The complainers in the comments, what they really are saying is, they aren't creative or skilled enough for something like this. Your equipment is fine, with some edits, and a good choice of cuts, edits, beats. This has a Hook, the screamo just needs something to match the vibe, but the grunge, has much potential. Call me brave, but it works well with the pitch -5 and breath cutting to match, seems to work well with EDM style.
on Last goodbye by MetalEd