The main thing is the vocals, They are very out of time and key. That's a very hard thing to grasp when learning. Try youtube to help understand vocal timing. The beat is a bit lifeless. That really only improves the longer you produce. Keep practicing, it can only make you better.
on Equinox - Last One To Die by 0Equinox0
https://soundcloud.com/user-319937404/last-one-to-die
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