I would say take away some of the redundant elements. Other than that Its a nice concept. take away like I mean it several times with some adlibs for example.
yeah man very emotionally connected. I could feel the effort you put into this. I losted my little brother to ##### violence. Check out the song "Lighter than Air".
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