
I hope I haven't been too harsh. This track is absolutely wonderful otherwise!! :)
Well, you certainly did take that snippet to the next level. I really like the unplugged nature of this. You have some nice harmony vocals in this as well. I liked the way that you used tempo and silence (a powerful tool in a song) to set up your chorus lines and separate the verses all while using the same guitar riff (not an easy thing to do).
So now that you have a good idea of what you want this one to sound like, a little bit of advice. You just need to keep practicing your craft. This is excellent work, and you have a huge upside, you simply need to keep working like you are. Keep thinking about what makes a hit record for guys like Ed Sheeran or Sam Smith. What are they doing that makes songs that they have, that are similar to this one, stand above the others. Maybe think about having a version of this song with added instrumentation....add some drums, and a nice bass line (something like an upright bass would really work well on this). Maybe add some strings in spots, give it a completely different feel. That way you have two versions of a great song. Don't be afraid to experiment and spread your wings a bit. Like I said, you have really good chops, especially for a guy who is only 14. You keep this up and the sky is literally the limit for you.
I enjoyed this one immensely. Keep at this. Study the guys who are successful. Find your lane, and then put the pedal to the metal and don't look back. Well done. I hope all is well.
This! Thanks for all this amazing advice, this is the kind of message that keeps us artists growing and evolving! Your right this was definitely not an easy song to create I Started Writing this last year, started recording in January and only finished it yesterday! It was definitely a struggle but I kept going with it and obviously it paid off. This does no where mean this is the end for this sing, as I will This song will grow with time too. Again, thank you for this!!! It means so much to be appreciated, like this. I will take your advice on board and carry on with this track!
This is a great start to a song. You should finish working on it. Your vocals are really nice and has the sounds that most label companies look for. Keep up the good work!
Great vocals along with a great guitar riff. Now that you have this great start, keep working on it to get a complete song. It has a tremendous amount of potential, so keep after it. Add a bass line, drums, figure out a chorus and a bridge. KEEP AT IT!!! Stellar start to this one. I hope all is well.
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Overall, it's a fine production, handshake, Danke
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Otherwise I really like your song. Could definitely hear that on the radio.
Zee
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I do have to say though, it seems like it's missing a lot. It relies heavily on the repeating piano riff and the acapella to drive it along. The drums are hardly noticeable and seem very distant when they are. Also, the vocals at the very end do not seem to be in the same key.
In order to become ready to be released as a single, this track needs to be touched up on. Add a few more varying piano parts in there and maybe even a little melody to help drive it along.
I hope I haven't been too harsh. This track is absolutely wonderful otherwise!! :)
Keep on making music! Hope to hear from you soon!
Best,
Skwish Fish
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So now that you have a good idea of what you want this one to sound like, a little bit of advice. You just need to keep practicing your craft. This is excellent work, and you have a huge upside, you simply need to keep working like you are. Keep thinking about what makes a hit record for guys like Ed Sheeran or Sam Smith. What are they doing that makes songs that they have, that are similar to this one, stand above the others. Maybe think about having a version of this song with added instrumentation....add some drums, and a nice bass line (something like an upright bass would really work well on this). Maybe add some strings in spots, give it a completely different feel. That way you have two versions of a great song. Don't be afraid to experiment and spread your wings a bit. Like I said, you have really good chops, especially for a guy who is only 14. You keep this up and the sky is literally the limit for you.
I enjoyed this one immensely. Keep at this. Study the guys who are successful. Find your lane, and then put the pedal to the metal and don't look back. Well done. I hope all is well.
Bear
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Lets see you experiment a bit!
Cru
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