This comment took me a while :-)
I really like the song, but like Kay0s writes, the vocals come late.
Remember: I am not a musician but a hobbyist so please take that into account with my comments.
It seems like the vocal verse fits less well than the chorus, the sung C# to C sounds a bit strange to my ears, different Keys?
Spice up the 1st and 2nd 8 bar part of the buildup:
I got your song to my pc, imported it into REAPER, then added a new track with FX delay (4x 1/2 note panning left/right and fading away) + Native Instruments VST Raum with initial preset, in that track I stretched a piece of vocals from the acapella up to 20 times from bar 27 to 41 (1 bar silence at the beginning) and used it as a drone with a long fade-in and -out, on top of that in the same track a few single words from the acapella verse, the delay runs down to bar 45. This gives the silent part some extra body and punch, everything quietly and that massive delay, like vocals from far far away, that as a preparation for the verse without disturbing the beauty and power of the 3rd 8 bar part of the buildup.
Result: The relative silence is broken and the singing, even if only fragments, starts earlier.
I hope I have not offended you with my comments but that they are helpful.
you are becoming more adept at Dance music - I love the production standard of this track - only suggestion I have, would be to bring in the vocal a little earlier, maybe around 1 minute into the track Kay0s
Hey VN, NO BS here,,,, working in this for hours and hours and posting,,,,, woke-up listened and said something is off............... then read your suggestion,... thanks.......
Hello SalvatoreJ.....I think you have a great dance track here. This would fit into just about any dance scene, it has super good vocals....excellent percussions and effects that move the experience the right direction and overall a sound made for the dance scene. It a very good track my friend.
The vocal is good and the beat and tune is, too. My only observation, is the bridge between the slowed down beat and picking back up the original faster beat seemed a little too long. I think if the beat is slowed for too long, the dance floor empties. That's just my slant but overall, a very promising track. Kay0s
Hey VN, Totally agree and questioned areas but rolled anyway... time vs life and hell of allot of slices to make it work and sorta fit,,, lol..... made changes and suggested...... I know im over in the intro,,, lol.... thx, S
Hey Kay0s,,, Thanks my friend..... Yes, The seven minute dance is ready and hot.
was first feeling this place out, had a very bad experience here ten+ ago. keep looking and/or ill try to notify when posted..... this one track per day is bla.
Hi Richard,,,,, Super thanks !
The Full version soon.... New here and still feeling place out.
It was monitor admin bully-bad hijacked 10+ years ago and split...
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I really like the song, but like Kay0s writes, the vocals come late.
Remember: I am not a musician but a hobbyist so please take that into account with my comments.
It seems like the vocal verse fits less well than the chorus, the sung C# to C sounds a bit strange to my ears, different Keys?
Spice up the 1st and 2nd 8 bar part of the buildup:
I got your song to my pc, imported it into REAPER, then added a new track with FX delay (4x 1/2 note panning left/right and fading away) + Native Instruments VST Raum with initial preset, in that track I stretched a piece of vocals from the acapella up to 20 times from bar 27 to 41 (1 bar silence at the beginning) and used it as a drone with a long fade-in and -out, on top of that in the same track a few single words from the acapella verse, the delay runs down to bar 45. This gives the silent part some extra body and punch, everything quietly and that massive delay, like vocals from far far away, that as a preparation for the verse without disturbing the beauty and power of the 3rd 8 bar part of the buildup.
Result: The relative silence is broken and the singing, even if only fragments, starts earlier.
I hope I have not offended you with my comments but that they are helpful.
Nice meeting you,,,, let me add i never would be offended and appreciate expressing your thoughts...
lol, I fast tracked rushing and missed things. Gonna start over ...;
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Thx Sal
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Kay0s
was first feeling this place out, had a very bad experience here ten+ ago. keep looking and/or ill try to notify when posted..... this one track per day is bla.
Thx again, Sal
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The Full version soon.... New here and still feeling place out.
It was monitor admin bully-bad hijacked 10+ years ago and split...