Hello , I really loved the track . you are amazing .
few months ago , you had a true criticism about my track , that was right . you told me that I'm very influenced by Behnam's music , and that was a good comment , so I've changed . I'll be glad to see what you think about this one please:
This should have gotten more traction - like many of your tracks it is seriously good but needs some tweaking and production. Haven't seen any new tracks since July - hope you are continuing to produce - you have great talent. -clindsay
This Track Is Pretty Good. The mixing Could use Some Tweaking Though. I Like How The Vocals Sound Like They're A Part Of the Instrumental. I've Never Heard Any Of Your Songs before, But After Hearing This I Would Hope You Post More. Keep It Up!
- Billion
Also, If You Could Check Out My Tracks "Anytime" And "When I'm Gone" & Leave Some Feedback I'd Appreciate That.
Hey S.J...this is better by far that the stuff my car radio has been playing....and the mix sounds fine to me (although that is coming from an old guy with fading ears haha)...enjoyed the listen...and I agree with Orlando..we could use more of your music...but please get yourself a real comfortable chair.....cheers....Ed
Hi Ed! Ha ha the chair...yes, have to get an other one. Thanks for the listen, I believe your ears are just fine, probably hearing more than mine. But this one really has some timing issues and a lot of other flaws to be fixed some rainy day.
I wish you a happy and delightful summer! Cheers// SJ =)
Tjena Orlando! I've been busy working and too tired for everything but this is the second day of my summer vacation and TADAAA - here I am...having back pain already because of the uncomfortable chair I'm sitting on infront of the computer for several hours but hey, it's worth it! Not happy with the mix yet though but my ears are bleeding. To be continued.
Thanks for listening, I've missed You and all the others - just listening to your song now, sounding amazing as always!
You did but it's only the very small and unspectacular prize of a few lines of thoughts from me*. However, you are free to keep that prize and cherish it forever. Perhaps have it printed out, framed and hung on the wall.
Anyway, thanks for letting me know about that cool guitar loop. I should have guessed it was guitar though it does also have an unusual sound, which is probably the sidechaining effect. You've used it very well.
1:07 vocal rise is very cool. Such a pure and beautiful note.
1:24-1:30 some audio pop problems as you cut the samples off. You can make a more professional job of this by smoothing out those slightly awkward and untidy edits.
1:38 nice change again. Good move to the ride cymbal.
2:05 I don't think you should go back to that section as you've done as it's pretty much exactly the same thing as before at 0:47. Still good but I'd like to either not have it there at all or have it there but with more variation eg another part added on top.
Actually, that's my only real criticism of the track - that there's a bit too much repetition of the same parts in the same way as heard earlier. They're all good parts/sections but that's just my particular "hard to please" criticism. Hey, there's always room for improvement, even when you come up with a fine creation such as this.
Is the piano the one thing you're playing on here?
Ha ha thanks for these few precious lines! I'm happy with my prize and will maybe print it out and frame it. But just maybe. Audio pops and repetition noted. About the piano, no this is entirely made out of loops. I just twisted the piano sample from the beginning and happend to make it sound, as Steve put it, in "my" style.
Thanks again and sorry for late replay, I've been busy trying to write a novel (or a very very very long text?). Cheers!
Greetings thats a cool music specially that vocal line and that rhythm change in 0:46, was cool and in 1:22 you got a cool debut for the drums Kind regards J_*
Wow, hearing some of my stuff back is nice but this is just sick! The riff is made with an electric gitar sample. Funny thing is that the dog on my avatar is the one who made it as it is by jumping on my stuff like a monkey. Many thanks for sharing this!
This is seriously nice. Easy to get lost into listening too. It's eclectic and changing. Love that you chose silence at 1:23. Percussion syncopation is nice at the end as well. well done song and good interpretation of the diverse loops. Steve. (And I see you snuck in your piano style at the end as well)..
This is a rather cool piece of music, with some obviously skilful arranging of these various loops.
Up to 0:47 is kind of like its own track and then there's a weird, glitchy bass section and then 0:57 that is one killer riff! Which instrument is that? So damn funky, and with some real menace.
1:16 drum fills are great and make me think of 80s hip hop.
Damn, this is so enjoyable! I'm a little busy now so will return later to describe in more detail this loop masterpiece.
Thanks! I think we both have good ears, yours might be a little better though. =D Nice to hear you liked this, I really love those loops. They stand on their own, I didn't do that much, really.
Well S.J....you did a seriously good job of pulling this all together...like the first half best I think...has a bit of R&B flavour but I`m really impressed with how you brought so many elements into the kix and still made them all not only very coherent in it but also how they sit so clearly in quite a big mix...this is very cool...enjoyed it....well done...Ed
Hello Ed, long time no hear -haven't heard any of your songs in a while and I'm missing them a lot. I hope all is well with you!
Thanks for listening! This one is all loops from here and some drums I found inside the FL Studio...even the woman singning lives in there. I hope she's not feeling lonely. No seriously, I think I ruined some of the loops, they are popping and clicking a lot, but I'm pretending they are supposed to be, it's actually a very important part of the song. Ha ha! Take care/ SJ =)
OK yes there it is. Nice panning , nice spatial sounds, better control on the Piano re-verbs. Vocals sound nice, bass is better and the percussion fits well. Minimalist perfection. Only thing I would do different is at $;$7 drop the piano and let the vox go accapella and only at the very end do that nice synth thing to end it with the final vocal (sting) Great job though very nice Steve
Hi Steve and thanks again for the feedback! I'm really not satisfied with this one, I accidently compressed away all the dynamics, at least in my ears. But it was a great lesson to try to fix it anyway. And I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Maybe I'll have an other go some day and tweak it even more. Cheers!
It's great that you updated this one in a short time. Impressive how it is different
0:20 - very nice bassline, it sounds like a guitar. I do not like the synth on the left channel very much - it is filling the harmony but somehow it could sound brighter/sharper, at least to me. 0:50 - introducing single piano riff was good and it corresponds nicely with the vox 1:09 - there' is a slight distortion on the vocal track, probably caused again by the compression. 0:17 - your piano sounds like played from the distance and it has some 'pumping' qualities in this particular mix context. Which plugin did you use? Maybe it is good to reduce the reverb and delay. You can also render the single piano track without the effects then import the mixdown and work with the audio only. I do that a lot. The entire project will be definitely played much more stable inside your DAW when you remove plugins. The section starting from around 1:17 may need some adjustments. Snare drum could be louder as well as percussions. 1:58 - new synth but it has quite similar color to the bassline. You can always find some fitting funky guitar loop or something similar here. It might help to fill the space and change positively the feel of the music. . 2:37 - kick is nice but you can introduce some other elements too. There is a synth from 2:50 but it again needs more presence (in my opinion). To me the vocal sounds wide - the rest quite narrow. Also you might consider enhancing hihats and other percussions.
Why do not play let's say a bassline and piano tracks only for example? Then maybe try observe (by ear) the actual space in the frequency range available for each instrument and see how they eventually 'clash' inside the mix. You can somehow separate them. It might be difficult because you tend to use too much of reverb and delay effects. Did you equalize instruments using eq-plugin's presets? It may help a lot - I use presets for eqing sometimes as well.
I hope some of this is useful. Those are just my opinions so do not take it too seriously haha
Congratulations on developing the arrangement into such a nice thing. I enjoyed listening! Best, Alex
Hi Alex, ha ha you really are dedicated to music, I can tell. Thanks a lot for all the advice and giving me an idea of what to do with this. I tried to fix the distortion and pumping issues with mixing down again, rendering to audio files and panning and rearranging and...puuuuuh also tride my hand on a simple mastering with the FL Limiter and...oh no now I forgot the name of the other plug in. Anyway - the result isn't that good but I really, really learned some new things! So it was definitely worth the effort, and kind of fun also. So thanks again. Cheers!
panning instruments will help with the overwhelming of each other. Each instrument should get it's own space. Like double the piano track for example, then pan them out 40 percent each R and L. I double the drums and pan 20 percent R and L.Vocals center. bass center or 10 percent panned L and R to widen it. All personal preference as for how much, which instrument ect. but it helps. Practice makes perfect :p Sounds good. Vocals line up nicely, and I know that can be a challenge sometimes! :D
Very fine work on this one! You are making a significant progressions with your music and I entirely agree with all crucethus' remarks. I want add the 'pumping' issue overkill. It is noticable at 0:50 and 1:04 when excessive compression affects the mix. At least this is what I can hear on headphones. Also I'd love to have more dynamics and natural presence of the instruments but that's just my prefference.
Apart of all that your choice of vocals in fine and I really liked the entire arrangement. It is a lovely song. Best, Alex
Hi Alex, nice to see you here! Pumping issue - noticed. I'm trying to improve this today. the problem is my CPU, it's already clipping in the DAW...hard to fix anything. More Dynamics noted also, I'll try.
I love the arrangement in this track. You strip it back and throw it all back in at the right moments. The play between the vocals and the piano is what really makes the track so interesting. Definitely a favorite.
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vocals really make a track at times and these vocals work very well with this track..well done great track.
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So nice
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Hello , I really loved the track .
you are amazing .
few months ago , you had a true criticism about my track , that was right .
you told me that I'm very influenced by Behnam's music , and that was
a good comment , so I've changed .
I'll be glad to see what you think about this one please:
https://www.looperman.com/tracks/detail/183381#623018
thank you very much for that critical comment .
:)
Elena
Commented on Get up Ft ThaSuspect1 and Farisha by SeriouslyJoking
This should have gotten more traction - like many of your tracks it is seriously good but needs some tweaking and production. Haven't seen any new tracks since July - hope you are continuing to produce - you have great talent.
-clindsay
Commented on High Ft Carrol by SeriouslyJoking
Sound great! :)
Commented on A Long Way To Go - TevySound2 - SJ Remix by SeriouslyJoking
Hi !
I like your track !!!
Thanks for having used my loop !
Thanks a lot !
Fanto8BC
Commented on A Long Way To Go - TevySound2 - SJ Remix by SeriouslyJoking
This Track Is Pretty Good. The mixing Could use Some Tweaking Though. I Like How The Vocals Sound Like They're A Part Of the Instrumental. I've Never Heard Any Of Your Songs before, But After Hearing This I Would Hope You Post More. Keep It Up!
- Billion
Also, If You Could Check Out My Tracks "Anytime" And "When I'm Gone" & Leave Some Feedback I'd Appreciate That.
Commented on A Long Way To Go - TevySound2 - SJ Remix by SeriouslyJoking
Hey S.J...this is better by far that the stuff my car radio has been playing....and the mix sounds fine to me (although that is coming from an old guy with fading ears haha)...enjoyed the listen...and I agree with Orlando..we could use more of your music...but please get yourself a real comfortable chair.....cheers....Ed
Commented on A Long Way To Go - TevySound2 - SJ Remix by SeriouslyJoking
Tjena SJ,
What else can I say than excellent work a usual...:)....but holy moly...where have you been for so long...we need more of your tracks to enjoy...:)
Cheers______Orlando
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Regreetings.
"I feel like I won something"
You did but it's only the very small and unspectacular prize of a few lines of thoughts from me*. However, you are free to keep that prize and cherish it forever. Perhaps have it printed out, framed and hung on the wall.
Anyway, thanks for letting me know about that cool guitar loop. I should have guessed it was guitar though it does also have an unusual sound, which is probably the sidechaining effect. You've used it very well.
1:07 vocal rise is very cool. Such a pure and beautiful note.
1:24-1:30 some audio pop problems as you cut the samples off. You can make a more professional job of this by smoothing out those slightly awkward and untidy edits.
1:38 nice change again. Good move to the ride cymbal.
2:05 I don't think you should go back to that section as you've done as it's pretty much exactly the same thing as before at 0:47. Still good but I'd like to either not have it there at all or have it there but with more variation eg another part added on top.
Actually, that's my only real criticism of the track - that there's a bit too much repetition of the same parts in the same way as heard earlier. They're all good parts/sections but that's just my particular "hard to please" criticism. Hey, there's always room for improvement, even when you come up with a fine creation such as this.
Is the piano the one thing you're playing on here?
Congrats again.
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Greetings
thats a cool music specially that vocal line
and that rhythm change in 0:46, was cool
and in 1:22 you got a cool debut for the drums
Kind regards
J_*
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Wow, hearing some of my stuff back is nice but this is just sick! The riff is made with an electric gitar sample. Funny thing is that the dog on my avatar is the one who made it as it is by jumping on my stuff like a monkey. Many thanks for sharing this!
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
This is seriously nice. Easy to get lost into listening too. It's eclectic and changing. Love that you chose silence at 1:23. Percussion syncopation is nice at the end as well. well done song and good interpretation of the diverse loops.
Steve. (And I see you snuck in your piano style at the end as well)..
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Hello.
This is a rather cool piece of music, with some obviously skilful arranging of these various loops.
Up to 0:47 is kind of like its own track and then there's a weird, glitchy bass section and then 0:57 that is one killer riff! Which instrument is that? So damn funky, and with some real menace.
1:16 drum fills are great and make me think of 80s hip hop.
Damn, this is so enjoyable! I'm a little busy now so will return later to describe in more detail this loop masterpiece.
A definite favourite for me.
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Hi SJ!
Brilliant work...special tasted chill out with lots of connected elements...how you put together those cool loops is incredible...great job on this...
Greetings, Danke
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Its crazy how you create a song like this ,i enjoyed this really. You have good ears.
Wonderful
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Enjoyed this piece a lot. You have a great sense of structure, and how to vary the music to hold the ear, and where to work the breaks. Dug it.
Commented on Cookies For Dinner by SeriouslyJoking
Well S.J....you did a seriously good job of pulling this all together...like the first half best I think...has a bit of R&B flavour but I`m really impressed with how you brought so many elements into the kix and still made them all not only very coherent in it but also how they sit so clearly in quite a big mix...this is very cool...enjoyed it....well done...Ed
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
OK yes there it is. Nice panning , nice spatial sounds, better control on the Piano re-verbs. Vocals sound nice, bass is better and the percussion fits well. Minimalist perfection. Only thing I would do different is at $;$7 drop the piano and let the vox go accapella and only at the very end do that nice synth thing to end it with the final vocal (sting) Great job though very nice
Steve
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
hello again again:)
It's great that you updated this one in a short time. Impressive how it is different
0:20 - very nice bassline, it sounds like a guitar. I do not like the synth on the left channel very much - it is filling the harmony but somehow it could sound brighter/sharper, at least to me.
0:50 - introducing single piano riff was good and it corresponds nicely with the vox
1:09 - there' is a slight distortion on the vocal track, probably caused again by the compression.
0:17 - your piano sounds like played from the distance and it has some 'pumping' qualities in this particular mix context. Which plugin did you use? Maybe it is good to reduce the reverb and delay. You can also render the single piano track without the effects then import the mixdown and work with the audio only. I do that a lot. The entire project will be definitely played much more stable inside your DAW when you remove plugins.
The section starting from around 1:17 may need some adjustments. Snare drum could be louder as well as percussions.
1:58 - new synth but it has quite similar color to the bassline. You can always find some fitting funky guitar loop or something similar here. It might help to fill the space and change positively the feel of the music. .
2:37 - kick is nice but you can introduce some other elements too. There is a synth from 2:50 but it again needs more presence (in my opinion). To me the vocal sounds wide - the rest quite narrow. Also you might consider enhancing hihats and other percussions.
Why do not play let's say a bassline and piano tracks only for example? Then maybe try observe (by ear) the actual space in the frequency range available for each instrument and see how they eventually 'clash' inside the mix. You can somehow separate them. It might be difficult because you tend to use too much of reverb and delay effects. Did you equalize instruments using eq-plugin's presets? It may help a lot - I use presets for eqing sometimes as well.
I hope some of this is useful. Those are just my opinions so do not take it too seriously haha
Congratulations on developing the arrangement into such a nice thing. I enjoyed listening!
Best, Alex
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
panning instruments will help with the overwhelming of each other. Each instrument should get it's own space. Like double the piano track for example, then pan them out 40 percent each R and L. I double the drums and pan 20 percent R and L.Vocals center. bass center or 10 percent panned L and R to widen it. All personal preference as for how much, which instrument ect. but it helps. Practice makes perfect :p Sounds good. Vocals line up nicely, and I know that can be a challenge sometimes! :D
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
Crazy vibe! love the vocal, very smooth and good tonal sound off the voice which is pleasant to the ear,
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
hello SJ
Very fine work on this one! You are making a significant progressions with your music and I entirely agree with all crucethus' remarks. I want add the 'pumping' issue overkill. It is noticable at 0:50 and 1:04 when excessive compression affects the mix.
At least this is what I can hear on headphones. Also I'd love to have more dynamics and natural presence of the instruments but that's just my prefference.
Apart of all that your choice of vocals in fine and I really liked the entire arrangement. It is a lovely song. Best, Alex
Commented on Update Needle In The Hay Ft VSlimm FAnalysis by SeriouslyJoking
I love the arrangement in this track. You strip it back and throw it all back in at the right moments. The play between the vocals and the piano is what really makes the track so interesting. Definitely a favorite.
TA