Hey dude. What's happnin?
Let me start with the fact that this isnt my genre of choice, so I don't have a very extensive knowledge on the in's and out's of what it's supposed to sound like.
With that being said, here are my thoughts:
First, your voice. I don't know why you seem to think it's not good. It's clear, you're on time, the rythm fits the beat, you're projection is strong. You don't seem to be hesitating. Dude, that's your voice. Embrace it. Based on what I heard, you ARE a rapper. Run with it, amigo.
Second, the music. Again, I don't know the genre, so I'm listeneing with fresh ears.
Lets start with the beat. It's very minimal. Which is a good thing. It's not crowding the place up. Even with its minimalism, it's still varied, so it doesn't get boring. I don't know if you're using loops, or if you programmed them yourself. If you did program them, excellent work. If they are loops, excellent choice.
I dig the use of the vocal sample. It's almost like another piece of percussion.
The gated squarewave synth is good. It brings a higher octave into the mix. That way, it doesn't seem like everything is competing for the same low end. Which, sometimes, I'm guilty of myself.
Third, the overall mix. It's very clear. It's nice and wide. Everything seems to be sitting exactly where it should be. Nothing is clipping, or ducking. The hats are crystal with no sizzle, the kick is nice and deep without squashing everything else.
The vocals are sitting perfectly front and center. This is a good mix. My only complaint is that it's only a minute long. Keep working on this until it's at least a solid 3 and a half minutes, dude.
Fourth, your presentation of yourself to us, the listeners.
You have what I refer to as the "Bullshit Check Off List."
That's where, instead of just stepping up and saying, "this is my work. Enjoy it!" You list off all the things you don't like about it, or that you feel isn't good enough. That just puts all of the flaws into the minds of the listener, and as they listen to it, they can check off all the bullshit that you listed. Your job as the creator is to create for us to hear. Your job is not to decide if we should like it or not. 99.9% of the time, my friend, nobody will even catch the mistakes that you think will ruin it. I can't tell you how many times I've posted a track with a cringe in the back of my mind, only to have comments of the highest praise from some of the most talented and respected members here. What I'm saying is, if they didn't catch it and say anything, then it wasn't anything to worry about. Do yourself a favor, and toss the clipboard.
Alright, man. I've been up on this soapbox long enough. Bottom line, dude...with this track as my only exposure to your work, I'd say you have a pretty good handle on what you're doing. Get yourself a little confidence, and keep doing it.
well thanks for the feedback. I only point out my flaws in my work because they are prominent to me, they stick out more than whats good about the track but I guess thats how it is for most artists but your right confidence is key. thanks for taking the time to let me know what you thought about it, I enjoy seeing other peoples thoughts about my stuff. I might in the future work on some more tracks w vocals but because I was sort of experimenting I didn't really see it as good as the rest of my stuff, thats why I uploaded it, so I could see if other people thought if it was good or not because I've never considered myself a rapper before. I'm glad to see you think different. ill definitely consider making this longer or making some other tracks. thanks again!
Thanks man, as embarrassing as it is I make my music in GarageBand so mastering isn't really good. soon I'm getting an upgrade now that I'm taking my music a bit more seriously so I hope my tracks sound clearer in the future.
I absolutely love this track and would love to try some jazzy vox on it, let me know if you're down to let me try it out! i'd be more than happy to send you some of my work. Let me know, looking forward to hearing from you!
ill definitely let you get the track ill just change it to commenters can download, glad you like the track. if you want to send me some track id love to hear them just contact me at Specz290@gail.com. thanks :)
I like this strange thing, but mix-wise I think it could use some tweaks. The overall volume is way low, and to me the vocals should come up in volume relative to the beat. Even turned way up in volume, I still struggled to hear the vocals. There's something strange and wonderful here but I want to be able to here it better.
OK wow I was actually kinda nervous haha, I'm super happy you like it. Thanks a ton because I couldn't have finished it without you and other people giving advice, guess thats what this whole websites about though. thanks again :)
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Let me start with the fact that this isnt my genre of choice, so I don't have a very extensive knowledge on the in's and out's of what it's supposed to sound like.
With that being said, here are my thoughts:
First, your voice. I don't know why you seem to think it's not good. It's clear, you're on time, the rythm fits the beat, you're projection is strong. You don't seem to be hesitating. Dude, that's your voice. Embrace it. Based on what I heard, you ARE a rapper. Run with it, amigo.
Second, the music. Again, I don't know the genre, so I'm listeneing with fresh ears.
Lets start with the beat. It's very minimal. Which is a good thing. It's not crowding the place up. Even with its minimalism, it's still varied, so it doesn't get boring. I don't know if you're using loops, or if you programmed them yourself. If you did program them, excellent work. If they are loops, excellent choice.
I dig the use of the vocal sample. It's almost like another piece of percussion.
The gated squarewave synth is good. It brings a higher octave into the mix. That way, it doesn't seem like everything is competing for the same low end. Which, sometimes, I'm guilty of myself.
Third, the overall mix. It's very clear. It's nice and wide. Everything seems to be sitting exactly where it should be. Nothing is clipping, or ducking. The hats are crystal with no sizzle, the kick is nice and deep without squashing everything else.
The vocals are sitting perfectly front and center. This is a good mix. My only complaint is that it's only a minute long. Keep working on this until it's at least a solid 3 and a half minutes, dude.
Fourth, your presentation of yourself to us, the listeners.
You have what I refer to as the "Bullshit Check Off List."
That's where, instead of just stepping up and saying, "this is my work. Enjoy it!" You list off all the things you don't like about it, or that you feel isn't good enough. That just puts all of the flaws into the minds of the listener, and as they listen to it, they can check off all the bullshit that you listed. Your job as the creator is to create for us to hear. Your job is not to decide if we should like it or not. 99.9% of the time, my friend, nobody will even catch the mistakes that you think will ruin it. I can't tell you how many times I've posted a track with a cringe in the back of my mind, only to have comments of the highest praise from some of the most talented and respected members here. What I'm saying is, if they didn't catch it and say anything, then it wasn't anything to worry about. Do yourself a favor, and toss the clipboard.
Alright, man. I've been up on this soapbox long enough. Bottom line, dude...with this track as my only exposure to your work, I'd say you have a pretty good handle on what you're doing. Get yourself a little confidence, and keep doing it.
Take care.
V
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Super peaceful vibe! The additions you made are on point. All of them.
I'm going to be starting a new project soon, I'll see what I can put down on this.
Thanks for the share and damn good job.
-T2