HoneyBoy

HoneyBoy

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Joined : 7th May 2011 - 14 years ago
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HoneyBoy 9th May 2011 06:50 - 14 years ago

on GIVE ME YOUR HAND (HEART BREAKER) by GabrielStarks
Hi Gabriel - I listened to your tune - several time in fact - "Give Me Your Hand" - Here's my review.

Okay, I really like the style and the mood. I love the use of multiple voiceovers - very nice. I like the English accent approach - keep that. The dreamy synths through most of the song are very nice. For composition and creativity, I give you very high marks. The "only in dreams" final line also a keeper.

Issues: I think the opening synths are a bit dry. I'd try something slightly more robust - perhaps add some vibrato. I think you could get a better drum sound too. The snare seems kinda dry compared to the dreamy synths.

Vocals: Very good work for doing it all yourself. The idea conveys very well. Your song has a lot of potential. Take it to a real pro vocalist - female I suggest.

I suggest you drop the line that sounds like a speech at the beginning and end of the song. Your song has a great romantic, in bed atmosphere - a great song for lovemaking. That line sounds like a rude interruption.

Very good overall - I hope you work with it. I'll come back to check for future versions. It reminds me of Portishead. Check out some PH - Imagine what Beth Gibbons could with your tune!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Vg1jyL3cr60&feature=related
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