DJsims

I liked what your going for on this.

Just some thoughts..
Try making it longer with a tonaly deep base track added.

You could use more of her vocal by capturing her best areas, and changing the pitch in a couple of places in the song and keeping her verb dreamy.

Just some thoughts....

I liked it.

Real nice work, but you need to bring those strings back in with a hard house beat methinks, and extend it to a full track. Three or four minutes should do the job. That intro is too good to go to waste. Kick the beat back in brother! Harder and dirtier than before. It needs to go mental, then die back down. If you spend some more time on this, I think it could be one of the best tracks on the entire site