Hi, Bloomonkey! Hello from Ottawa! Nice to meet you! (Inverness is one our our favourite places in Scotland, especially the River Walk.)
Saw your post in the forum and took a listen to your track. I agree with Bear on most of his comments. I liked the way you introduced different elements as the track progressed. Panning is good. I didn't hear it more pronounced on the left side, but probably worth checking how your Master level meters are looking in Logic. (I use Logic as well.) I was pleased to see that you had quite a good bit of dynamic range in the track. It doesn't just max out continuously in the wave form display.
That said, I do have some suggestions. First: there are only two chords in the track, played repeatedly by the synth pad. The other elements do help to make the track not overwhelming repetitive and boring, but it really would be improved by adding in at least one additional chord progression.
Second, I also think there's no variation in the drum pattern throughout the track, at least not enough to be noticeable. I'm guilty of the same thing in my tracks, but your track really needs more elements that will maintain interest. So, I'd consider layering some other drum/percussion patterns at points. Not sure what you have other than Ultrabeat (the drum synth that comes with Logic), but it actually has lots of patterns as presets and is easy to program patterns from scratch.
I think the bass line is good, but should be more pronounced in the mix. It is submerged relative to the two-chord pad part. The timbre of the bass patch is OK, but in addition to increasing the level in the mix, you might experiment with EQ settings to give it a bit more bite and some compression also if you don't have that already on the bass track.
You can't go wrong with using one of Patricia's vocals. If you create an arrangement with an additional chord progression, you might be able to use something else from her acapella, not just repeat the same phrase.
Overall, I think the mix is a bit muddy, largely due I think to the prominence of the synth pad which dominates the middle to upper low frequency range. I would experiment with EQing the synth pad track to make room for the bass line and reduce the level of the synth pad track in the mix as well, relative to other parts.
Those are my comments, for what it's worth. I did like the track. I'd say it represents a good foundation. Needs a little bit of fine-tuning of the mix and, as Bear also said, a tempo or chord change (I favour a chord progression change) to make the arrangement even more engaging for the listener.
Hi Eric, Ottowa! Thats awesome, so you have been to Inverness?! Not many people have heard of it strangely, the river and canal walk is lovely here.
And thanks for the great input, I really appreciate the time you took to reply, it's exactly the kind of feedback I am looking for and to hear a different perspective really helps.
I totally agree about the beat, its something I have been trying to improve on lately so will work on a variation to add in. And also will attempt adding a 3rd or 4th Chord as well, I did toy with it originally but couldnt find the right chord to change to at the time, but I will give it another bash.
And will also play with the EQ settings over all too, of course.
Great advice and thanks again, hope Ottowa is sunny ;-)
Nice work here. I think the mix is actually pretty good. I like the panning on the piano/bell synth (it has some really nice movement from left to right). The pad on both intro sections could possibly use a bit wider stereo field. Also, it could be my ancient ears, but most of the instruments seem to be centered or skewed to the left, leaving the right side of things seeming a little neglected (I hope that makes sense - it could just be my hearing too, haha). I did enjoy this a lot and I'm a fan of good chilled music. All in all, it was an enjoyable listen and your production skills are really pretty good. Compositionally it was also Well done. If you wanted to get crazy you could throw a tempo or chord change in the middle and then transition back. There are lots of changes you could do, but you could also just leave it as it is...it's a solid effort. I hope all is well.
This is nice! Relaxing vibe and I like the mix too. So many audible textures and layers to sink into and float around in. Yeah, so you did your job well, I'm certainly more chilled out than earlier, cool.
so this is how they houseparty at Loch Ness ... very cool. It's got a feel of original chicago house but is also quite modern. Love it. Best regards, Michael.
Hi heath, cheers for the comment. Yeah, I was trying to keep the relationship between the two sections but change it up to something completely different at the same time, hope it worked.
I'm usually not a fan of house music, but this is very nice. Mellow with a variety of layers to hold interest. I also like the subtle way you used the vocals.
Ableton always has great sounds, and comes out as a quality mix. You did a good job with creating a mood here. I like how the listener can sit back and get lost thinking of different things.
Hi Royalnation. Great comment thank you, that's exactly what I was hoping for, a chill out track you can close the eyes too and tap your foot. Glad you liked it.
A really great laid back feel to this track, Bloomonkey! Must have something to do with the way the river flows through the banks and under the bridge at Inverness. :) Definitely one of our favourite places in Scotland!
As I have said in comment's I've made on other tracks, if I hear a vocal melody line right away when I hear a track that tell's me its got something special. At least to my ears. I'm kind of old school about that, I guess.
Anyway, I got a nice R&B melody line playing in my head right away, so as far as I'm concerned, you did something right with this one.
I'd like it to have an additional chord progression for at least one more section to the song, but that can be hard to accomplish when the song is built on a stand-alone loop. Not sure if Danke provided anything more that would work with it. I should check that out, I guess. But, if left as a funk tune, it can work just as is.
Hi Eric, Great comments thank you, yes Inverness is a great place to live, the highlands is a relaxing area for sure.
Yeah I looked for another melody to go with it but, I am really still learning and decided to keep just the one until I get better at constructing a proper tune lol.
Great advice though thanks, its nice to hear peoples thoughts on what might make my music better.
Commented on Do you love me by bloomonkey
Hi, Bloomonkey! Hello from Ottawa! Nice to meet you! (Inverness is one our our favourite places in Scotland, especially the River Walk.)
Saw your post in the forum and took a listen to your track. I agree with Bear on most of his comments. I liked the way you introduced different elements as the track progressed. Panning is good. I didn't hear it more pronounced on the left side, but probably worth checking how your Master level meters are looking in Logic. (I use Logic as well.) I was pleased to see that you had quite a good bit of dynamic range in the track. It doesn't just max out continuously in the wave form display.
That said, I do have some suggestions. First: there are only two chords in the track, played repeatedly by the synth pad. The other elements do help to make the track not overwhelming repetitive and boring, but it really would be improved by adding in at least one additional chord progression.
Second, I also think there's no variation in the drum pattern throughout the track, at least not enough to be noticeable. I'm guilty of the same thing in my tracks, but your track really needs more elements that will maintain interest. So, I'd consider layering some other drum/percussion patterns at points. Not sure what you have other than Ultrabeat (the drum synth that comes with Logic), but it actually has lots of patterns as presets and is easy to program patterns from scratch.
I think the bass line is good, but should be more pronounced in the mix. It is submerged relative to the two-chord pad part. The timbre of the bass patch is OK, but in addition to increasing the level in the mix, you might experiment with EQ settings to give it a bit more bite and some compression also if you don't have that already on the bass track.
You can't go wrong with using one of Patricia's vocals. If you create an arrangement with an additional chord progression, you might be able to use something else from her acapella, not just repeat the same phrase.
Overall, I think the mix is a bit muddy, largely due I think to the prominence of the synth pad which dominates the middle to upper low frequency range. I would experiment with EQing the synth pad track to make room for the bass line and reduce the level of the synth pad track in the mix as well, relative to other parts.
Those are my comments, for what it's worth. I did like the track. I'd say it represents a good foundation. Needs a little bit of fine-tuning of the mix and, as Bear also said, a tempo or chord change (I favour a chord progression change) to make the arrangement even more engaging for the listener.
Eric
Commented on Do you love me by bloomonkey
Nice work here. I think the mix is actually pretty good. I like the panning on the piano/bell synth (it has some really nice movement from left to right). The pad on both intro sections could possibly use a bit wider stereo field. Also, it could be my ancient ears, but most of the instruments seem to be centered or skewed to the left, leaving the right side of things seeming a little neglected (I hope that makes sense - it could just be my hearing too, haha). I did enjoy this a lot and I'm a fan of good chilled music. All in all, it was an enjoyable listen and your production skills are really pretty good. Compositionally it was also Well done. If you wanted to get crazy you could throw a tempo or chord change in the middle and then transition back. There are lots of changes you could do, but you could also just leave it as it is...it's a solid effort. I hope all is well.
Bear
Commented on Bloomonkey Trip Hop by bloomonkey
fresh!! great work
Commented on Midsummer Moments by bloomonkey
Nice work. Incredible bass!
Commented on Midsummer Moments by bloomonkey
This is nice! Relaxing vibe and I like the mix too. So many audible textures and layers to sink into and float around in. Yeah, so you did your job well, I'm certainly more chilled out than earlier, cool.
Wayne
Commented on A New Day by bloomonkey
I just opened my channel in YouTube so soon I will upload new video with your song
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8Zl9tjbootk
Commented on A New Day by bloomonkey
I really like this track, perfect for my video
Commented on A New Day by bloomonkey
Nice work.
Commented on A New Day by bloomonkey
Bella
Commented on A New Day by bloomonkey
absolute cool track ... relaxing, traveling music in car ... downloaded for that ... thank you ...
fistbump, Danke
Commented on bloomonkey deephouse - the witching hour by bloomonkey
awesome just awesome
Commented on Bloomonkey Chill Trance - The Morning Comes by bloomonkey
im curious to know what u used for the kicks.
Commented on Bloomonkey Chilled house - dreams of hope by bloomonkey
Hey Bloomonkey,
so this is how they houseparty at Loch Ness ... very cool. It's got a feel of original chicago house but is also quite modern. Love it. Best regards, Michael.
Commented on bloomonkey chilled house - the concerto of chill by bloomonkey
Bro your tracks are insane ! keep pushing, full support!
Commented on bloomonkey deephouse - the witching hour by bloomonkey
This track has a great energy and interesting sound profile. Really enjoyed this banger! Time well spent on a job well done. Thanks for sharing.
Commented on bloomonkey deephouse - the witching hour by bloomonkey
deep house is way far from me but this is a super cool and chill song...absolute fav...
handshake, Danke
Commented on Bloomonkey Chillout House - My day is done by bloomonkey
Ooh, the sections are unique but fit
Commented on Bloomonkey Chillout House - My day is done by bloomonkey
I like the change at 2:08. It's a subtle change, but it drastically changed the mood. Very cool.
Commented on bloomonkey Deep Chilled House by bloomonkey
I'm usually not a fan of house music, but this is very nice. Mellow with a variety of layers to hold interest. I also like the subtle way you used the vocals.
Commented on bloomonkey Deep Chilled House by bloomonkey
Nice soft beat & keys. Cool synth. Love the riser break & vocal at 1;35. Rather enjoyed this one. Great work.
Commented on bloomonkey Deep Chilled House by bloomonkey
Ableton always has great sounds, and comes out as a quality mix. You did a good job with creating a mood here. I like how the listener can sit back and get lost thinking of different things.
Commented on Bloomonkey Chilled Funky House by bloomonkey
A really great laid back feel to this track, Bloomonkey! Must have something to do with the way the river flows through the banks and under the bridge at Inverness. :) Definitely one of our favourite places in Scotland!
As I have said in comment's I've made on other tracks, if I hear a vocal melody line right away when I hear a track that tell's me its got something special. At least to my ears. I'm kind of old school about that, I guess.
Anyway, I got a nice R&B melody line playing in my head right away, so as far as I'm concerned, you did something right with this one.
I'd like it to have an additional chord progression for at least one more section to the song, but that can be hard to accomplish when the song is built on a stand-alone loop. Not sure if Danke provided anything more that would work with it. I should check that out, I guess. But, if left as a funk tune, it can work just as is.
Anyway, very nice work. I enjoyed it greatly.
Eric
Commented on Bloomonkey Trip Hop by bloomonkey
I also put it in my top five looperman preferred track some month ago, follow the link below to check it out. Enjoy!
https://www.looperman.com/forum/thread/182742/what-are-your-favourite-tracks-on-looperman?page=5
Commented on Bloomonkey Chilled Funky House by bloomonkey
cool tune...funky, groovy, dancy...
the middle part with the speech is a great idea to break that repetitiveness...
handshake, Danke
Commented on Bloomonkey Trip Hop by bloomonkey
Great work! My head started to move instantly!