Untouchable

it's quite interesting and ya definately got a style of ya own: i like the accents on the chorus and ya got an interesting voice even though sometimes it's a bit quiet, like on the chorus, and sometimes on the verses try articulating a bit better. if not i see loads of potential, and ya flow is fresh: keep at it ! only way is up ^^

Haha, I liked your description.
The intro could have been hip hop, but when the beat kicks in it's definitely more technoish...or maybe it could still be hip hop?!

Well, I don't know. But it's a good start either way.

Something about the movement of those chords that makes me hear a vocal for this. It's crying out for a good one.

It's not really my kind of style but I can hear a good song in here.

I like those strings that come in around 0:43. Then that beat makes the track take off.

Probably a smooth soul singer on this rather than a rapper though anything's possible (maybe both).

If you can get a good vocal you'll probably want to make it longer, say at least 3 mins.