Cessangelmusicbaby

Honestly, I really like it. Overall, I mean. It's got a great 90's sound to it. Which, I'm partial to.

As far as the technical side goes, it does need some work.
The first thing I noticed was the vocals are off beat. If that's you singing, try rerecording them with a little more attention to that. I understand that you're trying to convey raw emotion, but with out proper timing, it sounds...off.
ZkyNate suggestion compression on the vocals. I agree. If you aren't sure how to do that, there are a lot of good videos that explain in depth not only how to do it, but why to do it. I suggest looking into those.
He also mentioned the background vocals interfering with the main vocals. I think if you were to tighten the harmonies it would help as well.
The music itself. Personally, I really like it. I'd love to hear you put some more time into this and make it a good full track. This is something I would listen to in my regular rotation.

That's just my two cents. Take it for what it's worth.
Take care.
V.

Its all over the place... The beat is not properly mastered, and the vocal is barely understandable..

Hey there ,
here are some tips to improve the song. First of all before sending it off for a mix make sure to clean up the vocals performance (big breaths and artefacts). you can compress the vocal so its less dynamic. the BG vocals take away from the mail vocal so you can Eq they at around 1.5-3k Hz because that's where the intelligibility for the human vocal lies. after that balance the instrumentals a bit better compared to vocals. this will get you a bit closer to the point where it can be properly send of for a mix job

hope this helps
cheers :D

Nate Zky

It reminds me of the cranberries:p the voice might need more post-processing, some parts seems offbeat. i would also divide the vocals in 2 part were the singing is upfront and the rest is more in the background with reverb