I used part of your rap in a song I made
I know that the theme of song isn't entirely how you meant it and I only used the second verse
still I would like your opinion on this :)
Nice man, I'm gonna try and use this, to do a more old skool rap tune, kinda EPMD, NWA, Public Enemy, that kinda thing, witha twist. I'll give you a shout if I get a nice track.
I like it!
But as I have said to many: work on how you contort the vocals to the instrumental.
The beat is really good!
Love that mellow piano.
I also think you misunderstood the song. It was aimed at bringing back old school rap. Not about a girl.
But hey it's alright, because if you keep producing like that, you're gonna be crazy!!
**IMPORTANT**
Post your tracks here and not some other website.
Not bad Skrible, I like the lyrics. Your second verse is, to me, much better than the first
Coming from a big Hip Hop fan, I think you could do a couple things to help your flow out.
-word choice- a few lines seemed a bit to simple. There was a lot of one two rhyming but not enough oblique, enjambment or double rhymes. Consider trying to mix things up a lil more you know?
-general flow- coming from someone who is also trying to learn to rap better, in general just try to feel it out a little more. Its also much better to do enough takes that you feel comfortable with spitting the lines. if you dont after a few, you probably should change a few words or switch the flow.
Just suggestions homie. Keep at it.
HEY HEY! Good to see a veteran's gotten on my ass! Lol. So anyways, thanks for giving the suggestions! Lyrics were made a little earlier when I was still maturing! But you're right, some sentences stop short. I plan to fix and I really want to do double rhymes and stuff like that, but you know I still need to learn a few tools of the trade before I start writing real shiet! But hey man, thanks for taking the time and writing out something I could gain a little wisdom from. Wish I'd get more reviews like this in song section! Appreciate your help brotha! Peace!
-Skrib
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I used part of your rap in a song I made
I know that the theme of song isn't entirely how you meant it and I only used the second verse
still I would like your opinion on this :)
the song is on my profile
thx
G.
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Also man, if you enjoy it, give me a shout, we could collab on it it you wanted, I could send you the stems or something.
Anyway, check it out dude, peace.
I'll listen to it right away!
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LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK : D i heard your rap this morning and threw it to some demo music i put together. what do you think of it ??????
Look at the review I tossed ya!
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But as I have said to many: work on how you contort the vocals to the instrumental.
The beat is really good!
Love that mellow piano.
I also think you misunderstood the song. It was aimed at bringing back old school rap. Not about a girl.
But hey it's alright, because if you keep producing like that, you're gonna be crazy!!
**IMPORTANT**
Post your tracks here and not some other website.
-Skrib
on Throwback Accapella by SkribleJ
Coming from a big Hip Hop fan, I think you could do a couple things to help your flow out.
-word choice- a few lines seemed a bit to simple. There was a lot of one two rhyming but not enough oblique, enjambment or double rhymes. Consider trying to mix things up a lil more you know?
-general flow- coming from someone who is also trying to learn to rap better, in general just try to feel it out a little more. Its also much better to do enough takes that you feel comfortable with spitting the lines. if you dont after a few, you probably should change a few words or switch the flow.
Just suggestions homie. Keep at it.
-Skrib