Description : This a true story. So listen closely. I might need some feedback. More spoken word on this but its a good story.

I added some of the lyrics if anybody wants to read along, they did not all fit in the 3000 character box.

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  1. RitajustRita
    RitajustRita on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    Thanks for the lyrics.
    First I want to say that these are the lyrics of someone who really knows how to write and describe.
    Not everyone can do that.
    It is beautiful and honest but sad at the same time.
    I think that especially here on Lm there are a lot of people who understand you because they are each going through the same thing in their own way.
    Music is often a form of therapy,
    an occupation for loneliness and a welcome refuge from problems.
    It's great that you can express that in your own music.
    I tried it myself once as dutch rap...it was terrible lol.
    Again my compliments for the beat and the voice and the lyrics

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Thank you, for the kind words Rita.

    Looperman is great.

    Johnnie

  2. RitajustRita
    RitajustRita on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    Love that beat .
    The voice is perfect on it but my English is to bad to understand everything so i cant say something about that.
    Just a great track.

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Thank you rita.... If you look at the comment I gave to sirefox it is the lyrics in spanish. Which are continuted here.

    2/2

    Solo estoy apaciguando el mensaje que me enviaron/
    Bien podra ser la historia que nos merecemos/
    Ten por seguro que no todo ha sido sol y lluvia/
    Me tom un tiempo dibujarlo as/
    Realmente me pregunto por qu?/
    Debe ser el horario estelar ahora en la imagen ms grande para una historia como la ma/
    Llevado a creer que nadie debera extraarlo, pero eso no lo soluciona/
    El resto se est trabajando, lo admito, no me gusta cmo se ve/
    Esto es absurdo/
    Como un trabajo diario, todos actan como quieren/
    Pero no es decir que tienen /
    Como una intervencin divina, ni siquiera comenzara sin una seal/
    Estaras perdiendo tu tiempo y el mo/
    todo est estigmatizado de todos modos, sers el nio que saca el oro de los tontos /
    cranme, no estara aqu ahora mismo si no me eligieran/
    y maldita sea, estoy solo/
    Se supone que debo ignorar eso hasta que salga en las noticias/
    y no estoy listo para subestimarme o tratar de explicrselo a estas damas/
    es una cosa segura yo en el registro no todo pero/

    no te esfuerces demasiado/
    Quiero el apalancamiento que merezco/
    limpiado mi actuar joven /
    Pasar otro da y me quedar en el limbo enfrentando ms de esos momentos sin redencin por los que lucho/
    mi capital est disminuyendo y estoy tratando de ponerme manos a la obra/
    nada que mostrar, pero tengo mi juventud conmigo /
    como de costumbre los lmites se ponen a prueba junto con mi paciencia/
    Las puertas del cielo en la tierra son esquivas como siempre lo han sido/
    Deseando mucho esperndolo todos estos das/
    qu ms podra tener en mi mente al tener fe en saber que las estrellas se alinearn una vez ms/
    Quiero poder comprometerme con lo que s no apaciguar al sistema/
    ya sabes dile goombada a todas las tonteras que me retienen y me retienen/
    dicindote que estar cerca para hacer el trabajo/
    me sac de quicio sintiendo que no puedo ganar/
    Bueno, cundo?
    como si no pudiera hacer esto, luego de que lo consiga/
    Me imagino que es semnticamente errneo, pero no s, no puedo saber/
    como si mi propsito estuviera en duda se siente como negacin y rechazo/
    un momento desconcertado y no se como olvidarlo/
    me tiene atrapado por los kahunas/
    y es la inspiracin de cada verso que he escrito/
    Necesito ms personas con las que pueda contar/
    tratando de mantener la vida en lnea con la trama/
    solo me preguntaba cundo voy a recibir mi oportunidad/

    Johnnie

  3. sirefox
    sirefox on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    Gran tema amigo Johnnie, me encanta como se desarrolla el coro a lo largo de la pista, el bajo y la batera son impresionantes igual que el sutil piano que acompaa la meloda. Tu voz es genial y tiene mucho sentimiento, me hubiera gustado que hubieras puesto la letra ya que no entiendo el ingles y no s lo que dices, pero segn mis compaeros es una historia brillante. Que tengas un buen da compaero. Paz y salud.

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Gracias por las palabras amables. Estas son algunas de las letras, no puedo incluirlas todas aqu, continuar en el hilo de Ritas.

    Tengo problemas que no puedo resolver por mi cuenta/
    Estoy loco porque me pegaron unos fantasmas en los hombros/
    En forma de dos leyendas de rap/
    Los ms grandes y mejores/
    Y eso estaba fuera de mi control pero no obstante contarlo/
    No puedo comenzar a enfatizar que no puedo comenzar a descartarlo como algo menos que un giro del destino para ayudarnos hacia el destino/
    No estoy seguro de por qu necesitamos que sea yo, pero lo hacemos/
    as que presta odo, echa una mano/
    realmente est destinado a ser/
    parece una tontera seguir todo lo dems como si fuera una eleccin para el papel/
    el cansancio de la espera de la gloria me arrastra cada vez ms/
    empezando a cuestionar todas mis elecciones de vida/
    la escuela con los centavos de mis padres parece mejor que el salario mnimo, as que eso es lo que he estado haciendo/
    caramba, supongo que tengo suerte, pero no puedo imaginar trabajar con mi ttulo/
    este verso cambia algo pero no lo suficiente/
    Todo lo que puedo pensar es en cundo va a ser/
    no me culpes por estar en el registro /
    dame el respeto que merezco/
    Necesito la atencin para no aburrirme/
    como dice la leyenda, todava tengo que ser liberado por la gente/
    Ests en negacin o ests pendiente del caso?
    Estoy demasiado lejos en la delantera, no te molestes en perseguirlo/
    No es una pelea justa, la luz de cal est siendo manipulada para un nio /

  4. kingmt77
    kingmt77 on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    John, so I hear the Your Perspective and story told on the matters of the heart that pertain to the human experience at this stage of life. And how youre living through it .Translating the issues of the heart is a great gift and at this point Ill echo a comment I made on one of your earlier tracks, and that you come across honest and believable for sure. On point mix and instrumentation perfect for your story. Thanks for sharing the things that matter with you.
    M.T.

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    M.T. Thanks for the big thought out comment.

    Its just such a crazy experience that happened, rest assured I was high, I legit had Wiz Kahlifa, pop in on my left shoulder say "I'm Wiz", and Drake pop in on my right shoulder and say "I'm Drake", I didn't even know who Drake was And then Wiz, said make music. Then they were gone.

    That was a while ago now, but its the reason I rap and all else feels like I'm chosen.

  5. CINCOCENT
    CINCOCENT on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    You had me from the get-go
    Oh dang, nice flow!
    Haven't seen you around here but now I know who you are I see you!

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Thank you, for the listen. Glad you enjoyed it.

    Johnnie

  6. theHumps
    theHumps on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    Is there a really short delay on the vocals? Interesting effect. I like the backups, neat! Cool track, cool lyrics. I like songs about life, in general. A little introspection, meditation on one's self is alway good.

    Wayne

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Wayne, I use a tiny amount of a "Chorus" effect perhaps the inner workings are a delay effect, it just makes it sound a little cleaner. Yes, a very meditative track.

    Thanks for the listen.

    Johnnie

  7. DijamMusic
    DijamMusic on Thu 17th Feb 2022 - 6 months ago

    Hey Johnnie.
    This is a brilliant Story mate.
    Your voice is unique.
    Well done mate.
    Faves
    Maj

    JohnSmokey
    Reply by JohnSmokey

    Thanks you, for the listen.

    Glad my voice does it for you.

    Johnnie

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